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12-20-03, 04:14 AM | #1 | ||||||
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My first one..dont forget to comment
IP: 8001 30D1
Sup guyz, my first rap here..short..but..
now its da right time you face da ultimate elite, so get ur candy ass ready for a sticky white treat, whenever u'll rap me u'l feel da trepidition, surrender now kid or escalate da situation, you 13 y/0 still try'n hard for masturbation? it happens dude, ppl go thru humiliation, I'll extend it later...what do you guys think? |
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12-20-03, 05:22 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 8001 30D1
I'm a complete n00b from other side of the world.... :-/
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12-20-03, 10:19 AM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 438E 522F
well first of all its tooo short
vocabs not bad need to structure it in bars more multis n internals shud do it but is aight keep tryin n extend it |
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12-20-03, 11:18 AM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 6FDC 23CB
You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.
But this needs some work....like SWIFT said you should try to make your drops a little longer so we can give you better feedback on it....your structure was alright, it could be touched up some though....your vocab was good....but just keep at it. |
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12-20-03, 01:14 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 8001 30D1
cheers thanks, I'll work on it
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12-20-03, 03:03 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 399E F0FD
Good for a newbie. The flow was good. Elevation was right on. Add more to this verse and add two more. Thrwo in a chorus. You will have a song
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12-20-03, 04:50 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: C430 9FB2
i liked liked it for your first one, i would really have to see the longer one to give you an up honest oppinion, but keep workin on it
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12-20-03, 07:03 PM | #8 | ||||
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
You posted back without links, this is Closed...Get links next time.
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