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05-09-04, 10:06 PM | #1 | |||||||
i changed my title !!
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counTREE jay vs. Native
IP: 275E DC37
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battles go up sunday night around 10:00 pm eastern check in by wedsday verses due by thrusday votes due by the next sunday around 9:00pm eastern rules: no dick riding no crew votes no freeposting that's what the beef thread is for if you do it here more then three times your dq'd no feeding off of other guys verse bar limits: 4 bar min. 16 bar max.
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05-09-04, 10:12 PM | #2 | |||
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IP: 6DCA 81D9
You can't win
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05-10-04, 08:27 AM | #3 | |||||||
The New King Of New York
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IP: 03BD 6ECD
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05-13-04, 11:45 AM | #4 | |||||||
The New King Of New York
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IP: 03BD 6ECD
This living legend might make me famous, or put me to shame,
Would say it, but so many aliases, I keep forgettin' your name. You flipped the coin, musta lost it, didn't know what you was facin', You can be the text god, but I'm writin' the Book of Revelations. Claim how you the greatest, but I Still haven't seen that it's true, Post a thread to help people out, they said the same thing as you. (Fuck It) In fact all I hear you do is talk, like you think the best m.c. eva born, If that was the case, then how come you gotta toot your own horn? You were a legend on Original, but on this version, what have you done? I've seen you Cryin' 4 Number 2, But right now you talkin' to Number 1. So you're great in text, technically sound, heard you got great structure, But you still have no backbone or hot lyrics, like your disc is ruptured. Since 8 Mile white kiddz think they can rap, I call it da Eminem Virus, Kidz, if you got a mug like that, that's a good indication not to try this. So you claim to be a Native to the rap game, which is a nice thing to be, But as it says in my profile, I am Hip-Hop, and you ain't in my family tree. Chrit, he ain't the shit, drops lines lackin' in wit, time for you to git. Ain't an m.c., lines don't hit like a Hammer, so you ain't 2 Legit to quit. I know you gotta be a cokehead, 'cause I see you blowin' your lines, Go to Florida, retire wit old people, everyone knows your past your prime. I understand you're a legend, but you shouldn't have disrespected me Native, But I bet you prolly drop apologies just like your style............ .................................................. ........................Belated. ~CJ~ Last edited by CounTREE Jay : 05-13-04 at 11:50 AM. Reason: Links were fucked |
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05-13-04, 01:25 PM | #5 | |||
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IP: 6DCA 81D9
I'm crackin ur spine, Jay is tha epitome of wackness defined...
...Shit, u couldn't be born ill if Cancer wuz ur Zodiac sign Jay sucks tha best, loves givin nuthin but head... ...So I'll leave him like Frankenstien, wit nuts in his neck & I doubt ur fables, I get tons of pussy while this jock's unable... ...Because Countree holds virgin records, and I aint talkin bout tha label I rattle squads, so stick to open mics, u ain't no battle-god... ...Cuz wit ur ancient metaphors, all u do is fuckin babylon Talkin shit in all the threads, I'm tired of you wack fucks... ...and yeah its a double meaning when I exclaim Countree sucks! Come to my level, then in the balance you can hang... ...Cause anyone with talent wouldnt have more links than a chain gang Shit we knows its true, I've always been miles above ya... ...And since Talib's quality, you must take after your mother So I'll bust ya, leave you nameless, stabbed battered and scarred... ...You're almost famous? congrats, after this beating now you are
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05-13-04, 01:57 PM | #6 | |||||
...i'm da nicest...
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IP: 322E 3373
This living legend might make me famous, or put me to shame,
Would say it, but so many aliases, I keep forgettin' your name. HAHA,YEA THATS TRUE PRETTY GOOD PERSONAL..I THINK U COULD'VE MADE A BETTER PUNCH WITH THAT THOUGH You flipped the coin, musta lost it, didn't know what you was facin', You can be the text god, but I'm writin' the Book of Revelations. UMM,NOT HARD HITTING..... Claim how you the greatest, but I Still haven't seen that it's true, Post a thread to help people out, they said the same thing as you. (Fuck It) AGAIN ITS PERSONAL,BUT DIDNT HIT HARD FOR ME.... In fact all I hear you do is talk, like you think the best m.c. eva born, If that was the case, then how come you gotta toot your own horn? LOL,YEA TRUE HE HAS TO,BUT U COULD'VE MADE A MUCH BETTER PUNCH WITH "TOOT HIS OWN HORN"..SHOWS U'RE NOT SPITTIN ON THAT LEVEL YET SON You were a legend on Original, but on this version, what have you done? I've seen you Cryin' 4 Number 2, But right now you talkin' to Number 1. LOL,YEA IT WAS PRETTY GAY THAT HE SAID HE SHOULD BE IN PPL'S TOP 2...LOL..CONTRADICTING.,SAYIN HE'S THE BEST,BUT THEN HE'S SAYIN HE SHOULD BE IN TOP 2 So you're great in text, technically sound, heard you got great structure, But you still have no backbone or hot lyrics, like your disc is ruptured. PRETTY GOOD PUNCH.... Since 8 Mile white kiddz think they can rap, I call it da Eminem Virus, Kidz, if you got a mug like that, that's a good indication not to try this. ROFL.......UM......U COULD'VE HIT HIM WAAAAAAAAAAAAY HARDER WITH HIS PIC,N COUNTRY,U SHOULDA POSTED THE ACTUAL PIC HERE,CUZ WHOEVER ISNT ON OLD RB, THEY GOTTA REGISTER,N IF THEY ARE,THEY NEED TO SIGN IN TO SEE IT......BUT STILL FUNNY....I'VE SEEN A FUNNIER PIC OF HIM BEFORE THOUGH......... So you claim to be a Native to the rap game, which is a nice thing to be, But as it says in my profile, I am Hip-Hop, and you ain't in my family tree. WEAK Chrit, he ain't the shit, drops lines lackin' in wit, time for you to git. Ain't an m.c., lines don't hit like a Hammer, so you ain't 2 Legit to quit. SUCKS......STOP USIN HAMMER LINES!!! I know you gotta be a cokehead, 'cause I see you blowin' your lines, Go to Florida, retire wit old people, everyone knows your past your prime. OK I GUESS I understand you're a legend, but you shouldn't have disrespected me Native, But I bet you prolly drop apologies just like your style............ .................................................. ........................Belated. OK CLOSING I GUESS........... I'm crackin ur spine, Jay is tha epitome of wackness defined... ...Shit, u couldn't be born ill if Cancer wuz ur Zodiac sign NICE TO SEE U ACTUALLY USIN SOME MULTIES LOL........BUT DAMN,NICE PUNCH Jay sucks tha best, loves givin nuthin but head... ...So I'll leave him like Frankenstien, wit nuts in his neck UM,I GET IT BUT I DIDNT REALLY LIKE THIS PUNCH & I doubt ur fables, I get tons of pussy while this jock's unable... ...Because Countree holds virgin records, and I aint talkin bout tha label LOL.....THATS FUNNY I rattle squads, so stick to open mics, u ain't no battle-god... ...Cuz wit ur ancient metaphors, all u do is fuckin babylon GAY......I HATED THAT LINE Talkin shit in all the threads, I'm tired of you wack fucks... ...and yeah its a double meaning when I exclaim Countree sucks! HAHAHAHAHAHA......WHOA,THAT LINE TAKES IT MAN..WISH U HAD A BETTER SET UP LINE,YOU WACK FUCKS/EXCLAIM COUNTREE SUCKS......DOEST FLOW THAT WELL,U COULD EASILY FIND SOMETHING THAT WOULD FLOW BETTER MAN,BUT PUNCH WAS HOT! Come to my level, then in the balance you can hang... ...Cause anyone with talent wouldnt have more links than a chain gang GAY...N ITS KIND OF FEEDING.....N U WERE COMPLAINING ABOUT ME? Shit we knows its true, I've always been miles above you... ...And since Talib's quality, you must take after your mother WTF....UMMM...I DONT GET IT,N EITHER WAY "ABOVE YOU/YOUR MOTHER" DOES NOT RHYME IN ANY WAY SON..... So I'll bust ya, leave you nameless, stabbed battered and scarred... ...You're almost famous? congrats, after this beating now you are GAY ASS WEAK CLOSING...... OK COMMENTARY.......COUNTRY,I WAS KIND OF SURPRISED BY U,THIS IS PROBABLY ONE OF UR BETTER VERSES.....BUT,U DONT KNOW HOW TO MAKE A PUNCH VERY HARD HITTING......THEY HAVE GOOD CONTENT BUT THEY COME OUT WEAK......FEEL ME?U HAD GOOD PERSONALS THOUGH.....U PUT UP A GOOD VERSE WORTH READING....BUT,BY THAT TOOT UR OWN HORN PUNCH,I CAN SEE U ARENT ON THAT LEVEL YET........ NATIVE.........OK,U HAD A FEW REALLY GOOD PUNCHES IN THERE......N UR SHIT SOUNDS ALOT BETTER WHEN U HAVE SOME MULTIES,WHICH U DECIDED TO USE IN SOME OF UR BARS......WHY DONT U USE THEM IN ALL UR SETUP LINES?U MAKE UR SETUP LINES REALLY WEAK MAN,N U LACK MULTIES THAT WOULD MAKE IT FLOW BETTER.....AND,SOMETIMES UR SHIT DOESNT RHYME....AND THAT ONE BAR U HAD,MADE NO SENSE N DIDNT RHYME AT ALL...ITS LIKE SOME PARTS ARE REALLY GOOD,THEN U FALL OFF.....FEEL ME? U NEED CONSISTENCY........MORE MULTIES THROUGHOUT......AIGHT? BUT YEA.....THAT COUNTREE LINE DID IT FOR ME.....THAT WAS FUCKIN HILARIOUS.......THE CANCER LINE WOULD BE MY NUMBER 2,AND VIRGIN RECORDS 3....THE REST WERE EITHER WEAK OR DIDNT LIKE EM........... COUNTRY,U WROTE A VERSE THAT WAS TRUE...BUT U TOLD A STORY MORE THAN U WROTE A BATTLE VERSE...FEEL ME? WORK ON WORDING UR PUNCHES BETTER...... NATIVE,UR CLOSING......WAS REALLY GAY........UM,STAY AWAY FROM LINES THAT JUST BOAST......THEY ARENT HARD HITTING MAN,GET AT UR OPPONENT INSTEAD.....REMEMBER THE ANTHEM LINES U DROPPED FOR MM? SAME THING......GHOSTWRITER LINES N THAT LINE ABOUT THE WHOLE ROSTER COULDNT TAKE U,,THOSE LINES DONT HIT HARD,CLOWNIN A TARGET IS WAY FUNNIER THAN BOASTIN URSELF............................SO YEA,THE REASON I WAS SO HARD ON U WHEN U WERE SAYIN U WERE THE BEST,IS CUZ I SEE AREAS U NEED TO IMPROVE IN......U DO HAVE SOME GOOD PUNCHES.....BUT NOT ALL THE TIME,U GO FROM GOOD TO LAME,N UR FLOW FALLS OFF A LOT,N UR SETUP LINES ARE WEAK,N U LACK MULTIES......N U BOAST TOO MUCH......SO THERE IS MY ADVICE TO U...........HOLLA I VOTE FOR NATIVE IN THIS BATTLE
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05-13-04, 02:48 PM | #7 | ||||
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IP: 7823 EEF2
real tight battle......countree came hard with a gud verse wiv lots of personals n some pretty gud punches, but like sed above some real gud ideas but you cud av come of harder wiv some of ya punches, but overall tight verse, enjoyed it....pz
native - came out wiv a real hot opener, ya flow was gud throughout apart from 2nd to last bar which cud av been beta, but basically u hit wiv harder punches, loved these two lines: 'Jay sucks tha best, loves givin nuthin but head... ...So I'll leave him like Frankenstien, wit nuts in his neck & I doubt ur fables, I get tons of pussy while this jock's unable... ...Because Countree holds virgin records, and I aint talkin bout tha label' had me laughin, gud battle, both brought heat but native took it wiv beta flow n punches, countree took the personals but ya punches were hard enough... v/native
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05-13-04, 03:37 PM | #8 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: D0B1 D2B1
Okay I First Off Gotta Give My Main Reasonf Or Giving This Battle To Countree Jay...
The Reason....this Is Suppsoed To Be A Battle Right////and Neither Emcee Really Did A Battle Countree Told A Story Sort Of Half Ass'd Dissing Him But Then Again Native The Onyl Thign He Did Was Get Two Punches And Basically Boast About Himself.....i Know U Calim You The God But Uh... U Aint That Hot..at Least Not In This Abttle You Wasnt... But As For Breakdown Countree Jay Punches 8/10 Length 8/10 Structure 9/10 Personal 9/10 Wordplay 8/10 Vocab 7/10 49/60 Native: Punches 8/10 Length 8/10 Structure9/10 Personal 7/10 Wordplay 6/10 Vocab 8/10 36/60 Vote For Countree Jay |
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05-13-04, 03:39 PM | #9 | |||
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I had 7 punches... the 8th bar was half punch/half self glorification
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05-13-04, 03:42 PM | #10 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: D0B1 D2B1
It's Called Exaggeration.
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05-13-04, 03:44 PM | #11 | |||
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IP: 6DCA 81D9
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You also must have no idea what proper wordplay is
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05-13-04, 03:51 PM | #12 | |||||
...i'm da nicest...
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IP: 322E 3373
He Had One Barr,the Closing That Was Boasting...the Other Ones I Cant Say They Were ....
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05-13-04, 07:33 PM | #13 | |||||||
DaTrus Is A Bitch!
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IP: D52C 04A2
Aight Check It..
I Read Both Verses, Jay Your Structure Was OFf, But You Came With A Lot OF Personals, But YOu Need To Word Your Shit Better. I Mean You Had Punches In All, But YOu Need Sum Style To Your Shit. Add Sum Nice Metas and Mulits. Native Came Hot, His Verse Was Mad Hot, With Ill and Cancer Zodiac Sign, and The Frankstein nuts in your neck LMAO...I Loved Those Lines..Straight Up..Nice Drop Kid, Been Waiting For Sumthing Like Dat. Good Drops To Both, Stay Dope You Two. Vote - Native HIT UP CHAMPIONSHIP BATTLE ~R~ |
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05-14-04, 12:11 AM | #14 | |||
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IP: 6DCA 81D9
I'm winning
And my old points better be added in for next week.... Should give me my title shot
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05-15-04, 05:44 AM | #15 | ||||
Still Sick
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IP: C102 10C7
RRRROOOOFFFFFLLLLLMMMAAAA @ VC's vote
Native won this Jay's punches were all weak and played and he overused the links I mean..its good with atleast 1 or 2 i the verse but you had it too much besides that..your verse just sucked nothin special about it Native..I've seen you come better.. but this verse was dope I liked the Babylon(Babble on) on line..nice word play and lol @ LK not understand the Talib line he says that Talib was his father and people say I got such and such from my dad....or mother..well he was saying since Talib had skill, he got his qualities from his mother. lol..it was a decent verse though damn you and your title shot match.. v/Native
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