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02-11-04, 07:26 PM | #1 | |||||||
..Soft Focus..
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(soft Focus vs V.O.T.S) Topical 'Rule vs Daz'
IP: 1B3B C284
Topic: Heavon On Earth
Check In Due: Saturday Jan. 14 Verses Due: Tuesday Jan. 17 Good Luck
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02-16-04, 05:07 PM | #2 | |||||||
..Soft Focus..
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IP: 1B3B C284
checkin in....
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02-16-04, 06:31 PM | #3 | ||||
So Tired Of It.
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IP: 49DB ED1D
ready to lose rule?......................................
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02-17-04, 01:55 PM | #4 | |||||||
..Soft Focus..
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IP: 1B3B C284
..Mountains of people die each and every year from diseases But to where they end up after death we have no reasons Do they come back as a different person or creature The same person in a different year but same featers.. Paranoia of emotions run rapidily down cold veins at night After a loved one dies and I believe they're still in my sight Go to bed & cry alone close my eyes to see a odd vision ..Wake Up.. Believe life still exists under the casket is my prediction Tears of denied bliss let me capture images of the past Or future of the man I once talked to showing me contrast Holding his hands out in my dreams but I can't touch Struggling with your demies but your still resembling a crutch Dressed in all white are you an angel now in the heavons Here tobe my guardian & to answer my tears questions Provide me with courage to elavate my angelic passion To smile at me through dreams of positive compassion For nobody believes I still feel your soul or hold our bond People tell me your in the clouds in the heavons beyond Is that true will you speak to me with your voice of power Help me bloom into the sun as does the prettiest flower No answer or beckon just a lost spirite un-united to god Whom I believe underestimated the weather of emotional fog ..Days past I started to realise people died and didn't exist Over the hate of god an the craving of slitting my wriste The visions stopped answers didn't get remotly explained Frowned at my thesis for it was an act of my selfish pain.. Until I started seeing my uncle again in day light activities Didn't react to me I figured it was just my minds creativity No more jumping to conclusion people reacted in sin Told me I was in guilt these actions were bound to begin Interested in why this was happening I'll apt to the show Take it as it is until the string breaks & the memeries go Tears hiddin I left them behind no more aginy taken my pride Pray to god for help to take away the demons deep inside Tricks being played in my head by the emotion achieved Grasping for air but these scenes are taking the air I breath ..I Should Stop Running.. Maybe this is happening for a reason to ensure the love Maybe heavons on earth not in the white clouds above Started going to the hospital to talk to kids in my position Took notes to see they were in my boat just nobody listened A lot of people denied the fact the dead are around us Nobody wants to sound different so the truth isn't a trust It is a painted lie a picture covered in a mask for the dead I'll grasp my visions for souls relive after the wooden bed ..Death is birth boundries are just sometimes denied Interacting with the lost souls shouldn't be deprived For when my uncle died I could see him in dreams Feel him beside me keep hold dead love by any means.. ...Somethings are unexplainable but this is loves work When somebody dies and you still think you see them, don't deny that fact you did, grasp the ability to do so. We share past present & future souls on our home... For heavon is a a place on Earth
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02-17-04, 03:54 PM | #5 | ||||
So Tired Of It.
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IP: 4577 CD9A
long waste of time^^ill do like 28.....
dust settles...empty eyes peirce the guiltless.. cloak that protect me from what i feel rips... yes i still get.....edgy at times for certain... yet the question is pinned....whats behind that curtain?.... am i without purpose.....memories flood of laughs in grass... development of mind...develops in my math class... clock strikes half-past...five....words eject from ejaculation.... and i backpack over the hills of my imagination.... as i master patience.....my consciense execretes through my pores... happy thoughts caress the thoughts of cures with absence of wars... grasping for more....I put time through neglect.... struggling to accept..a world where angels protect your neck... yes i guess.....maybe my understanding is little.... yes life is stroked with death..like a hand on a fiddle... damaging riddles..puzzle me daily as i ride.... with life at my side....i use fate as my guide... question and hide?......struck with a rod... and as i traveled to the store...I swear i saw God... slipped over shod......i encompass my fate... figured it out...So i got a ride to heaven's gate.. i rever hate.....saw the stairway to hell... headfirst home....stood on the edge and i fell.. yes i guess its well....maybe its what i deserve... but the visions of my lost ones...was truly superb... labeled a nerd......maybe it was true.... but belief escaped me so i questioned the proof.... love will rescue...me from my low self-worth... ....i followed the path of souls...to find Heaven On Earth...
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09-01-04, 12:06 AM | #6 | ||||
So Tired Of It.
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IP: 49DB ED1D
Up Up Up this old shit...............................
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12-15-04, 05:25 PM | #7 | |||
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IP: 28AD 5545
Daz Took This With Ease...
Better Emotion, Storyline, Flow, Structure... Everything, This Needs Not A Full Break Down... That Kid Rule Really Brought Nothing To The Table... Most Of The Shit He Wrote About Was Irrelivent To The Topic... And He Was Using Vocabulary Incorrectly... .One. |
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12-17-04, 04:30 PM | #8 | |||||
The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP: 3240 794D
daz's verse was pretty good but emotion was not i just wasnt feeling it from your verse like i was from rules' verse... his was pretty dope better structure better flow better wordplay better imagery overall it was better...
decent battle but rule got this one easily vote: rule
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