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10-01-04, 10:06 PM | #1 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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letter to god
IP: BD07 C76E
Dear God, it’s me ya broken child,
And I know that we haven’t spoken in a while, But it’s been even longer since I’ved choked on a smile, Hopin maybe I’ll get to remember what a grin is like, I’ve been the type with way too much sin in life, But that’s a given aight, So where you been at night, Ain’t you seen what these kids livin like? And it’s more than that, theres this war in Iraq, Teens in the corps is strapped, They say it’s best to fight but I ain’t sure of that, So another flagged draped casket is sent to Washington, And another mother is forced to watch again, Oh, You already heard of them,WHY AIN'T YOU STOP IT THEN? And just the other day I lost a friend, to the struggle, Why show a way out when they can show you a muzzle, And I hate to burst ya bubble but this world is trouble, You need to send ya son here on the double, On my knees I crumble, over the words I stumble, please God I see the tunnel, |
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10-02-04, 08:34 AM | #2 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: BD07 C76E
ups............................................... ..........................
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10-02-04, 11:43 AM | #3 | |||||
Flyweight
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IP: 9BD2 F24F
Nice...........
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10-02-04, 04:54 PM | #4 | |||||
23-7, 16 Knockouts
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IP: 0825 899A
dat was good-that was ok, u did good dawg
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07-16-05, 10:26 PM | #5 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: BD07 C76E
uppn....................
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07-16-05, 10:35 PM | #6 | ||||
~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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IP: EA1A E1F0
its coo but foe you kept it simple don't be afraid to unleash shit and put it out you got the talent I know you can do it. rtf in "I Aint Fuckin Wit Cha"
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07-16-05, 11:26 PM | #8 | ||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
THESE LINES HERE WERE GOOD MULTI'S BEST THE REST FELL WAY BELOW AVERAGE IN MY OPINION
Dear God, it’s me ya broken child, And I know that we haven’t spoken in a while, But it’s been even longer since I’ved choked on a smi |
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07-16-05, 11:41 PM | #9 | ||||
Light Weight
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IP: 258C A279
meh @ this,
it was aight here |
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07-18-05, 12:56 AM | #10 | ||||
Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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IP: 9F8F 7B28
this was pretty good, emotion was good, vocab was ok, multies were ok also, overall good read, keep it up man
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i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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07-19-05, 11:48 PM | #12 | ||||
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Closed no link ,Pm me a link if you wish to have this re-opened
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The Competition
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