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02-12-05, 08:34 PM | #1 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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TR.OO.P vs C.A.L.I
IP: 044D 3F70
Check In By Friday Or Topic Wont Be Given Poems Due By Sunday Edit You Link With At Least 2 Other Poetry Battles In The League You Voted On Voting Ends Wensday At 12 Eastern Time.no Line Length And Dont Write A Topical This Is A Poetry League I Will Dq You If You Write A Fucking Topical I Hate That Shit Its Not Poetry Winners Recieve 100,000 R.v Sorry No Shows Dont Get Paied You Gotta Actually Win Good Luck To Both
TOPIC- Lifes last breath
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02-12-05, 10:23 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 044D 3F70
check mate................
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02-13-05, 01:22 AM | #3 | |||||
~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP: D135 D6AF
Check Move Bitch...sorry bout the Late check kid
i wasent at the crib .... foo you got like 5 days left to check lol
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02-16-05, 04:15 AM | #4 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 044D 3F70
Skys of blue diamonds fall like shards of crystal glass fragments
As my body spasms my soul pushing away like oposing magnets Rain falls the nectar of GOD's tears falling accross the face of earths frame Lightening strikes the fire of heaven cleansing my heart in its harsh flame I exhale my breath heavy the fog thick as old country molassass I move towards a light but my spirt is captured and snatched backwords I inhale the sweet smell of life.........my lungs fill with the scent of existence Memorys of love....of hate.... of now and then all gone in a instant Like cracked hourglasses my life spills before me in puddles of sand And i write in the dirt with my hands the trails of man The light is a million suns in the pure blackness of the nights shade My bright eyes go blank like the paper i once wrote upon then slowly fade Memorys crash upon my mind like waves on the beach of my soul The fire of life burns low and the house of living grows cold Now i stand alone with nothing a solo man in a world of shadows A lone soldier in the final war after all of the battles As the air leaves my lungs the world slowly,slowly fades And i can feel the cold ice water as it slows in my veins The last vapor of air like a serpent of temptation trying to pull me back again I have lived life and life has lived through me i grow weary of the acts of men My soul drifts and i let the current carry me on through its reach And for once in a long time i finally feel a true sense of peace
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02-16-05, 05:44 AM | #5 | |||||
~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP: D135 D6AF
...Lies on Hospital Bed...Sits up 2 say Last Words... Heavens Undercover Operatives Attempted 2 Spiritually Capture Me As Satan's Henchmen Attempted to Shut Down the Earths Galaxy My Physical Matrix is Decreasing.My End is Spirelling High Velocity Emotions and Provokeing i have Played upon as if it was Jumanji Sliding into Comatose visited Jesus he Taught me these 10 Lessons Dismember Head from Shoulders & i shall Blink for atleast 10 Seconds Zillions of Sins of Many Men..So Deceasing is the only Real Payment Emotions Flow Constiently like Curtis Jacksons Dna onto the Pavement Slowly in Milla Seconds my Life Existence Slips from Throat 2 Lung My Life is Getting Rung out as if it was Water Drenched out a Spounge My veins start to Resemble the Skin of Blue's Clues who Woulda Knew That your Minor Setbacks of Love and Hate will Accelerate up to You Until the Presidentals of ya Rentals in your Hospital Visit Slowly Shorten and My Steps are No more and My Breathe Expands only in 2 Sec Portions the Gates start to Creak into Openiness Buzzing as if they were Locusts My Left Interior Grows Inferior to Medication no longer am i able 2 Focus on Remembering my 1st Steps of Neglectance to the Rightious Paths Wrong Doings have Finally caught my Periphials upon to my After Wraths Vintage Flows and Non Respected Hoes in Flesh Baring Clothes Vanish As my Retnas Dissilute as if they Were 2 Yrd Old Subsitutes actin Manish As the White Light over Brights my Life Rights untill there is Non Left My Love and Existence is Now in Rememberance as i Gather.......................my .............Last.....*Coughs up Blood*...Breath.... .............Dead.........
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02-18-05, 11:20 AM | #6 | |||||||
Only the Illist
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IP: 8BC7 013B
.....WOW.... GREAT BATTLE......shit... both of yall dropped some good shit fa real... in this one it comes down to emotion and i just feel like Cali had more emotion in this one, it was more heart felt in my opinion... no hate troop cause your verse was REALLY GOOD too, this was a hard battle to judge guys... no hate at all to either of you... GREAT BATTLE!!!!
VOTE- CALI |
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02-18-05, 08:17 PM | #7 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 8A1A D0A3
very very very very close battle and a great one too
ya'll are equally matched in every aspect in these verses, but my vote gota go to troop. i liked his ending a little more than CALI's, although both were hot as hell |
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02-18-05, 09:34 PM | #8 | |||||||
The New King Of New York
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IP: E40B 9458
Damn, i think this is the best poetry battle i have ever fuckin' seen on this site. Damn, this shit is hard. But in all honesty, i thought they were both good, , but Troop had more multis, and a tiny bit better wordplay. C.A.L.I., damn you represented on this one, but Troop just beat you by a lil' bit man. Good Battle both of y'all. Big Ups.
-CJ- |
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02-19-05, 12:14 AM | #9 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 1628 4BC6
Vote for CALI
because his stuff made more since to me, to were I could feel it, and it seemed to me like he was more on topic |
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02-19-05, 04:05 AM | #10 | |||||
A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
awesome battle.....but dayumm c.a.l.i killed this one with ill imagery and vocab,the emotion in both pieces were incredible,both had different takes to the topic which both were creative,but i honestly have to give this to c.a.l.i his imagery and vocab just blown it out.....good drop troop but you were out done in this one..
v/c.a.l.i
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02-19-05, 04:24 AM | #11 | ||||||
Bone is gay.
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IP: B7EE 6DD9
Alright well since im poet of 2004 i figured i'd help some kids out by votin on they shit...
C.A.L.I- Your ish was good man... the imagery was good and your emotion was strong... The way that you portrayed the imagery it painted a vivid picture in my mind and it was really working... this piece drew me in from the very start... solid piece man... 8.6/10 TR.OOP- Your stuff was okay,... i wasnt really feelin the structure it threw off the flow but this is poetry so the structure isnt really the biggest deal.. your emotion was good... but you could work on it with some points and build it up to make it apeal more to the readers and everything... the imagery was good but that also lacked... not that bad a piece... kinda seems like you just startin on this/... 7.4/10 |
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02-19-05, 04:26 AM | #12 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 522B 1F63
Damn, some of those lines were pretty amazing... real deep from both of you. I thought that TROOP had a more consistent structure and rhyme scheme whereas the meter in CALI's verses wasn't always on point. However, it gave it a sort of off center, chaotic beat which works well with the subject matter. I thought the imagery was great in both but CALI engaged the senses more, his lines were more vivid and carried more urgency. I like the whole background setting TROOP set up, gave the piece more depth and involvement but overall I'd say I enjoyed CALI's drop more. Once again, great battle guys!
v/ CALI |
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02-19-05, 09:27 AM | #13 | |||||||
STROBE's Favorite Rapper
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IP: 044D 3F70
5-2 me i already win by 3 lead k.o as stated in the rules which noone reads but i wanna see if anyone else votes
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02-19-05, 01:43 PM | #14 | |||||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 8A1A D0A3
dont we get 5 grand for voting dawg?
YOU ARE SO LUCKY YOU DONT HAVE A FUCKING BATTLE UP ID DUDUCTED A VOTE FOR THIS YES YOU DO PM ME YOUR ACCOUNT Last edited by C.A.L.I : 02-20-05 at 03:42 AM. |
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