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05-21-06, 07:45 PM | #1 | ||||
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the wall of ink.
IP: CF86 0039
this is just another one of my crazy dreams... lol hope u like it.
the wall of ink i dream of a wall. leaking all of the pen's ink. it makes me think, of water colors down a sink. down the drain, love to pain, hate and graditud. its all here, in the same place, all different moods. such the wall of ink, storing so much emotion at one time. all sorts of rhymes, brick by brick, and mind to mind. each brick, a new grind. forever going as long as we stay. keep makin the journy to the pad, writing our way. scribbling on and on, never stoping till our heads bust. then the wall of ink will be here, in us it trusts. the wall of ink, data base of the raps we own. the ones with so much emotion collabs and alone. each brick gotta name, each rapper got one too. we have Dr.dre, slim, Easy, snoop dogg is here too. and if u take a look. ull find a brick with ur name. Tech, token, redbull, scanz, Dr.akel. we all the same. sure, some better, but we got a love for the game. yea we all need money, but not all seek the fame. here its kool, wut ever ur reason, u welcome anyways. any day, fine or haze. we skate for the better day] ok........ this wasnt that good, but tell me wut u think. i might rewrite the hole thing.... and ill leave links tomorrow token... and leave some feed back on this.
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05-24-06, 12:04 AM | #2 | ||||
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i don't agree with you on this not being that good. it was good. i liked the concept. i felt it could've been longer. i liked the whole wall-brick-rapper meta as well. this is nice.
flow - good meta - good multis - ok imagery - good concept - ill overall - 8/10 keep it comin.
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05-25-06, 09:37 PM | #3 | ||||
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