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[Wk1] IC: Ill Mental vs Sonn In Time
IP: 1ED1 1E02
Week One :
Verses Due: Friday, October 3rd Voting Ends: Tuesday, October 7th Topic: Slight Of Hand
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10-01-03, 01:26 AM | #2 | ||||||
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ight ight ight.... never faced you b4... should be good
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10-02-03, 12:09 AM | #3 | ||||||
Elevating Beyond Perfect
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IP: 8D0B 4D22
checkin in...good luck
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10-02-03, 10:36 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 8D0B 4D22
ok i guess ill write my piece.....i got nothing else to do...good luck and hope you dont no-show
Last edited by Derive : 10-02-03 at 10:49 PM. |
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10-02-03, 10:49 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 8D0B 4D22
ok i worked hard on this piece so if you dont understand anything then please dont vote....if you dont get anything then just dont vote...
Slight Of Hand Were all embraced with several options, so many paths to choose Life is just like a game, you go far until you lose Darkness embraced those who let it overcome them Then days of vicious pain is the only thing waiting above them Many crimes happen througout the world for reasons unknowned People abuse the freedom which when born they are bestowed Hatred runs the air and problems lead to violence Violence leads to weapons and weapons lead to silence God created us equally and man has taken it for granted Then times got rough and people cried to god..they chanted People never see the glory of what they have until its taken Thinking their making things better when chaos is all their making Lives being ended every day because of careless actions Homicidal acts caused by misfortunes because people never felt satisfaction Some have great memories others have memories that will haunt People flash their possesions to others not as wealthy and pose a taunt So many things lead to problems that happen for stupid reasons Then it all ends when someones on the floor bleeding People consider crime after getting stripped from their possesions They feel they must have anything its become an obsession Every person was made for a reason and shouldnt believe lifes a joke Many die early because of maniacs that are entertained with seeing people choke Weapons were made for protection but are now opened to mankind To people like killers who have problems in their mind Enviornments destroyed and pollution through the air People see it but walk away without a care They think the laws a joke and feel they are in command God has created something ruined by the Slight Of A Hand theirs...30....match it...good luck |
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10-03-03, 12:58 AM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: B908 F8B4
took my idea... bastard... im NOT gonna no show... i am writing my shit right now...
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10-03-03, 06:14 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 8D0B 4D22
^^stfu and stop complaining...if u had the idea u shouldve posted first stupid...and ya better not fucking no-show...u dont got much time...and theirs no excuses on no-showin = /.
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10-03-03, 08:19 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: EC18 012D
about to post my verse....
and you know what? eat a dick |
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10-03-03, 10:28 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: EC18 012D
He's the magician, he's the trick, and he's the whole act
He's the assistant, the volunteer, and the rabbit pulled out the hat His whole life he's had to work at, gettin his whole act polished Untill the day he met a girl that with one look demolished All his dream hopes and cares, with one flirty stare Was always too busy to care, girls and his magic didn't compare He always had one love in life, that was to make people smile While puttin them in awe, and makin the time he took worth the while He could pull cards outta no-where, take a penny from your ear He could saw himself in half, show no fear, shed no tears He could make himself dissapear, he made this his carreer He lived for the crowd to cheer, cause it made his life worth while He would never perform for money, all he needed was the people to smile It made him feel like a child, the bright colored sparks he'd make appear Were like a whirl-wind of freedom, dazed like headlights on a deer But this girl caught his attention, like the first time he saw magic Their eyes connected and made fireworks, another first time for a different magic This story isnt tragic, but it shows the power that all women have Cause as a magician he was a whole, but with her he was sawed in half She wanted to be with him all the time, and it was a mutual feeling After only being together six months, he found himself with a ring kneeling Asking her to be his forever, through sickness and in health He confessed his undying love for her, and said with her he needed no wealth But he didnt get the expected reaction, no fireworks lit up the sky She replied with hesitation, no explanation, just good-bye The magician had never felt this before, never had experienced these emotions Was alwasy too caught up in magic, working shows, or doin promotions He tried to forget about her, but it plagued his mind all day And after 6 months, he relized that his life was in dismay Everyday he'd sit and wonder, would she ever come back so he could see her But as each day went by she wouldnt return, it became more and more clear Finally he decided, that he needed a final act to top off his career He thought up a brand new trick, no rabbits, he wouldnt make anything appear It was clear in his mind, he made sure he had the whole thing planned Gathered a crowd, then made his life dissapear with the slight of hand This is the part where you get to decide what happened to him... Ima leave it open to interpretation, because everyone has a different outlook on life.. I have my own thoughts and ideas of what happened, but that might not suit, or please you... so suit yourself |
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10-04-03, 01:30 AM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: 8D0B 4D22
^^ermm u used my concept?...= /.....w/e..next time get original
lets get some votes.... |
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10-04-03, 05:28 AM | #11 | ||||||
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^^^ummm ok.... our topicals are TOTALLY different....
mine is about a magician and your is about god and nuclear war and shit... quit bitchin, and may the best verse win |
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10-04-03, 11:29 AM | #12 | |||||||
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IP: 399E F0FD
ok very good verses by both....Dope indeed..
Sonn-i enjoyed your piece a lot few falws maybe working on schem would make it be presented better but overall theres no complains on this one..props. Illmeantal-same thing I really enjoyed this one too..perfect set up the story was told ver ywell and at the end the way u made us decide the outcome was dope.. -so this battle was very close i have a feeling there will b votes both ways..but i have tovote for the story i liked reading better and that was illmentals ......but still props again to both..good Read- vote-Illmental
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10-04-03, 02:31 PM | #13 | ||||||
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IP: 6CC1 A5BA
lets get some votes....and good luck ill.....
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10-04-03, 02:32 PM | #14 | ||||
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Both Of Ya'll Were Equal Til I Got To Ill-Mentals
Finishing Lines.. That Pretty Much Stood Out On Top Of Both Verses.. So Thats My Summary.. Vote - Ill-Mental |
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10-04-03, 02:38 PM | #15 | ||||||
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errr.....i told u to match my 30...not go over 30...w/e....more votes....
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