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Old 03-29-03, 06:50 PM   #1
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History Lesson, US is Screwed Up

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Yo, i was in da mode and I just started spittin. Check it out


Before terrorism, it was racism, black verse white
MLK made his mark, altering the course of a black man's life
Hitler killed the Jews, his thought were confused
Satan made him invincible, he thought he couldn't lose
He committed suicide, where as a few just cried
But there was a greater evil, let's take a trip back in time
Joseph Stalin was a thriller, he had an armor of a knight
But his heart resembled a beast that killed everything in sight
Had no knowledge of the tree of life, that was back before Christ
Adam & Eve, the only humans and the Almighty Light
Above, Jesus Christ, God and Creator of Earth
Made air, trees blew, where the first humans were birthed
Before church, which wasn't needed until A&E were decieved
Satan's serpant told them to eat, and as humans, they believed
Relieved im not in their same argueable situation
Life is the same equation, but a whole new transformation
Feet turned into cars, to big buses to planes
Bush dealin wit situations out of his range
Exchangin violence wit out brothers, thugs killin their mothers
Every day, front page articles, but what about the others
Sick homeless, aids carriers discriminated in society
I commonly sip on champange forgettin who provide for me
There's a variety of issues the US body is facin
Cuz the government still tryin to walk on 2 feet without lacin


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Old 03-29-03, 09:59 PM   #2
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Old 12-20-03, 08:41 PM   #3
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this is somethin real old, i've gotten better, but i was lookin through my drops and i noticed no one replied.......holla
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Old 12-20-03, 09:09 PM   #4
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Wow this is pretty old lol..but you need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

But this was alright i thought...your structure in this seemed pretty good i thought, could be touched up a bit though....your vocab was alright i thought...flow in this was alright, it stayed on through out the whole verse mostly, kinda fell off at points for me though....but overall this was alright. keep at it.
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