10/20 you spit first no crew votes

yo check i am checking in i am about to spit
then you spit no biting
no dick riding

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i just mit murk u next

yo i no my iego is really stong/
dud your better off singin a gay song/
next time u go to jail u need to use my tip/
it isn't my folt that your jail room mate told u to bend over and
he gave u a lil rip/
i know i am going to win and i really positive/
lil rip so dumb he took an IQ test and it came back negitive/
everbody saying you cant rap, but u can call it a rumor/
dud just forget it your starten to become mobie JR/
i kick this shit in till it's black and blue/
damn he nows rappin kongfu/
lil rip cant hang with the big boys/
for you daddy will go out and bye you some baby toys/

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i just mit murk u next

come on u lil pussy you want some of this come and get some
talkin all that shit cant back it up

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i just mit murk u next

u have in till 2 days from now to spit or you are DQ and i win this match

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i just mit murk u next

hey rip checking in sorry it took so long went on vacation. ok give me a min. to spit

ok check here i go

first off you rhyme are elementry making you shit lame// my rhymes are legendary your are in the hall of shame//now me i don't let nigga's rock my boat// you ass go to jail and drop the soap// get you shit right and mabye your mama may back me// but I'm going to be nice cause i might just be your daddy//and who you calling stupid you ass just be hating// cause you get trap in win-dixie and die of starvation//you say i can't rap and had the nerve to step // well i guess you will be the first bitch nigga under my belt//I can't hang with the big boy well bitch we'll see// you just fucking mad cause you can't defeat me//cause i wass made to rap since i was born// that why i'm in a leage of my own//

aight first of all im gonna give yall some honest feedback, yall need to return the favor and vote on some of my open battles, vango vs optimum, vango vs slaughta,

alright halob you need to work on your flow, i had a hard time following your flow sometimes. plus your punches were kinda weak, take it to the jugular if your gonna battle

alright lil rip your flow much tighter, easier to read, harder punches, but stay away from using the same old homo punches, that shit is played, i gotta give this one to lil rip for better flo and harder punches.

now return the favor and vote on some of my open battles

why u spit so late what you were pre writing
you i cancle this battle becouse you took so long
well they did not so i guess the battle is still going

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no i don't pre write i just ain't got a computer at home and can only do it at school and this was the weekend

Yeah Halob.....you came kinda weak on this verse.........make sure you continue to work on your bar structure....and verse structure, and then your other skills will follow............2.5/10

Lil rip...your verse wasn't too much better, but it was better.....you have an ok verse struture, but it still needs work.....just work on making your punches stronger....and workin on other aspects of battling beside just punchlines, such as multi's and wordplay.......4/10

TOoN Has Spoken

I'm given this one to Lil Rip, for much of the reasons listed above. His punches were harder and he used more complexity.

Halob, you gott the basics right, it seems to me you just need to battle more and maybe read a few so you can pick up on some tendacies.

I got a battle as well with $$upreme, if you guys could vote on that it would be appreicated.

lil rip took this, halob man ur rhymes were lame and wack as. lil rip ripped him basically. way better flow n rhymes. halob ur rhymes were stretched n ddnt flow. work on that.
there ya go
i vote lil rip

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rip won this 1---------this wasn't even a match 2 me ,the other dude was wack