Ah'ight you know rules
no d/r
no crew
forgot how lines ya said

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this guy don't know who he's messing with, he's just desting to say wats on his chest/
my lyrics will cause devertation, it has no means for civilisation, just flow and blow you away to perspactive/
It takes you so long to write rymes, your age is rising, before you know it you'll be 30 decintergrating/
im quick sligh, carry a knife stained in blood, ready to cut guts, with palms of my hands sweaty/
i'll make your hole face shatter, and listen to broken peices chuckle/
I just stuffed cocain up your nose that uv snuffed and sneezed blood/
i come out of night, go hunt for prey like an owl, strike a match when you come in sight, i coat you in petroliam petrol/
watch you set ablze start haloosinating in a delusional fase/
leave ya sulking in heaven, when i'll be laughing when i go to hell/

yo jus copy an paste your verse from other post in here then I'll drop

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I'm gonna trash you quicklie in a flash, it'll be like your mum givin you a quickie/
Im unreal feal me, I will steal this under your eye browl, im verosious a phycotic monster/
Im coming after you faster than you could say, agratadabra, once i find you I beat your ass in laughter/
I'm gonna smouther you covered like a dipped dougnut strawberry milkshake/
I'll conceal you in a paper bag, stuck you in a lone some room with nobody to talk to/
when i see your lyrics there makeing me screaming to the point of steaming inside cramming/
i'm like a paracite thats angry and ready to bite throw arms, draw out my fire arms blasting like giant fire bombs/
im taking other the whole wide word, just picked up up severing both arms with one finger/
I'll reincarnate you till fate kiks in and bins you in the trash/

You need to give up rap, cuz for flowin' you have no nack
U need to watch channel 183 so u can "discover" your wack(183 is discovery channel)
This a battle, its a slaughter, let me get it ovet wit'
I'm a call u "huggies" cuz ya rhymes are "full of shit"
Give it up hmie, cuz an ill emcee you definitely are not
If ya rhymes "vacationed on the sun" they wouldn't be "hot"
Ya rhymes are old an played they could never touch mine
U must of wrote'em in "antartica" cuz they "frozen in time"
Its over son, its clearly apparent this battle's mine
Shit! I don't even need a closer I killed u wit my first 2 lines

Hold That youngster!!Got a long ways to go before u catch me.....lmao

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sto being a beefer, i had sex with ya wife, now your lifes ova/
stop with those corny lousy raps, you might aswell do relay laps i an' gonna give you a clap/
Your something unture, you was born in dis world outta the blue/
you an'y nothing but a choker, a broke ass bitch thats never has a pay rise no need to be in denial/
I clinched this battle ti'll it slips out ya hands and landed in ya balls bounced back/
ly lyrics are written on your face stained and got ur signicture displayed/
I get ides stiring, there bluring you out, vapourising/
go back with better rymes cause these are my times baby/

yo man you are only suppose to drop one verse, but you clearly dropped 3, I can see your regular genius aren't ya?

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yea first of all why did you drop 3? any way
breakdown fo fine mine:
structure 3 /10 needs much work
punches need better work to 6/10
flow 5/10 that structure made your verse ahrd to read\
overall 14/30 way below average
break fown fo tripple n
structure 8/10
punches 9/10
flow 7/10
24/30 much better verse best line:
This a battle, its a slaughter, let me get it ovet wit'
I'm a call u "huggies" cuz ya rhymes are "full of shit"
m vote/ triple

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uppin for some well explained votes holla!!!!!!!!!!

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yo check it

FLOW
triple n u take the flow cuz i didnt think mind had any flow at all. his rhymes were way off and his shit just didnt fit together and i cudnt find no rhyme to it. triple, ure shit was gud, i cud feel ure verse from start to end, no faults.
STRUCTURE
triple took this cuz he had a nicely structured verse, kept all his shit together. mind ure structure just wasnt there, u dropped 3 verses and u were lackin on the structure on all three of them.
PUNCHES
i dont think triple tried as hard as he cud but there was no need. he had better wordplay in his spits and dropped a couple of nice personals. triple had sum average punches but a few hard ones. mind ure shit didnt even rhyme half the time and ure shit was just too basic, there was no creativity in ure verse.
OPENER & CLOSER
triple took this again cuz mind just didnt try whatsoever i think. opener and closer was weak in all verses, try to get ure shit rhymin first and work on ure flow and structure. triple ure opener and closer were gud but cud have been better i think. i wud say u opened better than u closed but both were still gud.

VOTE- TRIPLE_N
he had better flow, structure and a lot harder punches just straight killin off his opponent. i gotta say he put up an all round better performance!!

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VOTE ON THIS BATTLE AND ILL HITCHUR BATTLE UP CUZ CATZ AINT VOTIN ON MY SHIT AND IVE VOTED ON THEIRS , IF YOU WANT A VOTE HOOK MA BATTLE UP HERES THE LINK
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=122221

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uppin for some well explained votes, holla back y'all

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fine mind:
this guy don't know who he's messing with, he's just desting to say wats on his chest/
my lyrics will cause devertation, it has no means for civilisation, just flow and blow you away to perspactive/
-a wack start.. a lil bit stretched..
overall:6.5/10 ur flow was ight wit average structure.. u had very few personal and connectin hard punches...

Triple N;
You need to give up rap, cuz for flowin' you have no nack
U need to watch channel 183 so u can "discover" your wack
-aver start.. not really good but better than fine mind
overall:6.8/10
Okay ur flow was better than fine mind and it just made more sense to me.. u had average punches and average structure..

Flow:Triple N
Multies:Fine Mind
Structure:Tie
Punches:Triple N
Vote-Triple N

Yo triple took this real nice he had some sharp word play and took it to ya with punches good format and all around better style from what i saw

however when reading your lines i started to figure what ya were accomplishing there
but start simple my man then work up rap to rap my man then you can intertwine your shit as it goes on and you get better

My advise just check out some battles veiw whats doin it whats not and read criticizm holla back yall KEEP STRIVIN ITS WHY WE HERE!

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