house rules...10 lines

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here it is...

from vet to rook...here's a lesson


okay yo

graph...it's simple I got you ex'ed...maybe even spayed...
cut your generic ovaries...everyones thrown that heinz line you layed...
you're a phony like pac in juice...i'm more like epps...you need proof...
come to calgary...i'll push you off the tower...now i got the juice...
the respect...people talk bout my rhymes...it's a new revolution...
you're stuck in the chingy...nelly years...while i'm in evolution...
you couldn't beat me if you posted in other threads...
you're a joke like chris rock...people laugh at you instead...
you need a world atlas to see the land i claim...
you battled...prayed for a win...but trust, you battled in vain...

it's over...

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THIS IS HIS VERSE>>>HE POSTED IN BITCH SLAPPED>>>>>

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V/JPoll

Man he got this one easy, J had a good structure and style was cool too. Also had good punches and personals i liked the heinz line best (JPoll's 1) the other guy werent too bad but u have to post battles in the battle thread NOT Bitch Slapped that kinda made u look stupid man but good verse just not good enough.

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i gotta agree with dogg on this one jpoll had this shit from the first line he hit nmuch harder and had a better flow with better rhymes. Graphex as i keep gettin told man u need to elevate get more personal with the punches

vote = jpoll

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you're stuck in the chingy...nelly years...while i'm in evolution...
you couldn't beat me if you posted in other threads...
you're a joke like chris rock...people laugh at you instead...
you need a world atlas to see the land i claim...

^^^ try not to start every line off with YOU...or you're...mix it up

you need a world atlas to see the land i claim...
you battled...prayed for a win...but trust, you battled in vain...

^^ punches were there...but didn't hit that hard


im attackin JPoll with a pack of staples/
you couldnt spit a rap if it was worth a payroll/
ill make you decapitate/
tap out with a tap of fate/

^^ WTF!?! u started off nice with your opener...then you fell off big time...My advice..imagine every line is your opener


FLows Grap
Rhymes Tie
Punches JPoll

So...I have to give this to Jpoll by a narrow margin because his verse was more consistent.

Vote: Jpoll

Punches: Jpoll took it... Graph, i wasnt really feelin any of your punches... they were kind of cliche-y, if you know what i mean. And Jpoll, most of yours were ok, werent too out there... like random... but didnt really hit that hard.

Flow:
I think Jpoll got this one as well... It was more solid, structure wise. Only fell off a few times, but graph's fell off a few more and his syllable count was usually a lil more or less than it should be.

Not much wordplay.

Jpoll gets my vote.

ADVICE:
both of you have got to work on harder hitting punches. Jpoll was sort of tryin to use personals with that spray thing in his opener, but yeah, get more personal and come up with shit people wont expect.

Your flows ok, ok but not too good. So go to cypher or sum shit and practice gettin your flow up to speed, since i lost my battle to gambino ive gotta revamp my flow cos it was fucked... so thats what im doin, and its already startin to come along. work on shit like Syll counts, and usin multis and all that shit. Increase your vocab by readin... anythin will do, but if u really desperate u can read the dictionary, this will get your metas goin and make your rhymes sound more sophisticated. And always, unless u seriously cant, try to make your all the rhymes in your verse more than one syllable, it will just go better....

DONT let that advice go to waste.. yo

elevate

Peace

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