A'ight checkin' in...good luck dawg.

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Checkin....And I dont need luck.....ha ha j/p same here playa

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Ending Of Earth.......


Chapter 1, verse 8, in the book of Revelations..
depicting mother earth being shook to its foundations..
What will happen is total Annihilation..
As god looks on his creation...as failure before his eyes..
dissapointed and appualed, the thoughts,...soar in his mind..
of whether to end humanity....to disregard his craft..
To erase all life on the planet and start from scratch..
Its such a heartless act but take into consideration...
Everything that he's gave us...and how we've repayed him..
We've lied, cheated and stole....are adulterous & dishonest..
Do you REALLY think thats anywhere near what he'ed of wanted..
He promised long ago that....In this Event
A war Between good and evil would begin its decent...
Down to earth...turning our world into a battlefield..
Humanitys final hour...as we cling tight to a shattered shield
Releasing its agressive rhythem, as war-scarred warriors fell
Burnt flesh....heavily decorated by shards of shrapnel...
The wounded left to die, as bystanders stand the sidelines..
Wide eyed....Watching the blood pour, and try to fight cryin..
Cold tears for the fallin.....as the good and evil play umpire..
To bloodied bullet-ridden Bodies; laid to rest from the gun fire...
Bare Flesh..torn from bone...as the innocent fall...
only a select few will be able to claim they witnessed it all..
Until the cast is broken....with no signs of vast emotion..
It was predicted long ago....now that time is fast approaching..

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DAMMMIT i just wrote a fuckkin huge fukkin huge break down of both ur verses. FUK FUK FUK and sum dik pm'd me a it made the page expire. FUK

put it short.

FUK that pist me off.....sorry

LE had nice emotion, slightly more than DeLeon.

But i felt imagery, descriptiveness, vocab and rhyme skills is where DeLeon took this. So if its kool to crew vote then DeLeon. I wont poll for now and find out if its kool. Dope work from both.....

DeLeon.

Chapter 1, verse 8, in the book of Revelations..
depicting mother earth being shook to its foundations..

Its such a heartless act but take into consideration...
Everything that he's gave us...and how we've repayed him..
We've lied, cheated and stole....are adulterous & dishonest..
Do you REALLY think thats anywhere near what he'ed of wanted..

Releasing its agressive rhythem, as war-scarred warriors fell
Burnt flesh....heavily decorated by shards of shrapnel...
The wounded left to die, as bystanders stand the sidelines..
Wide eyed....Watching the blood pour, and try to fight cryin..

Bare Flesh..torn from bone...as the innocent fall...
only a select few will be able to claim they witnessed it all..

Limited.....

The determination...is existing in our leader's eyes
We are in desperation...we'll be begging for our lives

We begin to march...my heart's pace is quickening
Sweat drips down my face...the fear is sickening

Snap back to reality...the enemy city is just ahead
Why did I accept this..? How come we can't decide instead?
The person next to me...an arrow goes through his vest
The friend to my right...falls in pain, fire burns his chest

Thoughts in my mind...I will never see my family again
There is an enemy...holding a spear ahead of me


V/Deleon

deleon: your topical verse was just hott....the wordplay and rhyme scheme was very very good...not really any good multies but your w/p made up for it.... structure was decent...the consistency and flow was very good...overall very hott verse with lots of emotion....

overall: 7.5/10

L.E: your verse was decent and the flow was good and you had better structure...but your verse lacked emotion and consistency...it was a good verse but deleon had the better one...

overall: 5.5/10

vote: deleon

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LE-You was pretty close but not that good in the vocab
You had some pretty good things in there but yea Similies
was pretty but did really lack off on some stuff

Deleon-You was very imaginary and you had some nice Vocab
and similies and metaphores was aight...Structure was ok
but mainly You had some good things and I liked it

Overall-Deleon took this becuz he was more imaginary
and and his vocab murked it

v/Deleon

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le- nice flow, good ryhmes, imagery wasnt there though, sims/metas were there, lacked vocab which u need though, not great multis, but u rbought the topic origionally i spppoise


de- wicked vocab, flow was on kid, imagery was there too, brought topic less origional but still it was good, ryhmes therem, no multis, sims/metas less than avergae, but i think u brought a more pelasent verse

vote- dealon

Yo Deleon took this with better imagery, I like the way you portrayed the end of the world in a bibilical sense. You both took different perspectives, LE kind of told a personal story of an individual wile Deleon took a broader bibilical sense. It seemed to work better for Deleon, plus Deleon had better vocab as well.

v- Deleon

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