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| L.I. |
  
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07-13-04, 04:21 PM
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DaTrus Is A Bitch!
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Apotheosis Vs. L.I. Vs. MetaSkriptz
IP: B80A A22F
::..Rules..:: 30 Linez Max 5 Votez Winz No Crew No Hate No D/R CheckS Due By 7-15-04 Spits Due By 7-17-04 Votes Due By 7-20-04 Topic - Loss For Wordz Good Luck! ~R~ Last edited by Re$TricTed : 07-13-04 at 04:39 PM. |
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07-13-04, 04:25 PM
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DaTrus Is A Bitch!
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IP: B80A A22F
Just Post Up Votes... If Voting For L.I. or Apotheosis....Then Vote In The Option That Says "L.I." If Voting For MetaSkriptz Then Vote For Him In HIs Option.. ~R~ |
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07-13-04, 04:29 PM
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Miss Me?
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IP: 4289 77F4
Cool....dope topic....im feeling it....check in....goodluck Apo and Meta....
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07-13-04, 04:48 PM
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IP: 4289 77F4
aight checking In....Good Luck to Both
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07-13-04, 05:21 PM
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Banned: Spamming
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IP: 4C49 64C6
word...dope topic...dope opponents good luck palaroonies
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07-13-04, 05:27 PM
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IP: 4289 77F4
Pieces of Lime that takes all hopeness of casualty can bless Moments of Love and pieced of duluquent things that cant be expressed Life from Death that can Difer from Strictive parts of life Heart Crimes from Darkness of a single lost wife Words can express things but in Moments of Crusial Part It cant Hitting Bumps of Scriptive parts that Your heart dephant Heart from lonelyness that use to be good have left a cold chill Lovable Time and will, But Overall things that Descrimminate and things that kill Heart full of darkness and Left being Folded of Softness Grimes of Love use to be there but now has left and dont know is it below or above Vocabulary that is testual From Continental parts that Dilute beats Mind is overglows full of heat...Why Does things have to Cheat Personate things that apear in images that Blur out in moments Things that Doments...Decieve parts that Dacroments All is will and Will is All was everything that Funerals Are apart things and memories ready top be cherished and now fallen apart from my heart Veins That Come out and pop That Flows and Skin that Explode Moments is Together Because Our love is here and have rode Bleeding exsevily from Tormental things that Fades away Hey someone has left my mind and Consieved what can I say? All life forms was there and My life has fallen apart from a single seed I wish Things Overturned by Yells-(IM AM SO HURT) as my heart bleed I dont know what DonTributing Delecate life forms of Feels apart Things that Convert into Love, Into Hated and fallen into a Locked Cart Life has fell away and nomore Life to see and Leaving Loyalty and Awarness Contol All hidden and a Single Roll, Locked in a Empy Heart thats like a Bowl Sitting as wait till Burial has now been hauty of Clicking Synonymes Put together as Lovable and Family things Condymes Thinking I had a Dream but My Dream was there and now its a test Sitting eyes Desqinquished as Soul, Love, Conrtolable heatablity is burries to rest
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07-16-04, 09:55 AM
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IP: 4C49 64C6
Couple of things.....this IS 30 lines its just a different structure & if its confusing its because I had to condense it alot...but yeh.....good luck guys. Stuart was a street mime. . . . . .providing joy to the kids, & every week at the same time. . . . . .he saw a beautiful girl cross the bridge. He never knew her name. . . . . .but he wanted to so much, he saw she liked to draw. . . . . .so he learnt about art & such. Just to have that moment. . . . . .to speak on a mutual interest, so he could take her hand & hold it. . . . . .& let his heart confess. . . that she captured his gaze. . . . . .by the ways that she’d move, & he just wanted to say. . . . . . “that I love you.” Corny as it seemed. . . . . .those words he wanted to utter, but what really held him back. . . . . .was the fact he had a stutter. Worried that would make him it seem. . . . . .he was a retard, made him a bag of nerves. . . . . .& his lungs start breathe hard. As the sweat poured. . . . . .he approached her by the bench, Gulping hardly. . . . . .with his fists tightly clenched. “h-h-hello my n-name is Stu. . . . . .I’ve seen you for a while, & all I’ve wanted to do, is be close to your smile. . . I-i-i-‘m sure this is w-w-weird. . . . . .it m-m-may appear like it, b-b-ut I c-cant get out m-my words. . . . . .b-because I’m so ex-excited!” she looked at him nervously. . . . . .to her this was a complete shock, not a word escaped her mouth. . . . . .& her stomach tied in nots. 10 seconds went by. . . . . .stu had tears by his eyelids, with nothing but his heart. . . . . .to break the silence. He ran away embarrassed. . . . . .not wanting now to live, so he ran by the river. . . . . .& climbed on Witsmore bridge. She saw what he was doing. . . . . .she ran but it was too late, the girls loss of words. . . . . .decided Stuarts fate. She was not to blame. . . . . .but the dealer of the hand she was dealt, for Stuart words were hard. . . . . .& this trouble she also felt. I mean what can you do. . . . . .if the words wont release from your tongue, how can you answer I love you. . . . . .if your def & dumb. by the way "dumb" is a word used to people who are mute. |
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07-17-04, 10:14 AM
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Miss Me?
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IP: 3240 794D
im dropping today or tonight....
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Last edited by Re$TricTed : 07-17-04 at 11:03 AM. |
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07-17-04, 09:38 PM
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Miss Me?
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IP: 3240 794D
Loss For Words
Words deceased, as i plead for sound to succeed...
Nothing released, not an ounce of perfection free'd... Lips quiver with thought, but nothin inspiring is taught... As my mind fought, it arises with a feelin of distraught... Anger keeps elevating to new heights, putting up a fight... Functions are tight, as i struggle to even write tonight... As hard as i try, i struggle to stir things, yet i know ideas are lurking... Brains jerking, cant think right cause only the left sides working... Tip of the tongue feeling, anger level is to the ceiling... On the edge to stealing, but biting doesnt do healing... Trying for that real shit, but my mind is completely oblivious... I feel it, have the concepts aroused but just keep missing it... Need to sustain my reign, and put all the doubters to shame... Have the brain be drained, and a clean slate contained... Deadline is approaching, do i need coaching?... Upset feeling as each tic leaves thoughts poaching... I sit and clear my mind, inside myself i search for a line... As my teeth grind, my intellect is locked up and confined... Vision of the win's acute, becoming desperate in pursuit... All senses get the boot, all i feel is deaf, blind, and mute... Only thing inevitable is failure, hopes crashed as the trails blurred... Success deterred, Everything is off accuracy as if the scales stirred... The results leave me in shock, my confidence was knocked... Loss has been been locked, as an outcome of writers block... L.I.
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Last edited by L.I. : 07-19-04 at 09:00 PM. |
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07-19-04, 05:05 PM
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Miss Me?
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IP: 4289 77F4
can at least 1 person vote.........................
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That Old School Mother Fucker Aint That A Bitch? Crhyme Sindicate
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07-19-04, 05:20 PM
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Banned: Spamming
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IP: 4C49 64C6
^........................................for me
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07-19-04, 06:11 PM
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That's Gangsta
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IP: 970D 9C87
imma come back n voet later too long to explain..but apothesis took this...imma come back later n explain
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07-19-04, 08:36 PM
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RV SPOTLIGHT, GET AT ME!
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IP: 80EF 45DD
okay so apo took this hands down. i mean he had great imagery from the get go, building up to the very ending, which was dope. definitely not where i thought it was going. topicals are supposed to make you see, feel, and touch you. apo, did all of this with this drop.
LI and meta,both decent drops but i wasnt feeling the topic. topicals are about imagery, which was lacking in both verses. nice vocab meta, bad spelling in places, lol, both decent drops but apo just took it to another level. peace
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  I had to get a new couch, but as you can see the fun continues! A.I.
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07-19-04, 08:53 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5510 817C
aight i thought meta won this shit cause he had good imaginary and vocab i was feelin it it was a nice topic and i felt that meta just picked this shit up and ranaway with it his structure was good and made it flow good thats what i was feeling was tha flow and that about wraps it up
LI and apo u guy's did good to i just wasnt feeling yours aswell as meta's u guy's both stayed on topic pretty well flow was aight vocab was aight i was just feeling meta |
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07-19-04, 10:22 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
I think meta took this one cuz he used betta vocab....even thought his verse and L.I's verse were very close........I still vote for Meta
Apo= ya verse was ok it was just a regualr verse wasnt really nuffin special.....if you would have used betta vocab then it would have been betta.....good imagenary though L.i ya verse was good right beside metas.........you had alot of multis but meta beat u on vocab Big up to all of yall
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