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yo Script when i shoot smoke"infumes-my-shottie"
when u hear that sound, fear "consumes-yo-body"
what i do best bitch is "spray- lead"
gon put ur hands together and pray datcha "stay-dead"
you should wisley invest in a bullit proof "s-u-v"
that's in yo best intrest if you "scared-of-me"
reppun S.W.A.T we " thugs from da south"
ill shut ya up, put a few "slugs in yo mouth"
i have no remorse over what my "bullit-did"
you know this is over so "cool-it-kid"

Azzo your addressing-the-best, so start-dreading-yah-sends
Cause ill rise over, and drop to begin transcending-your-end
Ive covered you with black marks to suit your poor-esteem
Like your sinking into a pool of shit.................................
.................................................. .....as your-knee-deep
You dont associate to sickness, so how will you produce-ill
As you cant fix yourself with wits, to connect loads-to-spill
Your beaten by a script, theres nothing you can do about-it
As ive caused long term damage, where your layouts-ripped
Kids not up to the job, hoping we could talk-things-through
But ya slipping in places, so ill now wipe the floor-with-you

weak ass battle but i have to give it tooooo......

Scripture cuz he had betta wordplay and an overall verse

structure: A
Flow: S
Openor: S
Closer: S
enjoyed: s
Vote: Scripture

Some advice ELEVATE

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A comment..10 mins..cheers for vote....uppin #1...

Uppin...........................................#2

Vote=Scriptious

Not a very good battle,but Script got this because of better punches.Both could work on flow,learn some multies,and get some better punches,naw mean.

I'll poll when somebody hits up one of my battles,after all,I did take the time 2 read this shit!

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structure: Azz
Flow: Scrip
Openor: Scrip
Closer: Scrip
punches: scrip
metaz - ?
personals - ?

V: Scripture

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http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134062

hmm

scrip: alright shit.........good wordplay.......flow was right on.......put ..... at the end of each line......makes it look better...over all u did a good job

azzo: your shit was..........gangsta...not good for a text battle..maybe audio......pretty weak iosh u culd of came harder then that...............bad punches bad personals.........

vote:scrip

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script ur shit was pretty good sum of it didnt ryhme to well over all id give u a 7/10
azzo decent flow tight ass multis everything ryhmed and everything was a multi so i have to give u this one

vote-azzociate

kinda weak but I saw that Scrpt tried harder, Azz shouldnt stick to the whole gangster theme, Its aint wat hiphops about no more kid. Thats for niggaz wit out creativity. Just get creative and learn to use better punchlines that'll make niggaz remember U. Scripts closer was the best part of his verse, not just becouse it ment I didnt have to read any more of this shit, but he had a good punch in there. it was kinda played yeah, but mopping the floor wit someone always gets the job done.

Structure, A
Flow, S
Punches, S
Creativety, None
Multis, none
opener, none
closer, S

V/ Scriptious

I voted in this battle so could U please return the favor wit an honest vote in a battle in my sig. If U dont have 120 posts, then dont worry about the one wit OneManBand cuz it aint for U. any feed back is greatly appreciated. thanx

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