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01-14-05, 07:49 PM | #1 | |||||
The Epitome Of Greatness
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Anxiety Vs. Given Light
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Battles Go Up Friday Check In Due Sunday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Verses Due Tuesday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Voting Ends Thursday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time 20 Lines Minimum 40 Lines Maximum No Biting No Recycling Do Not Go Over The Line Limit Or Under The Line Limit Meaning No Less Than 20 Lines No More Than 40 Lines You Must Vote On 3 Battles Per Week And Edit Them Into Your Check-In.. If You Dont Do So, Youre Banned From The Tourney The Following Week Topic: The Outcast
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01-15-05, 11:29 AM | #2 | |||
Tight.
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Checking in...!
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01-15-05, 11:36 AM | #3 | |||||
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Check..........
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01-18-05, 06:43 PM | #4 | |||||
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Topic: The Outcast The outcast... Gon make friends soon? I doubt that... Gets shout at... For not having the answer in health class... Was cast out... Of his damn house, mom and dad cant act proud... It was like black clouds... Gloomin over head as he passed out... Harrased in the halls... Or even worse not glanced at at all... Why is it that he is never offered a hand when he falls? The girls will never even make direct eye contact... A signed contract... And they still wouldnt look at... Or think about, or speak about, unless it's in slander... In math class, the teacher is consestin his answer... Requestin he transfer... But no other school would take him... Tried that plenty of times before and had no place to place him... Amazin... But the kid had a strong head, it didnt phase him... Which was amazing cause the kid had no one to raise him... Or put his faith in... Wandering earth with no direction... No hoes affection... And worst of all no reflection... He placed a note... On his desk, blade to throat... But he couldnt do it, all he could do was pray for hope... He crumpled the note... Threw it away, stumbled and choked... Gonna pummle the folks... Who fucking mumbled the jokes... But wont. Handles his own till handles are thrown... Family left him in the dark like candles were blown... Canceled his phone... Not like he had anyone to call... It's not looking like his problems will ever get resolved... Ain't gon get shit solved... No problems dissolved... Family wont get involved... Poor kid is appaled... Bullets, grazed his chest... He maintained his breath... But had no last wished as he became claimed by death... |
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01-18-05, 11:56 PM | #5 | |||||
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Can someone show the fuck up against me? Do I scare yall that much???
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01-19-05, 09:31 AM | #6 | |||
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I'm sorry LoL, but I've been sick, and super busy with school, I fell behind on my work, if you want I can drop tonight.
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01-19-05, 10:40 AM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
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01-19-05, 03:17 PM | #8 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: C147 07A7
I'll give some feedback on your verse...I LOVED the way you approached the topic, the emotion was very deep. Vocab was tight, had some good multis in there which was a plus point of course. Structure was good and definately feeling your flow in this drop. Imagery was nice and you described the guy's struggle very well, could feel his pain...Dope drop for sure!
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01-21-05, 02:31 AM | #9 | |||||
The Epitome Of Greatness
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Anxiety Wins By No Show
Anxiety +3 Given Light -4
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