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01-21-05, 04:56 PM | #1 | |||||
The Epitome Of Greatness
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Given Light Vs. Hells Fire
IP: 0825 899A
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Battles Go Up Friday Check In Due Sunday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Verses Due Tuesday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time Voting Ends Thursday By 11:59 PM Eastern Time 20 Lines Minimum 40 Lines Maximum No Biting No Recycling Do Not Go Over The Line Limit Or Under The Line Limit Meaning No Less Than 20 Lines No More Than 40 Lines You Must Vote On 3 Battles Per Week And Edit Them Into Your Check-In.. If You Dont Do So, Youre Banned From The Tourney The Following Week Topic: Judicial System
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01-21-05, 08:01 PM | #2 | |||
Tight.
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IP: C959 12E0
Oh the new battles are up? That was quick flow?
Well checking in. I'm not no-showing this time. |
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01-23-05, 05:10 PM | #3 | |||||||
Life is a Constant Battle
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checkin in
IP: A75E B3A0
checkin in..good luck to the kat at the other side of the battle i expect this to be a good battle im goin into criminology so gonna have some vocab
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01-25-05, 09:54 PM | #4 | |||||||
Life is a Constant Battle
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Judicial System
IP: 74A8 A718
Intro
Eyelids open showing fuzzy blue, pigs shakle the dizzy dude
I feel nauseated this isnt koo, worried not know what to do I roll over into my own puke, roll back like i was hittin da juke Officer laughs askin what i took, reportin a rape that i was in book Tried to remember but couldnt think Miranda and wasnt Wayne-right New law but couldnt form insanity because my girlfriend died. Gravity hit eyes heavy so i cried, mind blocked out the drunken fight Starting from begining for Alliby, sat with fingers on eyes, oh- why We consumed alcohol like infected wounds, just got over fight n ruin She kissed me on the neck said come to my room, intercoarse hit rubbin poon Was done she cum then heard get off me n boom, boyfriend of coarse in room Shot girlfriend and called cops to shoot himself at noon, no witness no goon Judicial system Cops caught me a block away, sirens sound mixed with bloods terror fray Pleaded innocent cops nothing to say, shouldnt a ran looks like old O.J. Judge restated my rights i might have lost, and left a bail that no one post Cold steel made cage made Bubba boss, wanted anal sex punched him n lost Cried self to sleep bitin pillow and butt floss, told injustice to officer said toss Lawyer lied way outta crime, sayin efficent evidence never met time Jury was delivered by bias bind, Hopin god please have mercy this time The girl was a daughter of high money kind, father tried to buy the jury, fined Nerves were out like play review on rewind, water fell from gravity made shine Turned rose hoped for grace from powers that bind, jury said no guilty, sighed however, rape was still case n i got five, jury said she fifteen that bitch lied Went to corrections found way to survive, hid in corners and open night eyes never shower almost got guted few times, inmates hear rape n droppin guys Beatin unconscious doctor saved my life, few seconds later never make five Fourth year gone more like war day by day, stabed kid for attackin with plate rather be higher level can sleep without devil, count days with head on swivel got 24 hrs left no advil, head hurts, hope these toons dont drop the anvil sittin by self at table, having pankakes, surup poisoned dont look like maple Outro Talked to governor asked for pardon, laughed like i farted beg u pardon Left like animal hopin huntin stop, wardon...racing heart barily winnin Gordon Got an hour left knew they waitin at door when, Sleepy passed a note to him I have to last an hour on weightliften hours, run n hope the guard hits tower So im rappin one last time, spittin one last time, hope judge reads next time armageddon B.Wills gots to shine, go out fightin impossible battle Acilles dyin Styx is reachin, left with money on eyes for reapin, want to die sleepin Step outside Bubba charges with knife and cop snipes his life Blood hits face justice came that night, walked out smiling free tomorrow free tonight... All belongings gone new life, wake up lemmings real life, death canceled flight tonight... yo i had this done at 9:00 my time give me a break
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01-25-05, 09:56 PM | #5 | |||||||
Life is a Constant Battle
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IP: 74A8 A718
40 lines outta do was kinda a quick drop didnt think it was that good hope ya like it
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01-25-05, 10:12 PM | #6 | |||||||
Life is a Constant Battle
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my links jeah
IP: 74A8 A718
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01-26-05, 11:33 AM | #7 | |||
Tight.
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IP: 1768 36E3
Sorry I no-showed, I don't have a legit excuse I suppose. Except for finals. Seriously though, I apolagize.
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01-26-05, 11:41 AM | #8 | |||||||
Life is a Constant Battle
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links
IP: 6EEF 01CC
two
Whyte Ave vs Denied Truth three Mista Ath3entiq vs final some one critique this shit man i know i didnt drop a verse for nothin, man no shows are str8 killin da league i had to basically look over one battle and critique two pieces
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01-26-05, 01:47 PM | #9 | |||
As Seen On T.V.
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IP: 8155 9B30
nice drop. wasnt neccasary.
but thats tough luck that you (Hells Fire) won by no show, becuase that gives you less points and this is no tourney, its a league. so points matter, but what can you do about that? good luck with the tourney. vote: hells fire |
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01-26-05, 03:28 PM | #10 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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IP: 4EA4 53F1
Goes to Hells Fire of course due to no-show...
Let me give you some feedback though...first thing I thought when I saw your verse: daaaaaamn, this is fucking long! But I started reading anyway, expecting it to be dull as fuck but you managed to keep me focussed throughout the whole thing! (big props for that). Liked your approach, vocab was nicely balance between complex and basic and was feeling the flow. Had nice emotion in there and also good imagery... Sorry for this no-show man, sucks big time indeed! DQ
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01-26-05, 11:15 PM | #11 | |||||||
Life is a Constant Battle
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IP: 7CEF D863
thanks to all yall for the feedback and pumped for my next topical
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01-26-05, 11:56 PM | #12 | |||||
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IP: 6CB8 12EC
Nice to see you got feed on this, but yes you win by no show which sucks cause you only get 3 points...
But don't bitch to me every battle i have ever had in this league has been a no-show. |
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