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01-25-05, 12:04 PM | #1 | |||||
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Unniversal Connectionz
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I arose in Stonehenge, surrounded by the energies of the sun/
held back for centuries, but now the apocolypse has come/ I'm the clouds, hovering within the atmosphere/ the black smoke that came out of Pandora's box and dissapeared/ Now i've returned, with diseases i've inhabited/ raise my sword of vengeance to seize demonic savages/ i've roamed with dinosaurs till the day of their extinction/ held the hand o jesus throughout the crucifiction/ flow through lava, spit a cypher with the holy father/ ressurect a lost prophet when i sip the holy water/ reciprocity, high velocity there aint no stoppin me/ the relics stepped down to rid the world of democracy/ philosophy, is encrypted in my lyrics/ slaughter all at the seyonce when they try to rest my spirit/ angels fear this, i destroyed the germans when they used the gas/ in trench warfare, emitting toxins i turn you to ash/ verse 2 i was spawned in the 14th century, 1556 B.C/ before the time Jesus Christ was an entity/ i had no identity, i was floating molecular ball of energy/ used to transfer thoughts from allies to enemies/ at this time physical war was, not a neccesity/ and man was determined by his.............../ psychological chemistry, biological weaponry/ wasnt even thought of in dreams, but all of the screams/ sound the same as i remain/ to pierce through time, untattered by age,flattered by rage/ of the wack, who sell cd's to bills on their stack/ as we compact, to make the most explosive weapon of impact/ as we attack, the weak hearted,disease started/ when my checmical sneeze parted/ from the sinus, of this prestigious artists/ i rip the brains from the heartless, i am the verbal locksmith/ not done with the 3rd but still what do yall think
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01-25-05, 02:06 PM | #2 | ||
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Aight, you need to apply more depth and vocabulary to it. Pretty good flow, but in some area's it was choppy. Work on that<.
But it had a good feel to the whole thing because it was simplistic it was easy to follow, change your structure and maybe font to make it look more appealing. Nice topic as well, keep up the good work.
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03-09-05, 11:18 AM | #3 | |||||
Obscure Intelligence
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uppin for feedback
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03-21-05, 01:58 PM | #4 | |||||
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uppin for some feed back yall
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03-30-05, 12:02 PM | #5 | |||||
Obscure Intelligence
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uppin for some feed back yall
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03-30-05, 12:45 PM | #6 | ||||
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Closed no link , pm me the link if you would like this re-opened
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