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04-06-05, 09:53 PM | #1 | ||||
C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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Dabatos Vs. Golden Dayz
IP: 7669 3009
Topic: Vietnam
Check's due on or beforefriday.. Verse Due On or before Monday.. (Not after.. exactly on monday before midnight) 30-40 lines max.. 3-0 Wins..
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04-06-05, 10:19 PM | #2 | ||||
GG Haterz
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IP: F92E 8816
Checking in. Don't drop one bar this time Daba. I want to be able to say I beat you completely .
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04-06-05, 10:43 PM | #3 | ||||
C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: 7669 3009
lol... check.. don't worry.. im too good for you so just give up now while you have the chance!!
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04-11-05, 09:08 PM | #4 | ||||
GG Haterz
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IP: 6510 334F
One Battle Waiting in grass waiting above my head while I lie inside this silent but deadly bed Fed with revenge because of families dead. The enemy approaches while like tigers we wait, Fate's irony is meeting us for a tet a tet date. They came here because they are true? The hell do they think? That this country is new? One shot two shot 3 shot and four, Their blood is on their heads in this war. We will fight for our beliefs which will help our union, Leave us to our farming and food with our oxen. We are not uneducated for we make ourselves live, We give our children the food and the right perspective Of life and how it works in the ways we want least, We have our food, water, and shelter, we do not need a feast. One War Their practices are corrupt and we must save these people, Cowards hide in grass and their horses' steeple. Our men sent home in boxes like standard shipping mail, No matter how many times we shoot we always fail. These fuckers will realize we will never hold forces back, We may live in shacks but we will never fall back. Pushed inside the door of houses that will soon fall, Walls of manure and dirt on the floors and we made the wrong call? We came to help and so they shoot will relentless remorse, Our plan to free these people keeps taking the wrong corse. We try to communicate but they think of us as invaders, Plans of stopping killers and all of the death dealers. Two Perspectives Two perspectives in mens' eyes which cause fights in life, One man's bullet may not kills another man's knife. One battle and one war appear different to some, You can look on it with joy or sadness wherever your from. People don't see that war tears worlds apart, No matter if they reason to fight is pride or comes from the Lord's heart. Why must we determine our future through complications of desire, to try and get what we want by paying men for hire? We say peace is the best way, so we design weapons of mass destruction, Only Iraq involved? Nah that's just the government's projection. Amazing that people know what's best for a country in times of need, But then when help arrives to help feed and breed for a better tomorrow, They shoot and fights and then spend the next 20 years in sorrow.
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04-12-05, 09:22 PM | #5 | ||||
C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: BBE8 536F
Vietnam
A war that lasted for more then 8 years... We lost over 30,000 soldiers for what reason?? Why did we have Vietnam? Constantly these questions always re-appear in my head… It’s been thirty-five years since the event, but I still live in the past… I could still see the wind gliding smoothly with the tall three foot long grass.. Everyday was a perfect weather, where the sun shined over tall trees.. Not even one cloud in the sky, it was like paradise with the cool breeze… No existence of human interference, just wild animals and soaring birds.. Where we’ll cause its disappearance, no animals, just paradise burns.. Death spreading as fast as bacteria, surrounded by screams as we kill kin.. Its amazing how it went from loud to silence, as my bullets hit 3 children.. I had no time to care, they were just weak, and I happen to be better.. And they were just another Asian I shot added to my killing spree record.. I remember being ordered by my officer to do a specialized clean up… Where I had to pick up the body parts of my friend, R.I.P. Peanuts.. Body part after body part, from his toes, to the parts of his head.. Found his heart in the sheds, when squeezed, it gushed and it bled... He was only one week from deportation, released back to America.. Later found a letter of celebration, his wife’s pregnant, it was no hysteria.. Day after Day images of “hell” horribly flashes in my mind time to time.. Where our own soldiers would torture an animal, till no more vital signs… Shot after shot, from its nose, eyes, detaching its ears from its body.. Moans are heard as it cries, as men help it disembody.. These images forever will be in my mind like a clorox stain.. Will always have to live with it forever under this horroible pain.. This was suppose to be about the images that wil forever be in my mind like a stain.. Had no time to finish..w/e.. G’d luck..
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04-12-05, 09:44 PM | #6 | ||||
GG Haterz
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IP: B34B BBA7
Looks like I'm gonna have to step up my game from now on.
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04-12-05, 10:00 PM | #7 | ||||
C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: BBE8 536F
LoL wut u mean by that?
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04-13-05, 10:33 AM | #9 | |||||||
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IP: 50E1 F494
Both verses were great here..
I think that Dabatos came stronger in his verse though...I liked his storyline better and the whole thing flowed nicely and was worded great with excellent vocabulary.. Death spreading as fast as bacteria, surrounded by screams as we kill kin.. Its amazing how it went from loud to silence, as my bullets hit 3 children.. ^ That was a fuckin' hot line..definately my favourite... Good Drop by both here...but Dabatos gets my vote.. XPETBK-35278 |
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04-13-05, 11:07 AM | #10 | ||||
GG Haterz
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IP: CCA8 57B3
Does anyone vote? I thought just the participants of VE III vote.
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04-13-05, 12:20 PM | #11 | |||||
in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
lmao @ the only completed battle was the mods.......lol.....ah well, i'll vote later, eating subway
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04-13-05, 01:53 PM | #12 | ||||
C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: C348 5CFF
yeah.. anyone can vote lol...
its funny how i wasn't even finished and im still winning..
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04-13-05, 02:08 PM | #13 | |||
you dont know me
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IP: 8155 9B30
not a member of VE III, but no one else votes so...
Golden Dayz: GD, ya sure udlilized all 40 lines given. your verse was more of a idealic veiw from american media during the veitnam conflict, compared to a realistic series of events. candidly, you had solid descriptions of might have been felt by the young 19 year old advisors... yet you didnt really grasp the entire scene. i mean, veitnam was like a relic... it was protected pointlessly, only to withold US prosperity. said to be protecting a democratic government while really it was to stop the spread of communsim. ya imagery as they call it hear was limited, you came more college prep than Advanced Placement...if you know what im saying. nice shit, but the lines were a little stretched, forcing ya structure to defect any line attempting to flow. the overrall impression i got from the verse was that, you have a great topical attitude you just didnt know too much about the topic ( Vietnam ). there were so many ways you could have gone with this, and i was dissapointed to have seen you delivered as basic as you could, maybe you wrote your memior in 20 minutes and just posted a "whatever" verse, instead of setting aside real time, to digest the topic and deliver greatness. hmmm? Dabatos/ Ingenius: first, id thought id let you know over 50,000 young americans were killed in veitnam. although your prolouge contained false information, it was different and original. not many people think of ways to approach by mean of a thesis...if thats what you were attempting? but whatever it was, good. umm, your lines were easier read slow. some parts were a bit unclear to capture what exactly you were arguing. but for the most part you understood the conflict and situation of such an event. which means you might have had some background information about the topic. aside from that, the content of your verse contrasted the realism and idealism of vietnam, and infact answered a few questions of mine. reading this verse really had me thinking. your verse was good, a bit more educational than GD's, but also better RV wise. good imagery and all. overrall, nice shit. vote: Dabatos |
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04-13-05, 07:09 PM | #14 | |||||
C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
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Wow man... really apprecaite the real good feedback man.. and yeah i wasn't too sure about how many ppl died.. and thats why i sed "OVER 30,000 People Died" so thats not false lol.. yeah.. i've studied it before.. but yea.. thanx man.. seriously.. for this good feed u gonna get hella money
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04-13-05, 07:14 PM | #15 | ||||
C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
Battle closed..
3-0 Dabatos wins by K-O
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