* If you think that one of the pieces in this battle should go into the Pieces of Inspiration thread then please state which piece in your vote. *

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first to check..........

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ch-ch-check

g'luck to both

As I lay in bed, submerged beneath my blankets
Pondering about life itself how One goes through anguish
Loved ones are taken seeing how life is not promised
Atleast not to my loved one that is my uncle thomas
Encountering agony pain as life for him is subsiding
Doc says life for him is short as I feel my life colliding
Currently aware of the circumstances subltely walking
Conversation not current as I have no appetite for talking
A sea of grief crashes in my head like the tide
Watching him in despair fearing the worst I cry
Wanting to share his goals as I get my gear ready
His goal being deep sea diving sitting tight and steady
Goggles propped over my head ready for the first mission
Taking a gander at my surroundings ready to continue the tradition
Soaring quick in the air bursting into the cool brisk water
Glistening in the sun, the crystals glare as I see a passing otter
Mysterical reefs so colorfull as starfish lay apon the oceans surface
Life under water is remarkable its serving a full life purpose
Fastly realizing Ive been entraped under water for quite some time
Uncle will be waiting, I shall awake him with the astonishing news of mine
Walking apon the railing not hesitating opening the room door
Gasping for air is my uncle as he squirms like a rat on the floor
Devastated to what im seeing no reaction due to the amount of shock
8:40 his death time I was unable to save my love from his breath lock
Cremated he will be his ashes to symbolize his true love of ocean
Quitley dumping them in myself no room for noise or commotion

Continuiously diving the waters yet to find a good keeping
As my metal detector gets louder of a nonstop beeping
I dive deeper to configure the beep as I come to a sudden hault
Seeing a large pink pearl covered in a load of ocean salt
Thinking twice in my head could this be why he took diving classes?
Double taking at the salt realizing what it is....its my uncles ashes
A sign of love, yet a sign of fortune he has guided me to his wishes
Now living in my uncles dream I shall for ever swim with the fishes

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g/l, cant wait for ur verse lol....i was eager and worked on this in school.....and couldnt wait to post so now im here stuck to wait

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right g'luck and upping

nice drop n uppin...................................

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hmm, bored....so i shall up for active users in this league to vote

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werd life.......dope battle......thats what i like to see......

mystic.......approached my topic well, although not the most original approach it was still good and you stayed flowing consistently throughout the verse. vocabs was on point throughout, some places where they could look to be a bit more complex but you only had one or two minor spots for that so its good. emotion and imagery in your verse was real good, a big improvement on last week i think, u delivered a nice picture for the reader making it easy for them to see where you were taking the topic so overall a good drop.

mad knight......dope drop again homey, i told ya stick to topicals and fuck text cuz u are definitely better at this shit, stayed consistent to the topic although like mystic you didnt really have one of the most original approaches. flowed well consistently from beginning to end and had the dope vocabs all the way through to, a few spots where it got weaker than other places but still nice. emotion and imagery was a plus in your verse to, had a lot of feeling all the way and overally another dope drop.

OVERALL........both verses were real good, they matched each other well in each department. now at first i thought mad knight had this (i even told him on MSN) but i dont really think i gave mystic enough credit cuz his verse equally matched Mad Knights in every area. so if i cud call it a tie i wud cuz both had identical amounts of quality so to pick a winner i'm gonna have to go with mystic cuz his verse was slightly longer so there was more to it.

V/ - Mystic Chaos

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Thanks fo the vote, uppin this.....................

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uppin .

danm nice drop, you stood on topic, very creative with this topic i like the build up the image in my head was def a good one flow smoth like the twist towards the end looks like u took time to really vent ya thoughts nice drop all around 8/10



wow, this was a great drop, i love the whole apporch you took on this with ya uncle and pearl, shit was crazy good, flow nice stood on topic had a nice image in my head you discrib every step clearly the emotion was here love the twist towards the end man this is one of the best drop i've seen from you good drop and hope to read more from you.. 9.5/10


Mystic Chaos

thanks, appreciate it.........uppin

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