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10-09-05, 10:32 PM | #1 | |||
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"Seeing Death"
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"Seeing Death" by Cezar
Trying to fight it,No running from death Force to watch him meet his last breath Seeing my friend last minute attempt to scream then 'BOOM!', *Alarmclock woke me from a terrible Dream* 1:30p.m,Monday March 1st,2004 Starting at 6thPeriod Vibes around were bad,Arriving to school late In class Taking a test,Couldnt remember the date Dropped my pen,Austin picked it up and gave it back Havin thinkersblock So he gave me the notes and facts Best friend I Could ever ask,Its completely true..... Ring!!! ...Walking to my next class,Were my essay was due About how we feel if someone close to us would die? My luck I was 1st,Gather my papers searchin for 1stline People be conseeded,always saying 'Hurry Up An GO!!!' Glanced at clock,Only got a few more minutes to go So I Stutter a bit to waiste time,Trying to stall... Ring!!! *Everyone rushing out,bumping people in the hall* Last Class for Today Takin my seat next to Austin,said "Whats up?" Class started,then he replied back,"nothin much" I knew something was up,I ask,"Is something wrong fool?" Then he said,"No,nothing is wrong FOOL!" I guess something was bothering him that moment But I had to say shit back,and start an arguement Ring!!! *He said wait for me,but all I thought was hate* Left school campus,Hoping tomorrow would be a better day Got home turned the Television on,So fustrated Phone ringed,It felt like my whole world caved in *Wimpering/tears from other end of the line* TJ telling me: Dude Austin Died........... -Next Day,Principle Damerin announced to the school,beep "Pardon the enteruption,but lets join hands and pray for the family of Austin Jerome Ekberg who they've lost yesterday,March 1st 2004 6:30p.m in a dirtbike accident.May God be with him."beep- ------------------------- Rest In Peace Austin Jerome Ekberg Jan. 29th,1991 - March 1st,2004 Last edited by -Cezar- : 10-09-05 at 11:19 PM. |
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10-09-05, 10:38 PM | #2 | |||
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=210485
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=211110 Last edited by -Cezar- : 10-09-05 at 11:08 PM. |
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10-14-05, 06:38 PM | #3 | |||
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uppin for feed................
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10-21-05, 08:31 AM | #4 | ||||||
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kinda long nice imagetry for real but need a little wordplay with more rhyming but you can improve that just by staying consistant well anyway let me kdrop this right here dawg
Spit piles of vapor that ends up on files of paper attractive Nouns ill like active compounds a real chemical laxative Girl in a skirt with ass is an inert mass of sex content Pay complex rent for one night if it s done right like flint Sheets spark a deep part of passion, fashioned in quilts Coo-chee juice flows like a sluggish stream bedpost tilt Form love wish and cream cock deep with hot heat built To hang when soft Last edited by gladbag : 10-21-05 at 12:14 PM. |
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10-24-05, 06:41 PM | #5 | |||
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^that was the dumbest thing i've read that actually ryhmed.
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06-29-06, 01:42 AM | #6 | |||
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uppin..........
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06-30-06, 01:54 PM | #7 | ||||
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Not bad, U had some good points as well as some bad, But not a bad Piece. Good Structure and it Flowed well, Rhyme Screme could be upped a bit, But it was aight..
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07-05-06, 04:47 PM | #8 | ||||
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Damn old thread
*Snaps fingers*
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