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the intro is cool. Doomsday sounds so mean. lol

oh snap. i hate these kinda beats. but thats still cool.

first verse - i think your flow is too strict. like i think you should kinda relax more with the flow and let it flow. you are on the beat though. lyrics nah. but that dont matter cause people usually just listen to the beat.

chorus - boring. nothing special

second verse -flow same as first. alicia keys line? umm its okay. lyrics again werent too good. your prescence was there. matched the beat well.


overall good club song.


rtf in my sig on the song He Watches Me

lol yeah the crowd on this site likes the underground shit. but the fanbase in my area likes the head bangin. shit like this. so i'm goin back and forth between what kind of shit to do. imma be doin alot of underground tracks starting soon though fo sho

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dope ass intro mayn props to apexx aka dooms.

the beat is a fuckin banga like dayum, I like that, the ewing line is so dope....the lyrics are fa sho dope...overall dope track ima rock on my speakers for awhile. the quality is good as well.

overall dope track keep it up

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thanx famz...i appreciate the feedback..

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im bout to go drop some feed on other tracks....do the same and drop feed on this..

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Oh and big ups to everybody that helped me on this track

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this track was coo.. hook was plain.. but it was a good club banga

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My Lines Are ILL yo

yeah i have the track without the hook. im going to add another hook. I just didn't have time to think of one.

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godaamn @ this track...
first things first

intro-
loving how the dude apexx got on it
it really gives it more of a protege type/up and coming star feel to it..

beat-
pretty str8
someone wanted me to do a track wit em on this beat but i turned it down...
however, im DEFINETLY liking you on this beat
i think you fit it perfectly

and word to how you get right into it
i loooooove the start of your verse, i unno why i jus do
killin them punches, shit sound like something you be spittin on the street to a group...and thats wassup
ya first verse is almost perfect in my book, i aint findin nuttin i dont like in it...if i had to find one thing itd be quality, and even thats pretty damn decent.
emotion is off the fucking chain, like i said i picture you spittin this to a group...

the 2nd verse is pretty solid as well
not as good as the first, mostly because your flow was a tad bit off in some parts
lyrics is still pretty str8
overall i say the 1st verse outshined the 2nd though, but hey still nice...

but the number one thing im not feeling in this track is the hook..
i know hooks can be a pain in the ass most of the time, but just sit down and think about it for awhile and youll eventually get one..
the whole point of a hook is to make it catchy, nah mean?
i think it wouldve been crazy had you kept the whole concept of it now, but thrown in something right before it sorta like..
"i thought you knew? im tooo hot for yalllll man"
^^just an example
but yea, hook could use some work, but thats really it.

overall, i was most definetly feeling this track
i listened to it a few times, out of pleasure..
most of the times ill jus peep a track once, maybe twice just to write up some feed for it..but this i actually bumped cause i liked it. so thats saying something
8/10

keep em coming fam
and we should hit up a collab sometime

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Damn the beat is kinda weird but im feelin ya flow the song isn't the best quality new style im feelin it man sounds like u just put the speakers to the mic and recorded hot rhymes man 8.5/10

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Word much respect for the feedback. Jea im going to redo the hook once i have more time and i think of something interesting too say..i might even sample it with some rappers from other songs. I respect the honest feedback

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ya flows a lil' strict, instead of lettin it come out naturally it seemed really structured, but uhm, the lyrics were nice *raspberry* I wasn't bout to read, I actually heard everything you said... Lyrics were pretty good, flow was good for the beat, intro- nice by Apexx, i was feeling both verses... your energy was pretty good on the track, stay up..

this wasn't bad, the only thing I wasn't feelin was the Chorus, It seem like you coulda added much more to it. But yeah, straight track.......
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thanx ma i appreciate the honest feedback. LOL yeah i know about the hook. and i dont think it was that structured but hey thats the shit i dont notice right?

respect

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