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01-08-06, 12:40 PM | #1 | |
Odi et Amo
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Xplosive vs. sabre
IP: CDF2 4A2E
Check-ins are due WEDNESDAY Topical pieces are due FRIDAY All the voting ends on SUNDAY Rules & info can be found: here Topic: Thinking Of A Masterplan
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01-08-06, 01:05 PM | #2 |
Middle Weight
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check............
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01-08-06, 02:08 PM | #3 | |
tooth tiger
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
easy .
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E-style
cause thats how e-style does it, we got power and skill you vultures don't realize you feeding off our fuckin' kill |
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01-11-06, 05:38 PM | #4 | |
tooth tiger
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
basically all written today, minus the first few lines i wrote last night....40 lines.
Thinking Of A Master Plan its time i unleash, free my skills in a battle reaching both arms for star dust, filling my patterns i've mastered the lingo, now passing out singles my flow cracking concrete and shattering windows bashing top elites who wanna stand on my rhymes i'm bulldozing the rainforest, expanding my lines always keeping one hand on the mic, a pen in the other rapping so insightful you could send to your mother but still so deadly you'll be running for cover make your girl so ready she'll be humping the oven its a plan that my hands soon move to depict like the sands of an hourglass, tuning the wrist i'm through with the shit, i'm taking my turn spend every day laying spits, till i get what i've earned i've learned to preserve my words, with hundreds in reserve heavy hitters serve you fast, so i'm throwing 'em curves i'll be the one guy who gets on your every nerve that one pack of matches that wont seem to burn first place finisher who laughs at second and third putting cigarette ashes in your grandmother's urn the pervert at the bar feeling up your girl's skirt then seeing me on the dance floor with my face in her shirt but i still bring the hurt, this is my destiny calling me down, only brings out the best in me see i wage war with the page, pen defending the lyrics but they amend to the song, and when everyone hears it im skillfully creative, although lately, willingly blantent but still you hear my shit and know its your favourite you hate it i'm so good, you should, but its magic you raise your level to me and see that i've already past it this is what i was made for, to excel in all the stages i didn't ask for this path, but to hell if i don't take it no makeshift, no fake shit, i am the real thing providing lifeforce and mind comforts, and any other feelings imaginitive, intuitive, impel fate, ajust to pressure i could describe for days, cause, well, i'm just fresher thats the difference though, my presence fills the room but get this, the twist is i'm still in the womb i'm only seconds old, all other thoughts ignored cause my plan starts to roll, when they cut my umbillical cord
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E-style
cause thats how e-style does it, we got power and skill you vultures don't realize you feeding off our fuckin' kill Last edited by Drakel : 01-11-06 at 06:27 PM. Reason: requested: spelling errors |
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01-13-06, 08:53 PM | #5 |
Middle Weight
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IP: 49FB B804
“Thinking of a Master Plan” It is late at night in the city, the deserted streets are covered in a foggy gray I lie awake thinking of my plans, I am ready for whatever comes my way With my intelligence and strength, I will obtain money, fame, and might I know I am capable enough to become a winner in this funny game of life Admitted, I have my flaws… but even my weaknesses are creeping away I haven’t done drugs in a month, haven’t smoked in exactly a week n a day And I leap at opportunity, its something good that the game gonna do to me Just flow with the music, b, the times might get tough but hope is immunity It’s gon get me through this sea, of dangerous streets where treachery lurks I’m risin above the hexes of birth, untouchable, an eagle on a feathery perch Lookin down on the world where death isn’t a curse, I’ma soar higher still Relying on my inspired skill to get away, because sparks burn and fires kill The temptation of crime is a liar still, one whose death will not be lamented I won’t be rear-ended on the road of life, my moral code won’t be amended Life’s a bitch with a hand extended, and I’m reaching for her saving touch I refuse to be even debatin stuff that will put my soul within Satan’s clutch No crime and no more flamin dutch, cuz I know that I’m stronger than that I’ll right all the wrongs of my past, I’ma dust off my gloves n walk up to bat My wait to be great will be no longer than half of what I’ve dreamed before A taste of redemption will make me scream for more, now I’ve seen the hole In this wall of struggle I’ve been bleedin for, I’ma climb out n not look back This chapter in my book is whack, I’ll write a new one without crooked facts… Now I’ve formulated my master plan, my thoughts are hopeful and sobering I lay back and relax, allowing the welcome peace of sleep to come over me … I wake up to mud splashed in my face, my feet are hurt and my back is sore I recall my plans for the future, but I’ve made them dozens of times before My life will never change, I’m sure of that and I’ve already given up hope This hole is too deep to escape, I can only hope someone’ll throw me a rope I roll off my bed of boxes and pick up a sign, too ashamed to read it myself The cardboard reads “Homeless, and Hungry, Need Donations, Please Help” |
01-13-06, 09:19 PM | #6 |
Middle Weight
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IP: 49FB B804
goodluck, let's get some votes on this
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01-14-06, 10:04 AM | #7 |
Middle Weight
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IP: 49FB B804
up
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01-14-06, 03:31 PM | #8 |
Middle Weight
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IP: 49FB B804
lets get some votes
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01-14-06, 10:40 PM | #9 |
Middle Weight
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IP: 49FB B804
how hard is it to vote?
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01-15-06, 11:41 AM | #10 |
Middle Weight
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IP: 49FB B804
up
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01-16-06, 12:16 PM | #11 |
Just searching.
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IP: 8262 49AE
About as hard as a boner.
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01-16-06, 12:40 PM | #12 | |
The Epitome Of Greatness
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IP: 0825 899A
Sabre:
dope verse, i was feeling the concept you took. Good storyline nice little twist at the end. Creative wordplay and an easy read but not elementary. OK vocab and decent imagery, a couple lines could have been reworded better but other than that you wrote this topic well. Overall: 8.5/10 Xplosive: You also had a good verse, you kind of end in the opposite route using more imagery and emotion. Which is a good thing for topicals but i just wasnt feeling your verse as much, it was drawn out in my eyes. Still a decent read but alot of lines could have been said differently to give your verse that extra kick. Overall: 6.8/10 Vote: Sabre
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01-17-06, 01:43 PM | #13 | |
Odi et Amo
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IP: F76F AD58
Closed, sabre wins...
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