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04-22-06, 11:00 PM

~Babylon~

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Dervla Vs. ...D.P...

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Topic: "Garden of Eden"

Line limit: 20-50(negotiate in checkin)

Check in by: Monday 11:59pm

Drop by: Wednesday 11:59pm

Votes due by: Friday 11:59pm

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~ME~ Vs. Shh!writer
~ME~ Vs. Poetic Artist

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04-22-06, 11:01 PM

Dervla

Poet's Daughter.

Posts: 360

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Check............

30 Lines.

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mystery Is a Freak!!

ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life.
Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8
ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do.
Smartone Freal:

ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u
Smartone Freal:
ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol
Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private
ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged*

Last edited by Dervla : 04-22-06 at 11:13 PM.

04-24-06, 03:36 AM

WhoAmI

WhoAreYou?

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check 1

30's cool

04-26-06, 04:57 PM

WhoAmI

WhoAreYou?

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Garden of Eden

My heart beats at a greater pace, frustration makes me screw my face
I'm in a haste to manipulate this sequence into its place
I pride myself as an ace at my trade, maybe the ace of spades
And this track i made could be the key to seein this face get paid
Indeed .... I'm necessarily in a solitary environment
Free time for only myself, no one else, there's no time for them
Additionally this fact was once briefly mentioned to me
If i so much as bring a friend up in here, even unintentionally
Productions will cease, my glorious priveledges would be stripped
If I violate the rules, the boss will exacerbate and flip

(i receive a phone call)

Hey how are you i haven't heard from you in a very long time
I'm just producing away at another potential hit ... you still fine?
You sound like you wanted to do something I'm kinda busy
Wow i never knew you felt that way, you must really miss me
Where am i? I'm at the studio in east croydon where i work
Do a google search, haha oh for real speak of these perks
Ah hah you're dope for real, alright im gonna direct you to the place
It looks really deserted but you'll have look beyond it's face
It has the dopest set up inside, this building's unique
And when you reach and try come in make sure you wipe your feet...

Instead of sitting sequencing drums, i find myself twiddling my thumbs
I've seriously abused the owner's trust, through lust what have i become?
However i cannot hide the fact i endeavour to see how events turn
Introduce her to my world, who know's what wonders she'll learn?
Upon the blessing of her prescense, i inform her of my deception
However my sincere attempt at explanation hits interception
The owner stands at the door, withdraws and calls me to follow
I've abused his trust in my follwing his rules, I feel hollow
Human condition stimulated my minds hunger, breakin the rule he set....
My warmth and security of the studio are gone, I lost because i fed

04-26-06, 08:42 PM

Dervla

Poet's Daughter.

Posts: 360

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Can I get a extension till tomorrow?...busy-school. This shouldn't be due on wednesday, right int he middle of weekday. Should be friday, but w/e...

04-30-06, 04:17 PM

Sean Gunner

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v- DP

For showing.

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^^I think this explains my view on gangster rap perfectly.

04-30-06, 07:47 PM

Dervla

Poet's Daughter.

Posts: 360

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Wtf did ya'll see the extension granted?...Far I'm concern its still sunday.

04-30-06, 11:44 PM

Dervla

Poet's Daughter.

Posts: 360

In the Garden Of Eden-I found my true love

IP:

Garden Of Eden

*Listening to "It was all a dream"..By Jay-z feat biggie*

This night in the darkness,
2 girls found the key of life,
cause of a poem and a kiss,
Both of them entered paradise.

Let me take the mic for a minute and tell you this story,
fuck the metaphors and similies this coming from the heart,
I was 15, when this passion of love bloomed in me, start(ed)
Alone in my room with my best-friend karen-playing cards,
Mom gone working-2 of my brothers, jake and raul in charge.
Moon shining so beautifully outside cooling the heat rays,
while 5 kids in a hot stove-sorry, the electricty hasn't been paid.
Uh, staring blindly at Karen, I ain't 'ray', I see the boredom-
on her face, so I said "Hey Karen lets roleplay one of my poem"
"Sure", she said it with a smile showing her perfect crusted teeth,
that's when I got on my knee's and pull my poems from underneath.
The poem was called "war", we playfully battled, with giggles-
instead of war sounds of desire of killing each other until we read

"after a long battle, they made peace
with a kiss on the lips and on the cheek"

She grasp my arms and moved close to me, "what the fuck?"
"we have to do what the poem says- not the time to give up"
I felt the adrenaline scorching in my viens "Ok"-sweating hard,
butterflies flying happily in my stomach, nipples pointing afar,
I inhale my breath, my lungs tighten-until I felt her lips on mine,
so passionatley, lovingly, both of our chest touching each other,
fetl like both of us we're angels flying and holding one of another.
"Do you like me?" I asked when I pulled away looking in her eyes,
in my surprise she responds "Uh..Lets go to bed"-Why she hides?
In the night beneath the sheets' I''ve found my answer, How I Know?
We was destined to be together, cause finally after 5 weeks,
I felt the blow of the A/C on that night, mom came in and asked
"Damn who paid the bills in this house!?"...."I don't know"

Quick key'd it...That beat on "It was a dream" song is very inspirational.

Last edited by Dervla : 05-02-06 at 05:29 PM.

05-01-06, 05:56 PM

Dervla

Poet's Daughter.

Posts: 360

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