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Old 06-21-06, 11:16 AM   #1
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Ok so it's week 2. You must drop a minumum of 16 lines and try and keep the amount of lines even ish.

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You MUST pick a topic a topic from the following list, and you can both do different topics. Good luck and drop dope.

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Cleansed by Fire
In Anger... I am Truly Happy
Shards of a Broken Mind
These Shackes are my Freedom
Hope is a Tattered Flag
This Love is my Pain
Of Dust and Air
The King in Chains
Tears, Idle Tears
To Find God
The Moons Shadow
Risen to a New Low
Does the Solder Bleed as much as me?
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Old 06-21-06, 01:42 PM   #2
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Check Move..............
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Old 06-22-06, 03:35 AM   #3
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OOOH nice topics..up..
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Old 06-24-06, 04:48 PM   #4
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I jus got my computer back runnin
i will drop 2night or 2mmorow morning.........
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Old 06-25-06, 01:33 AM   #5
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yea, i been hella busy..so ill drop soon..
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Old 06-25-06, 01:36 AM   #6
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Im droppin when i sign on 2mmorow

i jus got my computer back on

and i had 2 drop 2 topicals 2day

If u dont drop by 2mmorow..U lose

so make sure u drop
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Old 06-25-06, 10:17 PM   #7
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Risen to a New Low


*Sits at My Kitchen Table...Counting Change*

its sad how my life is changin from this Manipulation
that transformed my body into an rotting annihilation
Lack of Communication and even lesser Determination
to stop the marks on my arms from Needle Decoration
Fascinated the Conversation of my own Prosecution
ive Endowed Numerous Penises in my own Prostitution
my retribution failed very well due to the Myths Infamous
Shamed my Relatives "How did i get my Self Into This"
Millions and Numerous Dividends have been Distributed
Bringing Extended Pension to the Many men who attributed
to the Prostituion in the Demolishing there own Projects
Complaining to the Dealer like"Is this all the Rocks I Get's?"
Throwing Fits with the Individuals im Shareing Needles With
Communicating in Tradeings Like Take this Ill give u a Fifth
Then this Cist developed over my Falubian Tubes..Im Done
Just when i thought i Could Quit..Jus when i thought i Won
Takes only One Dumb Conversation to start the Devastation
To Influence your Actions through Several Stages of Aberration
See an Application in Life is Fearfull especially with admiration
My Skin tone is Pink..My clothes stink leading to accusation
Numerous augmentation's ive written asking for my Help
But if not anything else my family give Help for my Health
New Dishes Now on my Shelf..But my skin has Abrasion's
And ive Been Robbed and Life Threatened in many Occasions
Socilization in my Enviorement is starting to wear my Pride
I Visualize my Own Demize as my Life flashes within my Eye
And a Tru Lie Occur's... that Cause my Nightmares to Appear
That i owe my Boss Thousands now im living in Ah New Fear
From my Fellow Peers new Tears Appear in my Self Destruction
Slowly Moving Brick by Brick i Performed my own Self Construction
My Days are in Deduction And let ask u Wha Happend..Do u Know?
How i could of Risen so High...But i was only Risen to a New Low


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Old 06-25-06, 11:18 PM   #8
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Rushed It for Ya

From Time to Time, Many Things Manipulate My Mind State,
And Line After Line Of Cocaine It Violates And My Eyes Break,
Held Down By Chains Shackles Are My Home Armed As I Choke My Life,
Take It Away, I Drift In Day By Day And Tell Stories Of My Broken Mind....

*The Man Shivers Uncontrollably*

Arguements With Myself Torture The Inner Chambers Of My Soul,
Until I Cant Take It No More, And Follow The Void Of Unknown,
I'm Cold Blooded Always Ready To Murder And Maybe Rape Kids,
But Kind Hearted By Day And Tell Em Run Away Quick,
My Eyes Only See Straight But My Mind Breaks Away Into Shards,
Of 2, One Good, One Evil, And I Can't Even Fathom Where To Start,
Screaming At Myself Until My Ears Bleed, And Tongue Grows Numb,
Medication? Something I Need, But Can't Afford So I Live With None,
Whole Families Are Dead, Because For Fun I Killed All Of Them,
But Then I Hear More Voices Than One, And It Grows Calm Again,
I Could Snap Out Of Reality All In A Minutes Time,
And Tell Many Stories From The Shards Of My Skitzophrenic mind...
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Old 06-26-06, 05:06 PM   #9
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Kid - seen this take been used plenty of time..I've also seen it been done better...

Your telling of this was very shady; I think you could stand to use better imagery to help me get a better idea..the flow was a bit shaky...I think you got your story twisted a bit though, but then again thats my opinion...plenty of stuff could have been worded better, but I see potential..

Troop - Started out well, nice rhyme scheme...the piece was a bit simple, but then again that may be your writing style...Imagery was there, and it flowed nicely...Vocabulary wasn't amazing, but still was above-par..I can tell this isn't your best work, though..Nonetheless, I enjoyed this story more and it was less flawed, so..

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Old 07-04-06, 12:29 AM   #10
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Troop wins

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