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03-30-07, 09:39 AM | #1 | |||||||
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sickhead that i got
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i got alot on this mind the sickness is within
cant you feel it cuz it's right under your skin never afraid to say what I ever have to cuz all i wanna do is hate and smack you attack you with these words you cant tackle waiting for the wack emcees to leave em dismantled u should respect me cuz my flowin gives u a spin wot do i have 2 say to tell you you aint anything everything u say to me just leaves you back fired my verses are so good they leave yours tired expired got no time for u cuz it aint yours im well known for starting these rap wars everyone on this site hates me hmm i wonder why cuz im better purely and you try to denie the more u agitate me i wanna see u dieing if i cant beat u verbally i'll send you flying sickend mind speaks it's own fuckin language i try give u brain damage ur lifes pemanently banished just not in a nice mood sorry for bein rude but i do not care if i see ur sorry ass abused i say take more time in listening to the rules Last edited by Mindstate : 03-30-07 at 07:38 PM. |
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03-30-07, 09:55 AM | #2 | |||||||
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Weak. Take more time, and choose your words more carefully.
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03-30-07, 10:49 AM | #3 | |||||||
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I wouldnt say weak... but take more time writing n listen to Tupac n Bigge up ya vocab
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03-30-07, 11:11 AM | #4 | |||||||||
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^ LMAO @ listen to Tupac and Biggie!!!
but yeah vocab DEFINITELY needs upping work on some wordplay coz it seems too direct try explaining the feelings you're puttin in this piece through metaphors bruv... rhyming is too basic too, needs stepping up
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