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04-03-07, 05:23 AM | #1 | ||||||
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First verse on this site not a noob... READ!
IP: A31F 4A93
This is my first post on this site. Feedback much appreciated.
Without,a shout "of a doubt" I step ON SET like an actor staying out "and about",not impressed by these rappers they'll never get "the picture" similar to a TV wit the screen out flowin off "the richter" labeled a neat freak the way I clean house wit so much dirt "on my slate" "my soul" could neva be sanitized got a full meal "on my plate"as "my foes" craniums get vandalize cuz I'm that guy, that dude these emcees wanna imitate switch my scheme every sixteen,styles hard to infiltrate aint no smoother, Imma shooter like the d.c. sniper strong arm steady, I sit ready to blast on any cypher flows diverse,to "be first" the tops where i'm going words disperse, no rehearse on the fly like a boeing got "pro tools" wit "no rules" my reason is logic flows acid, by the masses, I don't do it to profit READ THE RULES!! Last edited by Mindstate : 04-04-07 at 07:23 PM. |
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04-04-07, 03:10 PM | #2 | |||||
don't try.
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IP: 28AD 5545
Well this is pretty good for a first drop. Your rhyme scheme was pretty good, it flowed alright. Ya had some metaphors..kind of funny. All n all keep elevatin. Just didn't like the diss sayin your not impressed by all of us..haha
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04-04-07, 07:13 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: A31F 4A93
I was just saying rappers in general. No disrespect to anyone. As far as it flowing... It seems like it flowed just fine... I could easily flow it out loud without getting caught up on any of the parts...
Thanks for the post. Still uppin for feedback Last edited by adamjace : 04-04-07 at 07:18 PM. |
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