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06-03-07, 03:56 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Week One : Mr. Write vs. Moniker
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Write Away Your Thoughts Mini Seed Tournament Week One Verses Due Friday 8th, 2007 Votes Due by Sunday 10th, 2007 Week One is [Insert Topic] Week...
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06-08-07, 04:35 AM | #2 | ||||||
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check...wow didnt know this got off...woot.
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06-08-07, 01:54 PM | #3 | ||||||
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here. what's the topic?
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06-08-07, 01:57 PM | #4 | |||||||
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nvm, guess we pick our own from the list. |
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06-08-07, 02:44 PM | #5 | |||||
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Good guess lawl. Hope you guys drop tonight.
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06-09-07, 04:38 AM | #6 | ||||||
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do i still have to drop....i aint dropping a verse.......but here is mine and i aint late bruh i have been scouting RV and RB with invisible but i took it off to drop cus moniker aint showing...so
Your Face The personality Of you diverge willingly; Gripping the other side of the pillow. Softly stroking with gentle manicures, Pedaling her rose around your smile. Say cheese… Your happiness so radiant, Yet underneath it all hides all that is evil. Tip toeing around your heart, Shredding it piece by piece… …or so I think. So I gutted the pictures with scissors More viciously than Edward (scissorhands) …as you stood all alone. Now you feel my pain, with your blank expression; hanging from the high of your mess. leave with the wind and dont look back.
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-Chalkin' Up Your Future Last edited by Mr.Write : 06-09-07 at 04:55 AM. |
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06-09-07, 02:25 PM | #7 | ||||||
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I can get something in today if thats agreeable.
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06-09-07, 07:58 PM | #8 | ||||||
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The Semi-Cleansed Palette
And we'll call the dirt art... A certain form of which, resembles deliberate strokes of genius we adjust in a complacent state. Chaotic, but sperate in a way less tastefull when the books are closed. Open wide. With the mouth of a new-born I'm eating the few words you scribbled on paper plates. Even with all the fuss I can't accept a little tongue-out-of-cheek if you expect to force feed me complete works that have been left to waste. Shut that toothy grin while your in a common place novel second rate to the modern charts staged to begin their debate on the semi-cleansed palette... when dirt's been established as art. And an impeccable poem is only considered to be lower totem; easy to come by, deprived of mistakes. |
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06-09-07, 10:57 PM | #9 | ||||||
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sorry man you showed up late bruh....i choose to DQ you man....
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-Chalkin' Up Your Future Last edited by Mr.Write : 06-09-07 at 11:08 PM. |
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06-09-07, 11:13 PM | #10 | |||||
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Mr. Write-Your verse was good, I really enjoyed the read. It was what you would call "short, but sweet". You had good imagery and really created a very vivid picture to go along with your verse. I felt you went along with your topic in a unique way and got a good concept out of your topic.
Moniker-Your verse was meh okay, I felt you had a hard time painting any picture with imagery. Just didnt really do anything for me..Don't think you had your whole concept down for your topic. Better luck next week. V/ Mr. Write, please hit my battle up as well.
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06-10-07, 01:07 AM | #11 | |||||||
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No worries, it's understandable. |
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06-10-07, 05:47 AM | #12 | ||||||
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Mr.Write wins
Moniker DQ'D
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