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07-09-08, 06:29 PM | #1 | |||||||
New to RV
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new to site peep me
IP: F082 0643
ayo....
a menace wit mine//a dentist at times//crack ya in the mouth like several times//nuff blunt force trauma to sever ya spine//clever wit, lines my mindstate?,the boy been upstate wit the shanks and the wine//a fuckin ruffneck,fuck respect cuz u know dat state time...don't give it to me mufucka uma take mine//no time to waste, never know when my times up//ain't talkin bout death,i'm on parole til 09 fuck//still give u a cold nine or snub to da temple til ya whole mind is sludge........ off tops |
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07-09-08, 06:34 PM | #2 | ||||
Peace, Love, Unity
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IP: 9244 687A
Man, you're DOPE.
But seriously, you need to work on everything. Practice. Last edited by Kirk : 07-09-08 at 06:41 PM. |
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07-09-08, 07:52 PM | #3 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: F082 0643
good look and advice homie
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07-09-08, 08:05 PM | #4 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: 1C32 C9D5
you need some structure bro, flow is off often, build your lines like this:
.................................. ................................./ ........................................ ................................/ ya know what I meen, keep dropin |
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07-09-08, 09:35 PM | #5 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: E9A6 7493
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see why cant we have more new people who take constructive criticism this well? but yea the first thing u need to work on is your structure, if u continue to drop open mics we'll go from there.and u need to leave feed on two other OM's and then post the links here or this will be closed
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07-09-08, 11:28 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: BA58 16CD
at least you got multies so it flows koo
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07-10-08, 12:18 AM | #7 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 3103 24DA
You need to leave 2 links to other peoples open mics that you have left solid feedback on.
I will leave feedback once you have posted your links. |
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07-11-08, 05:07 PM | #8 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 967B 85BD
no links and you posted a second open mic.
Closed |
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