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Old 08-11-08, 10:38 PM   #1
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Week 10 Mag - The World Turns

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Week 10 Mag - The World Turns
by: Lay





Intro


Well well well, I thought Nicks mag was good but a bit bias..so fuck it. Here's a mag, read it if you want, if not, I don't give a shit really. With only 6 weeks left in the regular season seems like things been heatin up, we even got JTR jus about back into old form an even got him to drop the day the battles were up. Impressive, next time dont' rush your verse J..but good verse either way. Kirk is still the champ, after havin a whole week to see what he had to beat its not a suprise to me that he won. It was close, but kirk can tell whats good, an can tell what he writes if its good, not to mention he could get opinions on punches during the week. Anyway, the level of skill is still overrall below what it really should be..an if you got the talent use it. Don't half ass your verses, put some time in polish it up, instead of being harsh as shit, take some time to give constructive critiscim while your at it. Anyway, I'll get onto the mag - enjoy.


Battle Reviews



HW Champ Match Kirk vs JTR
Number of lines - 24
My prediction - JTR


No offense kirk, but I was goin with JTR on this one..after readin his verse I thought it was pretty funny.. but I think his downfall was you matchin if not out matchin him..an us havin all week to see J's an yours came up later in the week so it seemed fresher, kinda seemed like J's verse lost some sting.

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Quit actin up like I need massive luck, Jack’s a nut, plus Kirk is ass and sucks
Yo Lay! You really oughtta let the oil prices drop before you gas him up


hmm..this concept is played especially usin it so much this week alone. Jeez, I shouldn had mention that cliche in the mag. J started off weak, but his flirt with death line, pitfall, an his klingon lines were pretty what stood out from him.

onto kirk..you started off kinda weak, I mean it was mildly funny but its so predictable while readin I saw it coming, wasn nothin special..kinda corny. Still okay punch..but not a solid way to start off

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And lmao at you crying about a no-show. That just proves you're a sore gay,
I ain't seen a bitch fit that bad since your chick tried to step through a doorway,


there was some controversy over this line, some read it an labled it as whack. This is for you voters, when you read lines don't jus glance read through an actually realize what your readin. An jus cuz its a fat girl line doesn mean its played, theres so many concepts you can put on it to make it a fresh concept. So stfu,..the crying in the set up did its job, but maybe you shoulda had bitch-fit or something maybe thats how its suppose to be grammatically,..anyway it was a good flip.

Just as voters, take your time an try to pick up on wordplay noone should ever have to 'wordplay' quote shit..for you to pick up on it. That gives away the punch..so don't expect that to be around wp. Well, kirks bitchfit line, taco, tae bo, an cracker jack lines hit pretty hard, had me laughin. An in the end Kirk took this. An I'll say noone wants kirk to stay champ, I'm sure they want to see a new face for the title just as much as I do, an with so few voter in the league, I wouldn ever say someone won because of a Fan Club..stupidest shit I ever heard, stop gettin butt sore over shit, he won, he takes his time an puts effort in uses all 5 days usually..an indeed puts in the work an it pays off. People vote honestly, keep it that way.


Contendorship Match LP vs D-Bitchass
Number of Lines - 10
My Prediction - LP

Well, this was a major fag move on D's part. Way to sign up to the league an gay it up in a important match. Suck one dude, seriously..10 fuckin lines? you couldn post 10 lines? your fuckin garbage, dont' bother signin back in. LP posted kinda early too

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cuz my synopsis is quick, doesn’t take much strength to Cyclops this prick
D will always look deformed, cuz its a grade students hope not to get


That was really the one line I was feelin..his horseshoe line had potential but the wordin kinda let it down. Good job man..goodluck this week against Kirk.

Lay Fear vs YouAndWhatArmy
Number of Lines - 20
My Prediction - Laz

Well, I know Laz's history an he can drop nice..but I think this was kinda a let down of what he is capable of. I expected more..I honestly think he underestimated Lay, rushed his verse an thought he'd take it. He had his verse up shortly after the battles were up..Lay posted that night too. I honestly felt like each verse had its strong points, but it came down to vote for who's style you are familiar with. JTR an Nick an have that same structure an set up to their punches..an I kinda felt like they liked his verse better for it, an Kirks style is kinda familiar with Lay's..thats what it seemed to me. Lol, funny.. kinda like you feel your shit more than other people might? if that makes sense..but anyhow, I felt Laz's Ladle line, worhty opponent line, an his streched concept line were all pretty hard hitting an stood out to me. Some that coulda been better were the Wordz Ahgod one? comparing him to Lay's fan..woulda been so much more affective if set it up to say that to Kirk seein as were friends in real life. Gassin up..damn, played concept, you seem to be able to call alot of shit played..but can't realize when you see it?..or you woulda left that out. The Slytherin wp was forced, I know what it is I got it. I've seen harry potter..never have I said I'd slither in a girl..NEVER..didn't seem effective. An men silther in my girl? so why would Voldemort be my father?..na, maybe an okay concept but executed not so well..coutning opener was played, an the solo life story was predictable an forced.
Lay's verse...hmm.. opener was coo..few lines that followed were straight. The underbelly of society line..kinda didnt' hit hard, poor wording..the army requirement line wasn't that creative..everything was aight, until the struck me as a bitch..that was played..an followed by the Pimp'll wordplay..that was whack. closer was on point. Overrall..through a close battle, I agree with Nick..it was battle of the week..very close, Lay took it by one vote. Good battle guys, should expect better from both of em this week.


Flight vs Lil Wayne
Number of Lines - 12
My Prediction - Flight

Well, this was weaker than it coulda been. Flight seemed to just key a verse, I know for a fact he can drop better than that if he puts effort in. Fact is he's been busy,..that might be the reason. Wayne, had someone else post for him cuz he was away..idk if that had to do with his verse..but..Flight ya opener was aight..coulda set it up by wording it better..Jonn wayne was a decent flip..Dent was okay..not so hard hitting,..

enough with the gangsta drama bitch, you can tell that you're a class whimp
i bet the last time you tried actin' hard, probly got your ass whipped

that..should never be seen in ANY verse..I mean..thats not even a punch..thats like a statement..avoid that. No creativity,..straight up as filler as they come. Weak..try an avoid that from now on. Also..your closer was a weakkkk attempt at wp..Waynes verse on the other hand..his opener was aight..an followed it with a coo punch..then fel off completely..think outside the bun was whack..the W in ya name was whack..definately played. The michael jackson line..wtf..never again..NEVER..use that..if you do a michael concept it better be the most unexpected an dopest flip you can possible think of ..not something blakc an white.

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he leads a faggot life, not dope, he's borderline like a hermaphrodite
his skill in black and white? well, more like the michael jackson type


that should never be mentioned again..nuff said. Flight had enough to take this..if Wayne carried the consistency of his first two bars throuhgout his verse he woulda won...but Flight edged this.


LFS vs Ghostface
Number of Lines - 10
My Prediction - LFS

Well, weakest match of the week right here..LFS you dropped like nothing quotable..all weak concepts..you obviously rushed your verse..an it was meh..Ghostface coulda took this if he dropped ONE fuckin punch. But he failed to do so..his verse didn't even have punches..just statements really..nothing harsh.
And a tip..NEVER say this at the end of your verse..don't ever doubt your skill..don't post shit after your verse saying
"keyed it"
"meh"
"bullshit..I threw together"
"sorry"..
none of that wtf..don't ever down your shit, its the voters job to judge.

Quote:
bullshit i threw together to not get dq'd again. lol sorry the last few weeks have been shit, got a lot of stuff goin down.i'll probably be signin out for about a week, maybe 2.


Quote:
srry jus finished my comp monitor at my house blew and my shit waz saved on there so i had 2 make a new rap


You both had shit like that at the end of your verse..don't say that.. EVER..an dont' put an excuse at the end of your shit..honestly we dont' give a flying fuck if your dog chewed up your computer..fuck it..try harder put more time in, you got 5 fuckin days..an a extension if needed.


Power Rankings


1. Kirk
He's still the champ, he deserves it. He puts the time in, an it pays off. He tries, an with his funny style its hard to top. He's consistant goodluck if ya face him.

2. JTR
Really stepped it up an proved he's deserving of this number two spot, he's got swagg,..he's hilarious..consistency was his weak spot last week. He's close to bein back in his old form..thats lethal

3. Lay
Coming off a real close battle, he's always dangerous..just has a lil problem with consistency.

4. Laz
Well, I think he made a lasting impression on his skills after this week. Now you know he means buisness. I'm sure he's a lil sore after the loss,..he's harsh, an honest, pick it up, or he'll call you out on your shit..dudes a threat. Watch out for him.

5. Nick
signed out, an now back from the dead..lookin to prove his worth this week gunnin for Laz..they got the similar style..so it'll be interesting to see who uses it better.


Predictions

Kirk vs LP
Well, as decent as LP has been..I don't really think he has what it takes to knock kirk off his pedestal,..he'll have to really put this one outa his hat.

Lay vs Flight
A rematch between these two. I really dont' think Flight can win unless he puts more effort into his verse than he has been recently. Lay's coming off a close win..an prolly gonna roll through unless flight changes up from whats become his Norm, these past few weeks.

Laz vs King Solo
These are two talented heads, they got a simliar style..this is prolly gonna get Battle of the Week..I'll call it now. Although I dont' agree with this 40 line bullshit..this is gonna be hell to vote on. An the qaulity of the battle goes down with more lines..but hopefully they will put a decent battle. I see Laz taken this.

JTR vs Ghostface
I dont' really think I have to explain this..we got the Number 2 guy, coming off a champ mach facing a guy who's fairly new an near the bottom of the table. JTR will take this unless Ghostface increases his ability dramatically.

Lil Wayne vs LFS
well as whack as LFS has been showing, I see Wayne taken this..with better wording an better punches..LFS doesn even want to be battling right now it seems like..he'll impress me if he pulls this one out. I see wayne taken it though.

Malicious vs Yung Med
Mal has alot of potential an has been gettin better..Yung is weak..an I predict a no show possibly. But if they show, I garuntee Mal has this by a long shot.



Outro.



Well overrall a nice week with two blazing battles. Lets see if we can match it this week..everyone step the fuck up..I'm tired of seein lazy ass verses, an weak attempts, if shits obvious its 99 percent likely to be played. If you have a concept it doesn make it good..try an put a coo flip on it..use some misdirection..word your shit good. Damn..nearin the playoffs an its becoming apparent who the threats are, an who's not. Vote honestly, don't get butt sore over someone who votes for you. There is no fuckin fan club scandal bullshit..goodluck to everyone an there battles.. pz
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Old 08-12-08, 08:01 AM   #2
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My magazine owns yours. And I drop better when I drop more, history has shown that.

p.s. - how are you gonna drop a comment saying my magazine was biased when yours is fucking biased? but really, dropping an extra mag because you didn't like mine, that is weak man. you don't see this kind of gay move in any other league.
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Old 08-12-08, 10:49 AM   #3
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lol look in LLL, they had two mags in that. Your mag had some fan club bullshit every other line. They liked havin two opinions an two mags, Only thing I didn't like was your fan club bulshit, aside from that your mag was solid. With the lack of votes, its not even possible to have a fan club. lmao..chill I jus felt like doin a mag myself, don't get butt sore over it, I didn't say yours wasn't good.
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Old 08-12-08, 05:28 PM   #4
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My magazine owns yours. And I drop better when I drop more, history has shown that.

p.s. - how are you gonna drop a comment saying my magazine was biased when yours is fucking biased? but really, dropping an extra mag because you didn't like mine, that is weak man. you don't see this kind of gay move in any other league.

I haven't really seen any kind of gay move in any other league where a member has said there was some kind of voting scandal going on and that two of the better battlers in the league only win because of them.

Both mag's are bias. But who really gives a fuck?
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Old 08-12-08, 06:27 PM   #5
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how was my mag bias? I didn't down anybody, I just called it all around..an said that the fan club shit was false..,
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Old 08-12-08, 06:58 PM   #6
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I haven't really seen any kind of gay move in any other league where a member has said there was some kind of voting scandal going on and that two of the better battlers in the league only win because of them.

Both mag's are bias. But who really gives a fuck?



yeah man... for the most part I believe your wins are legit..

I just thought it would be funny to make a punch out of it...
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Old 08-12-08, 06:59 PM   #7
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by the way.. good mag Lay...

its even better having two mags because we can see two different view points on how the league is going
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Old 08-12-08, 07:58 PM   #8
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Old 08-12-08, 08:07 PM   #9
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yeah thats what I thought.. lol nick took it as a insult or something idk why?.. lmao, LP you might want to edit in more lines..you only went 10, its minimum 16 for champ matches..jus so ya know, you can edit ya verse as long as kirk hasn't posted his yet.
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I dont see any place to edit...
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Old 08-12-08, 08:20 PM   #11
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Okay I'll edit them out an PM ya verse to you ..jus add 6 lines an post when your ready.
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Old 08-13-08, 01:22 AM   #13
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yeah..idk waht the fuck lil waynes vote was..but I voted, I'm sure everyone else will vote the same lmao. Med didnt' even match your lines..so you win anyway.
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ha..i figured if Laz lost he would sign out.that sucks. He' was pretty good,..an its odd they call a fan club shit scandal? or somethin...when RBL is known for their dickriders..Oneduh could beat someone easily with his name alone. lmao.
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