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Old 08-18-08, 11:47 AM   #1
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1. Kirk vs 10. Meltdown

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PLAYOFFS ROUND ONE

1. Kirk vs 10. Meltdown


Due times:
Check in due Wednesday 11.59pm EST.
- if you don't check in by this time, and you DO end up posting, -2 votes.
Verses due by Friday 11.59pm EST. Yeah, that's eastern. not pacific.
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Max. extension = 24 hours, to be granted by your opponent.

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10 min and 20 max. for regular battles. 16 min and no max in champ matches. If no line limit agreed, second battler to post must match first battler. But ultimately, first battler gets to set the line number by how much he posts. Playoff matches there is a 30 max. for lines.

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Old 08-18-08, 02:34 PM   #2
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Old 08-19-08, 06:42 PM   #3
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Ok dude thats fine with me.................
So is this a playoff or league still???

As if i got you kirk lol....................................

Shit couldnt get any worse.


Its the League's playoffs.

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Old 08-20-08, 03:08 PM   #4
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Champ you are indeed but let me plant the first seed,
So what am i?? if your jus one of many bitches hanging off me like a necklace beed.
Kirk by name captain lonely by nature,
it's not your fault that peps dont rate ya,if you wonna be in with ya mates get a new avatar.
You let me drop first so again you choose to follow rather then lead like a king,
i feel sorrow for you wanting to be part of me so i'l guide you under my wing.
I'l flip your lame ass ryhme scemes all over the shop your style is loaned,
but i like you so after this demolishion i'l pick u up just after i hold high the cup you once owned.
So as it stands your favourite so im the challenger,
but i occupy the greatness tag and your jus along for the ride as passenger.
Im solid in this game and i'l show ya prevoking this joke,
you mimic washed up folk and now your just stuck in the middle like egg yolk.
So these be lines 13/14 from where your hanging i cant be seen,
u roll with has beens now washed up better known as crack fiend's.
Your not needed in this life you couldnt get a clip on jeremy beadle,
So i give you this advice give up the crack and pick up the needle.
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Old 08-21-08, 04:19 PM   #5
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Think you runnin' this but I'll Sonya. Actin' like a tyrant when the gay battles me,
But in this M-K match up. I'll fuckin' MASH this controller till it ends in a fatality,
Am I prepared? Well, I've repped Maryland since birth and my fires crushin' mic.'s,
So who needs practice, bitch? I've been walkin' all over MD my entire fuckin' life,
Can't rap for shit, you pedo faggot. Talkin' bout how your verses makin' girls wet,
What do you know about sweet 16s? Your bitch hasn't even celebrated hers yet,
You got crowds of 10 to 12 years olds yellin. All I can say is fuck, that's sad,
With them preteens yellin' "OH M...... GEE! How does he fuckin' suck that bad?!"
Talkin' about avys and shit, bro. LAWL. I'd claim that you had that 05 style son,
But seriously, kid.... YOUR avatar is clearly where your style derived from,
And everybodies reppin' DBZ. Well, I'd hop on the bandwagon but it's a waste,
Who needs to rep it? When I've been dragon balls... all over your bitches face,
And lmao at your sig..Bro, that easily tells me that you're a pure chump,
But guess what else means nothing without U? ......The word suck.
You tiny little bitch. Its a waste of time even thinkin' this twig has got fans,
I'ma bail though. Cause I could smash a fuckin' stick playin' Rockband.

Fuck it. Boring.
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Old 08-21-08, 09:44 PM   #6
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Champ you are indeed but let me plant the first seed,
So what am i?? if your jus one of many bitches hanging off me like a necklace beed.
na, this was a weak opener imo
Kirk by name captain lonely by nature,
it's not your fault that peps dont rate ya,if you wonna be in with ya mates get a new avatar.
hmm, not really harsh hitting at all.
You let me drop first so again you choose to follow rather then lead like a king,
i feel sorrow for you wanting to be part of me so i'l guide you under my wing.
again not harsh, but ok punch.
I'l flip your lame ass ryhme scemes all over the shop your style is loaned,
but i like you so after this demolishion i'l pick u up just after i hold high the cup you once owned.
self glory, you need to be direct and mean with your insults.
So as it stands your favourite so im the challenger,
but i occupy the greatness tag and your jus along for the ride as passenger.
lol, k
Im solid in this game and i'l show ya prevoking this joke,
you mimic washed up folk and now your just stuck in the middle like egg yolk.
hm, again not very harsh.
So these be lines 13/14 from where your hanging i cant be seen,
u roll with has beens now washed up better known as crack fiend's.
not creative,
Your not needed in this life you couldnt get a clip on jeremy beadle,
So i give you this advice give up the crack and pick up the needle.
stay off the crack concepts, this wasn't that great of a closer.

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Think you runnin' this but I'll Sonya. Actin' like a tyrant when the gay battles me,
But in this M-K match up. I'll fuckin' MASH this controller till it ends in a fatality,
good concept, you didn't flip it well at all though. weak opener
Am I prepared? Well, I've repped Maryland since birth and my fires crushin' mic.'s,
So who needs practice, bitch? I've been walkin' all over MD my entire fuckin' life,
played, but since you live there its a fresh flip its pretty solid
Can't rap for shit, you pedo faggot. Talkin' bout how your verses makin' girls wet,
What do you know about sweet 16s? Your bitch hasn't even celebrated hers yet,
na, sweet 16 is gettin played..you did somethin like this a few weeks ago.
You got crowds of 10 to 12 years olds yellin. All I can say is fuck, that's sad,
With them preteens yellin' "OH M...... GEE! How does he fuckin' suck that bad?!"
lol, this is a signature kirk punch
Talkin' about avys and shit, bro. LAWL. I'd claim that you had that 05 style son,
But seriously, kid.... YOUR avatar is clearly where your style derived from,
okay, but I'm gonna not count this punch cuz it was feedin off somethin he said in his verse.
And everybodies reppin' DBZ. Well, I'd hop on the bandwagon but it's a waste,
Who needs to rep it? When I've been dragon balls... all over your bitches face,
haha, nice
And lmao at your sig..Bro, that easily tells me that you're a pure chump,
But guess what else means nothing without U? ......The word suck.
liked this,
You tiny little bitch. Its a waste of time even thinkin' this twig has got fans,
I'ma bail though. Cause I could smash a fuckin' stick playin' Rockband.
no.



This was kinda one sided, which is to be expected from kirk.. You need to avoid played concepts bro, the number of line concepts is played to death..dont' use those, other then that besides the line that was technically feeding it was solid, dragon balls line was good, md was aight..word suck was coo, omg was good..mk coulda been good, but you didnt' flip it good,
meltdown, the greatness tag was the only actual punch I was feelin..you need to be more direct an harsher with your punch, avoid self glory..an crack lines are played concepts, i wasn't feelin the pick up the needle line or washed up like crack fiends lines at all..you got potential, you jus need to figure out which concepts are TOO played to be viewed as decent bro,.. hopefully you'll sign up for next season.. I think kirk got this with a more direct verse.

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Old 08-21-08, 09:52 PM   #7
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Well done kirk, no hate but it was'nt a great verse for sum1 of your caliber but it was more then enough to beat me dude.
Thanks for the feed lay much appreciated!!!

Goodluck with everyelse's drop's.

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Old 08-21-08, 10:06 PM   #8
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no problem bro, you should sign up for next season you'd be a good addition to the league. sign ups are in the office already.
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Old 08-21-08, 11:04 PM   #9
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Am I prepared? Well, I've repped Maryland since birth and my fires crushin' mic.'s,
So who needs practice, bitch? I've been walkin' all over MD my entire fuckin' life,
And everybodies reppin' DBZ. Well, I'd hop on the bandwagon but it's a waste,
Who needs to rep it? When I've been dragon balls... all over your bitches face,
And lmao at your sig..Bro, that easily tells me that you're a pure chump,
But guess what else means nothing without U? ......The word suck.

meltdown had nothing i was feeling at all so kirk takes this easily

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Old 08-22-08, 10:33 AM   #10
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Champ you are indeed but let me plant the first seed,
So what am i?? if your jus one of many bitches hanging off me like a necklace beed.
Well, these types of punches generally only work for me if the guy your insulting has been genuinely riding you and hanging on your words. So, yeah.. this wasn't good.
Kirk by name captain lonely by nature,
it's not your fault that peps dont rate ya,if you wonna be in with ya mates get a new avatar.
Nah, there is no real diss here. The second half to your punchline had to be flipped to make it a real punch, you didn't really do that.[./B]
You let me drop first so again you choose to follow rather then lead like a king,
i feel sorrow for you wanting to be part of me so i'l guide you under my wing.
[B]Again, the punch just isn't there.

I'l flip your lame ass ryhme scemes all over the shop your style is loaned,
but i like you so after this demolishion i'l pick u up just after i hold high the cup you once owned.
You are still only making statements.
So as it stands your favourite so im the challenger,
but i occupy the greatness tag and your jus along for the ride as passenger.
This was average at best, the wording was a little iffy.. but it is really the only punch you have thrown so far.
Im solid in this game and i'l show ya prevoking this joke,
you mimic washed up folk and now your just stuck in the middle like egg yolk.
This could barely be called a punch, it was weak in general though.
So these be lines 13/14 from where your hanging i cant be seen,
u roll with has beens now washed up better known as crack fiend's.
Nah, not liking this.
Your not needed in this life you couldnt get a clip on jeremy beadle,
So i give you this advice give up the crack and pick up the needle.
Nah, crack concept again.. weak.


VS.


Think you runnin' this but I'll Sonya. Actin' like a tyrant when the gay battles me,
But in this M-K match up. I'll fuckin' MASH this controller till it ends in a fatality,
The concept was raw, but the flip was a bit shit if I'm being honest.
Am I prepared? Well, I've repped Maryland since birth and my fires crushin' mic.'s,
So who needs practice, bitch? I've been walkin' all over MD my entire fuckin' life,
Decent name flip.
Can't rap for shit, you pedo faggot. Talkin' bout how your verses makin' girls wet,
What do you know about sweet 16s? Your bitch hasn't even celebrated hers yet,
Why does this concept seem oh so familiar??
You got crowds of 10 to 12 years olds yellin. All I can say is fuck, that's sad,
With them preteens yellin' "OH M...... GEE! How does he fuckin' suck that bad?!"
You got these punches on lock.. good shit.
Talkin' about avys and shit, bro. LAWL. I'd claim that you had that 05 style son,
But seriously, kid.... YOUR avatar is clearly where your style derived from,
Isn't this feeding, NAUGHTY!
And everybodies reppin' DBZ. Well, I'd hop on the bandwagon but it's a waste,
Who needs to rep it? When I've been dragon balls... all over your bitches face,
Ok, but I've used the dragon balls concept a long time ago.
And lmao at your sig..Bro, that easily tells me that you're a pure chump,
But guess what else means nothing without U? ......The word suck.
Lmao, this was hilarious.
You tiny little bitch. Its a waste of time even thinkin' this twig has got fans,
I'ma bail though. Cause I could smash a fuckin' stick playin' Rockband.
Nah, this was a weak closer.


Word to Kirk coasting again. He's loving shit right now, doesn't have to drop his hardest and he still wins comfortably. I should really vote against you because you sort of fed off his verse and that is just gay. But, oh well.. you clearly had the superior verse. Harder punches, better concepts and you basically had a higher level of consistency. I see that Meltdown has one major problem that he needs to work on, flipping punches. I think he has a grasp for concepts, but he is simply wording them into statements rather than flipping them into some raw punches. The best advice I can give is to read some verses by dudes like Kirk, Lay, myself and I'm sure there are other heads you could look up, like Mimesis.. he is raw at flipping punches. But yeah, read up and get an idea of how to flip punches nicely.. practice and work the flips into your concepts and you should see immediate improvement.

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Old 08-22-08, 07:40 PM   #11
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Thanks alot for the feed ll cool much appreciated, also thanks for giving advice rather then jus saying it was shit.
I know it aint good shit, i have an insane imagination but im still to learn the whole punch concept thing but that is why i joined in the first place coz of kirk's advice.But im not gonna stop until i get there.

Thanks dude's see you next season.


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Old 08-22-08, 08:01 PM   #12
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Good attitude, bro. Just make sure to follow the criticism. It'll help.
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Old 08-23-08, 06:13 AM   #13
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Champ you are indeed but let me plant the first seed,
So what am i?? if your jus one of many bitches hanging off me like a necklace beed.
descent

Kirk by name captain lonely by nature,
it's not your fault that peps dont rate ya,if you wonna be in with ya mates get a new

avatar.
barely rhymes man

You let me drop first so again you choose to follow rather then lead like a king,
i feel sorrow for you wanting to be part of me so i'l guide you under my wing.
barely descent


I'l flip your lame ass ryhme scemes all over the shop your style is loaned,
but i like you so after this demolishion i'l pick u up just after i hold high the cup

you once owned.
barely descent

So as it stands your favourite so im the challenger,
but i occupy the greatness tag and your jus along for the ride as passenger.
played concept, not a creative flip


Im solid in this game and i'l show ya prevoking this joke,
you mimic washed up folk and now your just stuck in the middle like egg yolk.
Nothing here

So these be lines 13/14 from where your hanging i cant be seen,
u roll with has beens now washed up better known as crack fiend's.
played concept and weak hit

Your not needed in this life you couldnt get a clip on jeremy beadle,
So i give you this advice give up the crack and pick up the needle.
I see the wordplay, but its weak


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Think you runnin' this but I'll Sonya. Actin' like a tyrant when the gay battles me,
But in this M-K match up. I'll fuckin' MASH this controller till it ends in a fatality,
good opener

Am I prepared? Well, I've repped Maryland since birth and my fires crushin' mic.'s,
So who needs practice, bitch? I've been walkin' all over MD my entire fuckin' life,
nice setup into a hard hit

Can't rap for shit, you pedo faggot. Talkin' bout how your verses makin' girls wet,
What do you know about sweet 16s? Your bitch hasn't even celebrated hers yet,
barely descent

You got crowds of 10 to 12 years olds yellin. All I can say is fuck, that's sad,
With them preteens yellin' "OH M...... GEE! How does he fuckin' suck that bad?!"
barely descent

Talkin' about avys and shit, bro. LAWL. I'd claim that you had that 05 style son,
But seriously, kid.... YOUR avatar is clearly where your style derived from,
both line played

And everybodies reppin' DBZ. Well, I'd hop on the bandwagon but it's a waste,
Who needs to rep it? When I've been dragon balls... all over your bitches face,
pretty creative, good wordplay

And lmao at your sig..Bro, that easily tells me that you're a pure chump,
But guess what else means nothing without U? ......The word suck.
chump and suck do not rhyme

You tiny little bitch. Its a waste of time even thinkin' this twig has got fans,
I'ma bail though. Cause I could smash a fuckin' stick playin' Rockband.
descent closer


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Vote - Kirk, he had a more entertaining verse and harder hits because of the creativity that he combined with his wordplay. Nice effective verse. This was an okay battle.
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Old 08-24-08, 09:23 PM   #14
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Kirk wins 4 - 0

Kirk advances to ROUND TWO of playoffs
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