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Old 03-17-09, 11:54 AM   #1
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Nâ€-T (2-0) vs JTR (2-0) (Contender Match)

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Old 03-18-09, 07:12 PM   #2
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Check....ha haha
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Old 03-19-09, 01:16 AM   #3
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hahaha check...
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Old 03-20-09, 05:41 PM   #4
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*This a point of view verse of a kid tryin to get his life back on track*

The Lies They Tell


Well spark up this blunt and gather round
and listen to my story thats about to go down
Now hear me out, theres no doubt it wont be renowned
about this tale of this new craze that I once found
Ima close my eyes and just try to unwind
And reminisce about this while gettin lost in the time...
Smokin
"I've got a bad disease....
Far from my brain is where I bleed,
Insanity, it seems
Has got me by my soul to squeeze.
Well all the love from me
With all the dying trees I scream....
The angels in my dreams
Have turned to demons of greed that's me.
so Where I go I just don't know
I got to got to gotta take it slow.....
and when I find my piece of mind,
I'm gonna give you some of my good times..."

So I'm a deciever and a cheater
and though people dont think so, I'm an underachiever
But either,down the road I let up or just quit
And I started to think "drugs" instead of using my whit
N often I'll think about the next life after this
It's gunna be much easier, a make up for amiss
Because I've shunned my friends away but theyre the ones who made me today.
Ok? and I realize theyre my own decision of mine
but you have to think they contributed to making my mind
and in time, I think about all of this and its makes me quite sad
cause I traded away all the good friends I once had
But this furious mind that keeps on tellin me lies?
haha fuck the loyality, I just wanna get high...
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Old 03-21-09, 11:01 AM   #5
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....? ok so do i take the win then?
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Old 03-21-09, 07:35 PM   #6
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If you want...

The lies they tell
Ayo,
How the fuck could one plane bring down a tower?
I want to bring down the white house, and bring down the cowards
Who lied about Roswell like it can’t still be serious
Well then who the fuck do you think built the pyramids?
You’re hopeless and laugh like it’s a load of some trash
But you’re the same person who thinks Moses split an ocean in half
Well if that’s possible then I don’t know what the fuck isn’t
Colours seem different when they’re seen through a prism
The ghetto needs more schools it doesn’t need more prisons
Give the people some education and there won’t be more victims
I don’t believe in the bible, demons and wizards
Where is god when my people are freezing in blizzards?
It’s so cold with no home they’re fiending for liquor
And you think that you’re better, you see them and snicker
Just cuz you got some cash it doesn’t make you bigger
The only thing your cash does is just make you richer
And all money does is just make you bitter
That’s why you don’t see your kids as much as your babysitter
That’s why celebrities are all depressed and they make me sicker
Cuz starving kids got a smile and their faces glitter
We think they need fresh water and can’t feed themselves
But they appreciate what they got and don’t dream of wealth
That’s why I think you’re all fake and can’t be yourselves
You feel bad for them when you’re the ones who need their help
So I don’t give to charity cuz it don’t mean they poor
When they’re rich with happiness, but we need more
Money is the root of all evil, and I’ve seen the gore
As long as men live, you gonna see some war
Cuz we steal each others land, and we steal shores
And without your TV set you’d get real bored
While I keep my eyes shut cuz my eyes deceive me
And fuck FOX, I don’t believe the lies on TV
God forbid the News ever say what’s new
It’s always the same story, that’s what they’re paid to do
Terrorists and stock markets, rapes and feuds
Why don’t they talk about Iraq and how we take their fuel?
Or how all the hippies did was preach peace and love
But got judged wrong cuz they would take weed and drugs
And so police stopped their protests and beat them up?
Now that’s irony for you, man. I’ve seen enough
Look at the dollar bill, America was built by Masons
It was built by Bush, it was built by Satan
It was funded with blood and death for payments
The Illuminati paved it, stayed quiet and paid him
He took the orders; they pulled the strings and played him
In a land where corporations are more powerful then the Nation
I am like Muhammad; the divine prophet
The all the All Seeing Eye is inside of my socket
I don't care about material, I hate my wealth
I know the lies that they tell, and so I hate myself
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Old 03-22-09, 05:45 AM   #7
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NT- The drug tangent was a pretty good direction for the topic. The thing came off as an inner monologue with some brag type stuff at the start, not a great verse for a topical. The vocab was kind of simple and the imagery a little too braggadocious instead of focusing on some kind of storyline for the piece.

JTR- This came off as a 'standing on the soapbox' type of rant that was a little more inkeeping with a topical piece. The take on the topic was a fairly obvious one but you illustriated it well enough. The rhyme scheme could've been stronger, the vocab was solid enough.


I dunno if votes will count for this seeing as JTR dropped late.

vote- JTR, if this still counts.
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Old 03-22-09, 09:45 PM   #8
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Dude, i woulda let you drop yesterday if you just like pm'd me or somthin
sorry man but if you let me know somehow I would taken the extra day too and then dropped somthin instead of just rushin to get this on

I'ma have to take the DQ....
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Old 03-22-09, 10:33 PM   #9
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yup you rushed a verse at 5:40 on a friday cuz you somehow knew that within the next 6 hours I wouldn't post, lol ok, I was at my friends 20th bday, when I was able to come online I posted right away so there was no need to PM you.

It's all good though man if you want the DQ win you just have to say so, fair is fair eh im not complaining, just don't try and sugar coat it lol
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Old 03-22-09, 11:39 PM   #10
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nice battle ya both but i liked the way both approuch this topic noting much i can say bad but there still have to be a winner...

jtr for keeping me more into he's and was feeling the flow and all good job both thou
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Old 03-23-09, 07:28 PM   #11
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I went to hockey east then my friends open house...I knew that I wouldnt have time after so I figured I had to drop somthin before it was passed due

So you dropped at 7:30 P.M. on saturday, wow that mustve been a crazy party man lol.....so I appreciate you droppin immediatley when you had the chance, but come on man if you knew you were goin to that crazy party you musta known before hand that you werent gunna get it in on time, if you pmd me like thursday or somthin, I woulda dropped on Saturday too. I figured you werent commin since you checked in late and then dropped late that consistency fills me with doubt lol

I aint tryina sugar coat it but I had shit to do too and I still got it in on time.....whatever its good though its not about the league im just tryin to write better, and If I have more time I can write better so....yeah.
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Old 03-24-09, 12:20 AM   #12
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actually yea it was a crazy party bro, I went back to my friends place cuz my place was too far to get too, we had been up until 7:30am from clubs, to strip joints to after hours, I was asleep til 5pm and only got home at 6:30, showered, chilled a bit and then remembered this and keyed some shit up.

Oh yea, the thing is I didn't know I was going to the party. My friend actually randomly showed up to my door knocking and was like "you really thought you'd be staying home doing nothing on my 20th? Put on your coat bitch", i didn't even know it was his birthday lol

take the win though it's fine with me, partying with my boy on his bday is more important to me then this league anyways hahahaha
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Old 03-24-09, 03:25 PM   #13
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jtr real nice verse. u win. this kids a jokeeeeeeeeeee
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Old 03-25-09, 05:13 PM   #14
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thanks for the props bro
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Old 03-28-09, 05:57 AM   #15
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for taking a DQ Win

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