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BROOKLYN 3 37.50%
Dezyir 5 62.50%
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Old 07-25-03, 02:00 AM   #1
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Brooklyn vs. Desyir

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mods only...not crew mods... REAL mods...

hahah dick riders..
 
Old 07-25-03, 02:11 AM   #2
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This is dedicated to Hottie...lol..id told you id do it....



59 wins by Battlin nothing but newbs. . . Brooklyn mustnt have any poise . . .
only mods vote?! shits about to get flipped on ya..like priests gettin molested by little boys..
no choice..you were forced into this battle..now youre in Jeopardy like Trebek..
no newbie army...so now youre defenseless as fuck . . .like monks in Tibet . .
get much respect from noobs but you dare not come lookin to vets. . .
if you can SSSSTTRRREEETCCCCHHH a dollar like a bar youll never be in debt...
G-Unit reject..modern day Andy Dick the way you only battle the weak..
how do you consider yourself a vet when you still have a scrolling marquee?..
dont flee...have some honor and at least take this loss like a man...
bottom line..like sugarless Kool-Aid your rhymes arnt spectacular..but merely bland


you know you love it

......and that.....is word.



corrected *only *....it was owns....

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Old 07-25-03, 04:41 AM   #3
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THAT JEOPARDY LINE CAME FROM A NAS DISS FROM OSKENO IN ROC A FELLA OR MAYBE IT WAS A COINCIDENCE BUT WHATEVA..LETS GO..

Your 3rd Loss Was Personal, 'Stabbed Your Statements' So I Guess Your 'Irrelevance Was Hurtin-You'/
Your Curfew From Our Last Battle Was A 'No Show' Cus You Were Scared When The 'Curtains-Flew'/
This-Dames-Tight? Only 'Scores' When Opponents Fail To Spit-Game-Right/
His-Brains-Light, Dezyir Can't Be On My Level, Too Dumb To Spell His-Name-Right/
Hits-Bang-Nice, With 'Great-Steaks' He Brings 'Prime Beef' That Will 'Stay-Ate'/
I Spray-Dates, Don't Ever Got The Time For 'Faggits' So Im'a Set This 'Gay-Straight'/
Punches Serve You 'Quick' Like 'Fast Food', Kid The Mood-Is-Groovy/
This Dudes-A-Groupie Claim Veteran But In A Group-With-Newbies/
Droundin-Fool, Need A Boost Of Elevation First For You To Ever Escape-My-Spits/
Gets-Raped-By-Hits, Even If 'Dope Tutored' You, You Still Couldn't 'Elevate-High-Quick'/

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you know you love it

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Old 07-25-03, 03:31 PM   #4
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ight... decent battle..

the breakdown...

D's verse

59 wins by Battlin nothing but newbs. . . Brooklyn mustnt have any poise . . .
only mods vote?! shits about to get flipped on ya..like priests gettin molested by little boys..

this was an iiiiight opener... the creativity factor was mediocre... but it was decent in my book... but too much filler in here.. killed the whole bar.


no choice..you were forced into this battle..now youre in Jeopardy like Trebek..
no newbie army...so now youre defenseless as fuck . . .like monks in Tibet

well personally i never heard this line... this was pretty nice.

get much respect from noobs but you dare not come lookin to vets. . .
if you can SSSSTTRRREEETCCCCHHH a dollar like a bar youll never be in debt

Nice personal

G-Unit reject..modern day Andy Dick the way you only battle the weak..
how do you consider yourself a vet when you still have a scrolling marquee?..

Nice personal

dont flee...have some honor and at least take this loss like a man...
bottom line..like sugarless Kool-Aid your rhymes arnt spectacular..but merely bland

ehh this wasn't great at all... didn't like this finisher.. could of been way better
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Your 3rd Loss Was Personal, 'Stabbed Your Statements' So I Guess Your 'Irrelevance Was Hurtin-You'/
Your Curfew From Our Last Battle Was A 'No Show' Cus You Were Scared When The 'Curtains-Flew'/

nice personal and opener... and the multis were there.. good shit

This-Dames-Tight? Only 'Scores' When Opponents Fail To Spit-Game-Right/
His-Brains-Light, Dezyir Can't Be On My Level, Too Dumb To Spell His-Name-Right

the creativity factor was nice here...plus nice personal... and the multi's just made it cleaner and nicer.

Hits-Bang-Nice, With 'Great-Steaks' He Brings 'Prime Beef' That Will 'Stay-Ate'/
I Spray-Dates, Don't Ever Got The Time For 'Faggits' So Im'a Set This 'Gay-Straight'/

this was ight... but gay lines are done.

Punches Serve You 'Quick' Like 'Fast Food', Kid The Mood-Is-Groovy/
This Dudes-A-Groupie Claim Veteran But In A Group-With-Newbies/

see both of ya'll using you're a newbie lines.. thats cool..i see this one of those forced multis.

Droundin-Fool, Need A Boost Of Elevation First For You To Ever Escape-My-Spits/
Gets-Raped-By-Hits, Even If 'Dope Tutored' You, You Still Couldn't 'Elevate-High-Quick'/

the multis were there.. finisher line was up to par... good overall verse
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i felt brook to this.. cause of structure.. and more creativity..


vote= Brooklyn.
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Old 07-25-03, 03:37 PM   #5
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Ok kids, im gonna delete all your freeposting in here so just the verses are left. .


Anyways, Dezyir, ok verse, flow was alright, a couple punches may of been worded better such as the "priests" line, but not a bad verse, punches were ok i guess, nothing really stand out. Brooklyn, damn - you had a lot of played lines in your verse, you had a lot of wordplay but most of it was weak in my opinion, only half-decent line was the "cant spell his name right" one, the rest were blah-zay in my opinion. All you multi's were forced, some werent even multi's, you just put hyphens in to make it look like it.

Vote: Dezyir
Better wording of his punches, nice personal to start with, less played lines, thats what i felt took it for him.

One sided battle.
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Old 07-25-03, 07:50 PM   #6
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WOW, SHOULD BE 1-1..I GUESS ALL MODS CANT POLL
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Old 07-25-03, 10:07 PM   #7
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Alright. . lets see. . I don't have time to break it down bar for bar so let's cut to the chase.

D- Ok. Preist line is played. . Monk line was nice. Rest was ok but closer boardered blah.

Brook- Didn't impress me at all. I read through and really found it all to be blah. Don't use dashes and ' ' anymore. That went out in '98. But other then that you had played content or shit that just wasn't cool. I dunno. Maybe it's just me.

Vote- D

Wasn't really that close. .
 
Old 07-26-03, 11:36 AM   #8
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Quote:
Originally posted by Dezyir
This is dedicated to Hottie...lol..id told you id do it....



59 wins by Battlin nothing but newbs. . . Brooklyn mustnt have any poise . . .
only mods vote?! shits about to get flipped on ya..like priests gettin molested by little boys..

played...but good..^ 2/5

no choice..you were forced into this battle..now youre in Jeopardy like Trebek..
no newbie army...so now youre defenseless as fuck . . .like monks in Tibet . .

ive never heard it and i like it..^ 3/5

get much respect from noobs but you dare not come lookin to vets. . .
if you can SSSSTTRRREEETCCCCHHH a dollar like a bar youll never be in debt...

no.^ 2/5

G-Unit reject..modern day Andy Dick the way you only battle the weak..
how do you consider yourself a vet when you still have a scrolling marquee?..

tightest bar from either of u. ^ 4/5

dont flee...have some honor and at least take this loss like a man...
bottom line..like sugarless Kool-Aid your rhymes arnt spectacular..but merely bland

2/5

this line was bad...punch was bad and it didnt rhyme...suggested change...
like a man dont rhyme with merely bland...should be "the type thats bland"


you know you love it

......and that.....is word.

total...13/20...i am raising it to 26/40 (same fraction and percentage) cuz brookyln has more barz...


corrected *only *....it was owns....




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Originally posted by BROOKLYN
THAT JEOPARDY LINE CAME FROM A NAS DISS FROM OSKENO IN ROC A FELLA OR MAYBE IT WAS A COINCIDENCE BUT WHATEVA..LETS GO..

Your 3rd Loss Was Personal, 'Stabbed Your Statements' So I Guess Your 'Irrelevance Was Hurtin-You'/

the phrase "irrelevance was hurtin you" sounded gay..loss of points...lol... 1/8

Your Curfew From Our Last Battle Was A 'No Show' Cus You Were Scared When The 'Curtains-Flew'/ didnt like it...ya rhymin is off...2/8

This-Dames-Tight? Only 'Scores' When Opponents Fail To Spit-Game-Right/ tight... 5/8

His-Brains-Light, Dezyir Can't Be On My Level, Too Dumb To Spell His-Name-Right/ ok....wasnt ne thing special....2/8

Hits-Bang-Nice, With 'Great-Steaks' He Brings 'Prime Beef' That Will 'Stay-Ate'/ 5/8...liked this one

I Spray-Dates, Don't Ever Got The Time For 'Faggits' So Im'a Set This 'Gay-Straight'/ lol....6/8

Punches Serve You 'Quick' Like 'Fast Food', Kid The Mood-Is-Groovy/ dont ever say the word groovy in my presence again. lol...3/8

This Dudes-A-Groupie Claim Veteran But In A Group-With-Newbies/ tight. 4/8

Droundin-Fool, Need A Boost Of Elevation First For You To Ever Escape-My-Spits/
filler...2/8

Gets-Raped-By-Hits, Even If 'Dope Tutored' You, You Still Couldn't 'Elevate-High-Quick'/
screwed up the rhyme...in my opnion bad closer. 3/8


screw this system but it seems to have worked at least in some respects...i thought brookyln won and thats what it came out as, altho i must did some math wrong cuz the scores were so far apart....

winner brookyln
 
Old 07-26-03, 12:44 PM   #9
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Quote:
Originally posted by G. Buttersworth
ight... decent battle..

the breakdown...

D's verse

59 wins by Battlin nothing but newbs. . . Brooklyn mustnt have any poise . . .
only mods vote?! shits about to get flipped on ya..like priests gettin molested by little boys..

this was an iiiiight opener... the creativity factor was mediocre... but it was decent in my book... but too much filler in here.. killed the whole bar.


no choice..you were forced into this battle..now youre in Jeopardy like Trebek..
no newbie army...so now youre defenseless as fuck . . .like monks in Tibet

well personally i never heard this line... this was pretty nice.

get much respect from noobs but you dare not come lookin to vets. . .
if you can SSSSTTRRREEETCCCCHHH a dollar like a bar youll never be in debt

Nice personal

G-Unit reject..modern day Andy Dick the way you only battle the weak..
how do you consider yourself a vet when you still have a scrolling marquee?..

Nice personal

dont flee...have some honor and at least take this loss like a man...
bottom line..like sugarless Kool-Aid your rhymes arnt spectacular..but merely bland

ehh this wasn't great at all... didn't like this finisher.. could of been way better
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Brook's verse

Your 3rd Loss Was Personal, 'Stabbed Your Statements' So I Guess Your 'Irrelevance Was Hurtin-You'/
Your Curfew From Our Last Battle Was A 'No Show' Cus You Were Scared When The 'Curtains-Flew'/

nice personal and opener... and the multis were there.. good shit

This-Dames-Tight? Only 'Scores' When Opponents Fail To Spit-Game-Right/
His-Brains-Light, Dezyir Can't Be On My Level, Too Dumb To Spell His-Name-Right

the creativity factor was nice here...plus nice personal... and the multi's just made it cleaner and nicer.

Hits-Bang-Nice, With 'Great-Steaks' He Brings 'Prime Beef' That Will 'Stay-Ate'/
I Spray-Dates, Don't Ever Got The Time For 'Faggits' So Im'a Set This 'Gay-Straight'/

this was ight... but gay lines are done.

Punches Serve You 'Quick' Like 'Fast Food', Kid The Mood-Is-Groovy/
This Dudes-A-Groupie Claim Veteran But In A Group-With-Newbies/

see both of ya'll using you're a newbie lines.. thats cool..i see this one of those forced multis.

Droundin-Fool, Need A Boost Of Elevation First For You To Ever Escape-My-Spits/
Gets-Raped-By-Hits, Even If 'Dope Tutored' You, You Still Couldn't 'Elevate-High-Quick'/

the multis were there.. finisher line was up to par... good overall verse
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i felt brook to this.. cause of structure.. and more creativity..


vote= Brooklyn.



^^word,says and explains it all

vote-brooklyn
 
Old 07-26-03, 05:31 PM   #10
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^vote doesnt count...its mods only dunny... and im not sure if Feeble Minded is a mod either.....

ill get someone to check into it.
 
Old 07-26-03, 05:38 PM   #11
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Feeble Minded is but Haze isnt...but Buttersworth didnt poll for you anyway so its right....


2-2 tied...
 
Old 07-26-03, 07:45 PM   #12
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Yo dawg but a mean G Buttersworth says it all in his break down, pointless to break down again...... Brooklyn got this one... nice verse though Desyir... props.
Vote: Brooklyn
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Old 07-26-03, 07:46 PM   #13
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3-2 Brook..

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Old 07-26-03, 10:27 PM   #14
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AIGHT BREAK DOWN!!!

Quote:
Originally posted by Camarac
Ok kids, im gonna delete all your freeposting in here so just the verses are left. .


Anyways, Dezyir, ok verse, flow was alright, a couple punches may of been worded better such as the "priests" line, but not a bad verse, punches were ok i guess, nothing really stand out. Brooklyn, damn - you had a lot of played lines in your verse, you had a lot of wordplay but most of it was weak in my opinion, only half-decent line was the "cant spell his name right" one, the rest were blah-zay in my opinion. All you multi's were forced, some werent even multi's, you just put hyphens in to make it look like it.

Vote: Dezyir
Better wording of his punches, nice personal to start with, less played lines, thats what i felt took it for him.

One sided battle.



Its already said..wut i wanted to say but he forgat to add he had more creative lines but Brook came out nice but some played lines in yo verse dawg


I VOTED FOR Dez

but wont show on the poll cuz i got the aol thang wont work on the poll

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Old 07-26-03, 11:03 PM   #15
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ARE YOU EVEN A MOD EVEN IF YOU COULD POLL VOTE =\ ??
DAMN I HATE VOTE SWAYERS
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