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Old 09-26-03, 02:34 AM   #1
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Drifting..

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all alone in this world.. never asked to be one of a kind
unattainable goals unfurled.. failier is never hard to find
is the puppeteer out of his mind?.. no, he just doesnt care
proof? pain & agony occupy the whole world.. but "God is Everywhere"
this years harvest is bare.. countless hours of work wasted,
how am i supposed to 'Enjoy the fruits of my labor,'.. when labors all ive tasted?
theres no peak, ive faced it..this mountain continues forever
it will always rain on my parade.. no matter what the weather
'never say never'..words aimed at encouragement only contradict
a tithe? i thought i was supposed to get what i put in.. not put in what i get
this cant be it.. nothing but pain has been seen by these blue eyes
throw out the script.. im already tired of aimlessly drifting through life
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Old 09-26-03, 03:42 AM   #2
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*feeds this thread some Yellow Jackets*


no sleeping hoes.
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Old 09-26-03, 04:53 AM   #3
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"is the puppeteer out of his mind?.. no, he just doesnt care
proof? pain & agony occupy the whole world.. but "God is Everywhere"" haha dopeness
"this years harvest is bare.. countless hours of work wasted," nice setup for that line
bah didnt like ur "doing this thing"
flow was good, decent content, u could do
much better i can tell [i am evil/pscyhic] and
umm multies were good, style was orignal
glad to see that being applied, a lot of ppl
just go for the same format fuckin door mats
was a bit short, the opener shoul've been
stronger cause of the length, same with the
ender na acutally the edner was dope cause
u spoke of the word drifting lol, mean while
any who this was kinda doper then i thought
keep up the work which is good from you


return the favor with some funky flavor or choose a slow and painless death
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81857

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Old 09-26-03, 02:30 PM   #4
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up/
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Old 09-26-03, 02:47 PM   #5
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like your other one
but good
the way u describe things is thee way i look at things as well...
kinda helps mnme enjoy your work
solid little verse
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Old 09-26-03, 02:47 PM   #6
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This was another good peice by you, it was another good read i thought, flow was good, and your content was good as well, you multies were good, overall id say it was a good peice, keep dropping.
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Old 09-26-03, 02:54 PM   #7
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Dez Dez Dez...

You gave me my first KISS...

Kept It Short Sweet

That's all..Props Bro
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Old 09-26-03, 05:51 PM   #8
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reply hoes.
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Old 09-26-03, 06:30 PM   #9
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1 piece a day.
read the rules, cupcake.

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