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Old 09-30-03, 11:24 PM   #1
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[Wk1] IC: T-Square vs LaRyan Shabaz

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Week One :

Verses Due: Friday, October 3rd
Voting Ends: Tuesday, October 7th


Topic: Melodramatics
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Old 10-01-03, 12:49 AM   #2
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I am here.
 
Old 10-01-03, 01:37 AM   #3
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Here to sneer, the money clip on tie that goes ca ching............
Yeah that means I'm in....
 
Old 10-03-03, 05:19 PM   #4
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You blame the Ayatollah, I name Anatolia/
The source of metal money and commercial trade/
Where horses trampled the bloody on way to international raids and tirade/
The founding of people wasting away, pedaling the played on Ebay/
Like Genesis, sailing above the Great Flood/
Only to find you’re aboard a slave ship and the rain is just drugs/
See, this is where we come from, so I’m sick of hearing the dumb stuff/
It’s a variation on theologian’s real, but look deeper and it’s the same hopeless idea/
Get ‘em a Head Start, but cap ‘em before they get smart/
Is Ritalin the best weapon there is against Original Sin?/
Double-Standards of skin come in the game/
When pasteys begin their own gunplay/
Where were they when anything with melanin was killing their brethren?/
Hate reporters with tape recorders and communications degrees/
Get bent out of shape with mouths agape when the underage go on a munitions spree/
These sheep see Middle-East aggression as a mystery/
In reality this flock need refreshen their history/
In sum: these cocks believe Jews deserve more than some of Jerusalem/
Pretzels and bagels get wrecked and then fraggled like Rock/
Music even abuses it, patriotic songs or evil Navy recruitment?/
Eric B & Rakim even know the faux-emotional elation is Paid in Full/
You can swear on Bible you don’t behold, but I know your sincerity is past debatable/
Calling this idiocy melodramatics is a shocking label/
The only remedy is to go off air, I’d prefer static from my crock-box atop the table/

Fin
 
Old 10-03-03, 08:10 PM   #5
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Melodramatics

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A future is still unimagineable, with an earthplace deemed unhabitable/
Even though the point is dull the police club of america will crack your skull/
The pause of progression is much longer than a pause lately/
Wasting a world and food of civilizations when we dump sawmill gravy/
Commenting on the poor state of our united ones till the wealthy hate me/
Six percent of the population contolls our money with supreme domination/
I'm sick of watin for my pay commensation I've awoke with new sensations/
Seeing clearer now, its more than tragic, Why should our taxes house crack addicts/
We couldnt stop planes with the best military tactics, fear followed automatic/
From sixty missed calles in five minutes by a woman whos dogmatic/
We as a people need sanity, we dont have it, it all seems too melodramatic/
Dipping more resourses out of an already stone dry well/
The religous propaganda that deems this is already hell/
Even my perspective on a topic that I cannot even spell/
The Melodramatics with bitches that made me miss the bell/
From rings for tounge ear nose holes in the head that are too extensive/
Live and let live while purchasing sports gear thats too expensive/
The greed that feeds this country gets my perscrip of a seditive/
And all the wake up calles get ignored were too inatentive/
Fourty percent of our country is Fat, Fourty thou white kids rap like there Phat/
Million dollar baseball stars need more attention with corks in their bats/
Melodramatics I can see clearly our nation cannot resist temptation/
Scare tactics test our paitents while we multiply with aids patients/
A cure is already patented yet there too concerned with controll and money/
When our home is in this state why do the poor wait to kill somebody/
Nothing too lose and only power and money to gain, showing no shame/
Let the Bushes feel the pain let them sleep in a box while its pouring rain/

Finished with my shit......

And as a personal note. ^^^^ Mr Shabaz.... Keyed, 100%

Let the voting begin
 
Old 10-04-03, 11:58 AM   #6
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dam
this was a good battle
better than i expected..

Laryan...thats the best verse ive seen from you...seemed to be on a different level
really enjoyed your take on the topic and the descriptiveness and comparisons all came together wll for a dope verse

T- square
i liked your verse as well...but it seemed to be lacking in depth.
and i didnt like the rhyme scheme very much..a bit too simple as well...but i did like the content and your opinion on this however i feel Shabaz stole the show

props to both
 
Old 10-06-03, 05:06 PM   #7
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We're on the bottom! C'mon....
Appreciate the comments fgee.
 
Old 10-06-03, 07:52 PM   #8
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im goin with t square, he had better vocab than laryan shabaz, they were both tight but laryan had a little weaker vocab everything else was close.

vote = t square
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Old 10-07-03, 02:05 AM   #9
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^Like dogmatic...
Yeah, he was definitely tiz-yte off the dome, yo...

Thanks for the hate though.

I am generally "obscene" I believe.
 
Old 10-07-03, 12:35 PM   #10
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I prefer for that last vote from too hot not to count, cause LRS decided to cry,
1-0 LRS.... UPPIN
 
Old 10-07-03, 10:33 PM   #11
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^ I'll discount it if you like, because it was a whack vote. It's up to you though.

LaRyan- First off, I gotta say, you have no flow. It's sad, really. You gotta try to add a flow to your words man, or it makes it more difficult for the reader. Your wordplay is off the hook, and you have a really good message in this. The melodramatics were incorporated in your exaggeration of everything and when you referred to the various world issues. Very nicely done.

T Square- Nice verse. You had the message of Shabaz, with a better flow, but you lost the abstract feel of his. Even if it wasn't abstract. = / I have to quote you here
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Even my perspective on a topic that I cannot even spell/

Comic gold.
I really like the entire thing, it had me hooked start to finish. Well done.

vote-T Square
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Old 10-08-03, 12:09 AM   #12
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up over the closed threads.
we have a tie here people.
vote!
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Old 10-09-03, 01:20 AM   #13
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Anybody? A single vote would be fine... por favor?
 
Old 10-09-03, 03:05 PM   #14
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Vote T-Square

Even though you vote against me... I felt T had better flow.. better imagary & just an all round better verse
 
Old 10-09-03, 07:51 PM   #15
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T Square wins.

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