im sittin round feeling bored waiting to score,and then knock knock whos that at my door,
is it my dealer no its a deciever,its a strange man and hes wheilding a meat cleaver,
so i grabbed my samuri and went out for this guy,but when i got out i just wondered why,
why me what have i done to thee,to deserve these 6 geezers here surrounding me,
oh its you i remember who u r,your that punk from last week i sliced u and gave u a scar,
he then mumbled blahblahblah,basically he thought he was some kind of superstar,
so i sliced him in his leg his mate hit me in the head,i bled red anger in me now all these dudes are dead,
the first guy to let off gothis nose cit off,he fell to the floor he was the second to get dropped,
number 3 made me stab him in the knee,i turned and saw number 4 jumping towards me,
so i grabed him up judo rolled him now hes stuck,i then punched mr 5 right in his bloody gut,
it turns out number 6 was a bitch so i tried to work it out but she just came with a flying fist,
i said okay baby its not gravy,your crazy i floored her eventhough she was a lady.

lol

yo how r you calling me the newbie, when your not even a has-been
my flow goes stright to your head - you need some aparin
your not so explicit man, why you talking about meat cleavers
rather than being rated "r" your more like leave it to beaver
you dont have experience killin people - your too used to gettin trampled
when you think about people being killed, your name comes up as the example
so stop talking bout how your so hard - you aint no gangsta
if we battle, id be another check for my win column - thank ya

whos the newbie now, your supposed to give advice when you reply, not drop a verse...so stop that

peace

yeah u still need to elevate because ur vocab hasnt elevated at all so keep workin on it and then post, work on some shit today or somethin

damn son thats hella weak, u need to elevate in every aspect of rap, ur structure was poor, ur vocab and wordplay needs to drastically elevate, u gotta make a more original topic than that, so dude u need work bad, but whatever, keep tryin.

peace......