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10-28-03, 10:43 AM | #1 | |||||||
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Hot Shit Niggas! >^^peep^^<
IP: D147 53B2
as plain as the sky when the stars don't shine
blackness is infinite but color is limitless tonight spin with the time, morality is morally mortal so it does die, short from kombat portals quarrels in carpools have us swimming in blood until we sink to depths undefined to try out love I tried out love, . . . and i got cut but since when is coupling a team sport? it's some way confusing, interluding my kindest passions when can i find this maddness to contrast sadness lavished and brandished so bandages don't cover wounds that are underneath the skin, we can't win we won't win. we are all going to lose. so theres really no use trying. so for now i'll just loath my inner obsession with dying. goodbye . .. . . |
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10-28-03, 11:45 AM | #2 | ||||||
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pretty deep but r u writing hip-hop or poetry lets keep it a little bit more gully-on the lyricall dose your rating is a 6
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10-28-03, 01:25 PM | #3 | |||||||
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i agree it was quite poetic, but thought it was pretty decent, wasn't really feeling the flow cos the structure seemed a bit eratic, but the content was good, but i would lose the faces...lol...peace...........keep droppin....
can you hit this plz...... http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=88249 |
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10-28-03, 02:28 PM | #4 | |||||||
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you should lose your own face.
and blaze 1 you suck. and since when is poetry art stuff not gully? freakin' homos. =I |
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10-28-03, 02:38 PM | #5 | ||||
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lol ^ "freakin homos"....this was a pretty good piece i thought...flow was alright i thought, it wasnt bad....your structured was alright as well, could be a bit better but still good though...Your vocab was good as well...the content was good, stayed on topic i thought...overall it was a alright piece..keep at it...and keep dropping.
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10-28-03, 02:45 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: D147 53B2
i can beat father flow topically.
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10-28-03, 02:46 PM | #7 | |||||||
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i thought that it was hot to, feeling is important to me when writing. Good shit. keep it up. Rear some of my stuff, and let me know what you think!! Thanks
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10-28-03, 08:19 PM | #8 | |||||||
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no i'm fine thank you.
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10-28-03, 09:27 PM | #9 | |||||||
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its was aight
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10-28-03, 09:42 PM | #10 | |||||||
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YO THIS IS HOT NIGGA, ITS DEEP, FUCK WHAT THEY SAY ABOUT IT NOT BEIN GULLY THIS IS TIGHT, KEEP DOIN UR THING.
PEACE
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10-28-03, 09:48 PM | #11 | |||||||
one wink
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Closed. Lick My Balls. Respect Your Replies.
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