10 lines....we check in now....verses due in 30 minutes after check in..no feeding..no dick riding, no hate votes.....good luck bro...let's do this

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lemme see what u got...ur worth a nickel maybe a dime/
i was expecting a battle, but ur just a waste of time/
Im white i admit it, but cmon dawg ur ryhmes are vile/
im climbing the ladder to success escalator style/
do u think i give a fuck wat u say, didnt u think to wonder/
ur moms so fat, when she got on the scales, it showed her telephone number/
i cut you up and hang your head in my lawn and then mow it/
your dick is so small you need fertilizer 2 grow it/
u'll relate to horror films, scream, the exorcist/
but ur final destination, is gonna be my fist/

let's see ~ let me ~ address you, like a package
there's a disease, you might not know you've contracted
fact is, you can track this with no track list
check the way you get worse even when you practice
it's plain to see, like m&m's without the peanuts
even when you try to rhyme - people screaming "you suck"
gazeebo, your rhymes are weak, like samson using nairs
but you still a kid, like a peach ~ no facial hair
my wrath is laser sharp, I see the dot
apologize for calling me out before your breathing stops

yo nice spit...good luck in the votes...............yo somebody please post there honest votes with some suggestions for me if i need any ...thanks

nice battle

opener poetic
flow poetic
injoyment poetic
creativity tie
closer poetic

overall merking by poetic

peace

yo sorry for this freepost


G read up on some other battle by vets to get some cray ideas

try to be more creative


go to Tutorials on this site it has helpful tips

peace

can we get some more votes on this battle?? ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

METAPHORES - ...
VOCABULARY - ...
PUNCHLINES - GaZeeBo
STRUCTURE - poetictendenceez
CREATIVITY - tie
PERSONALS - ...
OPENING - poetictendenceez
CLOSING - poetictendenceez
MULTIES - ...
FLOW - tie

OVERALL - poetictendenceez

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Lol, i didnt find dis battle as a merking but i think poetic came out victorious. He did have a stronger verse. Gazeebo, no offence man but ur punchlines are played out, the fertilizer thing, and the momma telephone number. Just work on ur punchlines, and i think u'll b better. Just my opinion.

Vote- poetictendenceez

thanks for the votes ya'll.....uppin (1).....let's finish this off please...thank you....and by the way...fuck 100 characters

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