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Reporter: Can u tell me wat changed u?

CarNagE: Basically I was put on this world for one reason, to cause Kaos, bring hell to earth, U feel me? Its all a matter of time, check it listen to my story


I take this one last step, to take life from Death forsaken i have nothin left, except my regrets

Lifes expectancies gone, waisted along w/time took the best of me, in my name:a penny & a dime To the light im blind

signs i feel and read in brail lived no knights tale, i have come to fail I shall not speak details,

my ships sailed far too many & i wish not for sympathy, no gain comes from pitty So the dark tempts me,

thinking of my next move the depths consume, the lack of color is in bloom Reside to open tombs, deprived by open wounds

im hopin soon things will come to change the dayz my brains estranged,

to blame i say are the ways ive followed hollow ground beneath the grass theres no escapin the past so i say my last words to be inscribed on an invisible path...................

*Though Murder is easy to harnest "ArSenal"? that status is Tarnished, served the "DEVIL" for years to come and given the name of "CarNage"............................*

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nice overall work poetic and artistic lyrically well delivered and in vocab i cant see much on here that could be critiqued negative except i wasnt on it so it aint perfect....lol stay up

firstly ya sint left ya 3 replies......flow started off ok..but then ya start stretching ya lines...knocking the read....also dont think much of writtin in bars like that......seperates it a bit...seems like there should be a pause inbetween each....but i see wht a you were aiming at....jus keep at it..pZ

DAMN THATS ALL THE REPLIES????? WTF C'MON YO PEEP THIS

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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left replies to or this will get deleted..

but this was alright i thought...your structure could have been a bit better though i thought cause your lines were stretched out a bit...flow was ok, but your structure took away from it...just work on your things...and keep at it.

AIGHT^^ ARE U THE MOD OR SOMEHTIN

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Fools On My Dick I aSSur You I got Chrome that'll leave your body count high-in-debt...
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