. . aka Bloody-2-Shoes vs Camarac the RB God

He's been banned before i could beat him, figured id post it and at least get some feeback:


Match me..


i wont front..
.. ive been saving dope lines for these new heads,
but im against you..
.. so this another battle.. I dont have to use them!
ur losing, why'd you even try against me rhyming?
kid, i'll punch a Hole in ya chest ..
.. big enough for damn saddam hussein to hide in!
i cant even take you serious, you get killed in bars
& left more black & blue than you got on ya avatar
& the 'no one believes in god' lines are so old that..
.. add some grey hairs & glasses, & they could be ya dad!
this is all your getting, ten lines and ya lunch meat
cause your adams Apple's..
.. big enough to feed a fucking 3rd world country!

the flow was knocked in places,,,,and ya punches could have been harder hitting.....i would try and add some decent wordplay and metas...other than that seemed ok.....i bit choppy but not bad......pZ......

Lol

Thanks for your honesty, low level boarder >=)

LoL

first saddam punch iv seen

best line

rest is average

^ it was keyed yesterday, but he's banned. = (

^^^they weren't amazing lines, ive seen u write better, but they made me laugh

d00d.. That shit was dope as hell

The Saddam line had me trippin..

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sadam line was great

lmao

i was gonna use that cuz i thought i would be the first...but i saw ure battle right when you posted yesterday...so i didnt

fucker!!!!!!!!!!

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of replies or this will get closed, Thanks.

But Yeah i agree this was pretty good...i liked it, The Saddam line was good, my favorite line in it...it flowed pretty good, but like Deva said it got off in a few places...but overall this was good.

it was pretty funny which was kool....made me laugh
you need to work on your punches....if he was wack then this was an aight verse but it wouldn't beat many vets.....
the saddam line was mad nice......flow was off at times but most of it was flowin gud

stay up playa............................................. .........peace