Sphere~vs~SplitSouL(topical)
 

house rules
no bullshit, plain and simple

15-20 lines about the topic Fear

due tomorrow

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if you don't mind sphere i would like to add one more rule...

Only members with 500+ posts may vote on this battle, as most of the newbs can't comprehend the deepness of the subject...

My Verse...

darkness entombed, felt within the womb of emotion itself
wraps it like a cocoon, its devotion to destroy ones health
attacks from within, often embodied by fallible superstition
conjures up corporeal images into a lost and barren existence
the evolution of maniacle anthropoids and sport sub-humans
these illusions have our minds ruined, lost within the confusion
fear drives the very essance of our non-substantial being
we're to survive its presence though uncircumstantial fleeing
its intrinsic nature is never resolved, it constantly manifests
extringent saviors have evolved to perpetually circumvest
we often find ourselves obsessed with the diseases progression
asking questions with answers only found in our confessions
the solution is not to fear, fear itself, but to fear what is within
the conclusion is always near, it is clear to fear what we defend

damn lol...

u gonna drop????????????????????????????????????????????

I couldnt Log in...

heres 10 lines since we agreed on the new rule plus i wanna go to bed

Futures dilute and comprehend the retribution to the end
Shades stalking enlightened bends questioning the blend
Nights turn eternal....while infernal moulds define control
And life’s goal is emboweled by silhouettes which enfold
Derivation undefinded....the void isolates confined minds
Leaving desperation entwined with the happiness it blinds
Frozen senses dominate lurking to animate the privation
While hesitations attributes form to prevent all levitation
Isolation takes power to depict evil unseen in final hours
The explicitness of fear……...….is enlisted to our towers

All right, both verses are in, my compliments on your verse Sphere, well done. Should be very close. Well here's the first up......

uppin 1

jeezus

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SplitSoul
Very complex, where it should not be..
You used alot of unnecessary vocabulairy..over did it.
Also when readin' your piece it was really hard to figure out what is was written about..the topic fear hardly reflected of your many big words.
& even though it does not really matter that much..your flow was slightly off at points.
Not a bad piece..far from that.
But i feel you lacked in describing or focussing on the topic.

Sphere
Short but strong..
Nice little piece here.. the vocabulairy was there but not over the top.
Good array of words..followed eachother nicely. made for a good feel.
I feel you kept to the topic better..a better topical.
..SplitSouls was more like a open mic..without a clear topic.
This is also the main reason i'll give you this win.
Good piece & battle by both.

Sphere

blah, thats your point of view i guess............................................. ...

uppin 2

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up 3

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now thats really herbish that you break down your own verse.. stop swaying the votes and you better edit that before i get a mod in here to delete it, because if the person doesnt get it then they shouldn't vote in teh first place.. so do something to that.. and dont sway again..

It's not that i dont get it.
Its how I interpret it..
& ur sig is a herb sig.
^ Up.

I second that,, that is the biggest sway i have seen in my life,,, remove it before i get a mod in here,