JPoll vs. Truth_
 

yo these are the rules

no dr
no hate votes
no crew
respect to all

8 lines max and min

good luck

aight yo
here this shit is

i'm takin it easy on this newb ya dig

yo yo
THE TRUTH? No it's lies, I've got documented proof,
The AI of rapping? NO, you're just phony ass spoof,

I'm straight off the bush, you're just a wrotten fruit,
N I'm slamming your spit, like I was Babe Ruth,

You don't know English, cause you're straight off the boat,
You rap like Britney Spears sings, always off note,

Your polygraph test came in and you failed,
Truth, when you read my verse I won't be surprised if you bailed,

it's done baby
ova

I would say fuk this wack kidd but he might take it as a serious STATEMENT/!1
His shakin’ ankles achin’ cos I be breakin', leavin’ him foot loose like Kevin BACON/!2

My toxic toxin’s got yu droppin’ in my gothic topics which have yu tossed in while hoppin’ in a coffin/!3
often I'll punch ya optic so far into the socket, no need for friends, cos yur own back yu’ll be watchin’/!4

Get battered an’ bruised left without a clue, this pussy gets left shattered an’ loose/!5
yu could be a rhymin’ Oprah , but my game's still phatter than yu/!6

I Didn't Even Try When I Wrote This Sh%t, So I Don't Care If Yu're Not Feelin’ Me/!7
its appealin’ j poll but Its Like I Got DIARHEA The Way I'm takin’ this sh%t easily/!8

aight homie there it is no beef good battle

aight theres mine the lines where a bit longer tho...

Vote on this Fellas...peace.................................... ............

dam cant believe this 25 views and no votes would some one vote

yo tight battle............................................ .....................good job man.....good luck....your shit was kinda all over the place though

come on man every line is like a fucking paragraph........................it doesn't flow at all....this is a battle....not a book....

Truth's kevin bacon line is tight but the rap is all sketchy, im not catching much originality from reading this shit. Jpoll lines are a bit "out of the box". his shit is too mother fuckin clean for me dog. in this case, clean is good, the format stays super tight and the rhymes have punch, chalk one fo jpoll

My toxic toxin’s got yu droppin’ in my gothic topics which have yu tossed in while hoppin’ in a coffin/!3
often I'll punch ya optic so far into the socket, no need for friends, cos yur own back yu’ll be watchin’/!4


that was a sick lime truth....truth you had lots of multies...decent punches...kinda sloppy structure but its whatever right?


Your polygraph test came in and you failed,
Truth, when you read my verse I won't be surprised if you bailed


that was a good personal...very very good...thats about the only line i was feelin tho..your punches were kinda off key...your structure was good tho..ny vote goes to truth..sorry poll

thanks for the honest vote.............................................. ............upin

JPoll:

THE TRUTH? No it's lies, I've got documented proof,
The AI of rapping? NO, you're just phony ass spoof,

LOL...decent opener, personalized....

I'm straight off the bush, you're just a wrotten fruit,
N I'm slamming your spit, like I was Babe Ruth,

I smiled at the punchline, which doesn't happen much...nice...

You don't know English, cause you're straight off the boat,
You rap like Britney Spears sings, always off note,

hahaha...nice punch again...

Your polygraph test came in and you failed,
Truth, when you read my verse I won't be surprised if you bailed,

Good closer, back to the personal-name attack.

Overall: Short, sweet...flows well...not super personal, not super strong punchlines, but aboveaverage. nice.
Truth:


I would say fuk this wack kidd but he might take it as a serious STATEMENT/!1
His shakin’ ankles achin’ cos I be breakin', leavin’ him foot loose like Kevin BACON/!2

Good punch, but it doesn't really rhyme with the first line...I guess you could spit it, flip the pronunciation a little and MAKE it work...

My toxic toxin’s got yu droppin’ in my gothic topics which have yu tossed in while hoppin’ in a coffin/!3

Good multis but...didn't say a whole lot...flowed well though...

often I'll punch ya optic so far into the socket, no need for friends, cos yur own back yu’ll be watchin’/!4

LOL! That's good shit...I like the punch...little awkward with the wording, but came nice nonetheless...

Get battered an’ bruised left without a clue, this pussy gets left shattered an’ loose/!5
yu could be a rhymin’ Oprah , but my game's still phatter than yu/!6

Again...good punch...the setup is a'ight, didn't shake the Earth for me...

I Didn't Even Try When I Wrote This Sh%t, So I Don't Care If Yu're Not Feelin’ Me/!7
its appealin’ j poll but Its Like I Got DIARHEA The Way I'm takin’ this sh%t easily/!8

Played closer..diarehea & talking/dropping/spitting shit is waaaay played.

Overall: A little weird in places flow-wise but, other than those spots, flows nice and makes good use of multis. Got some clever punches, some defiente potential..

This one was a tough call for me...prolly the toughest I've voted on yet...but, I go with punches first and foremost and Truth got ya there this time J...nod to J

FUCK...voted the wrong person by accident...shit shit shit...anybody know how to fix that?

Sorry fellas!!!!

:(

new to this.not battled b4.anyone wana go??????????????????

umm, heard b4, ya just worded it a lil different:
My toxic toxin’s got yu droppin’ in my gothic topics which have yu tossed in while hoppin’ in a coffin/!3
often I'll punch ya optic so far into the socket, no need for friends, cos yur own back yu’ll be watchin’/!4
nice one:
THE TRUTH? No it's lies, I've got documented proof,
The AI of rapping? NO, you're just phony ass spoof,
ya both need ummlike better structure but It'll go wit JPoll here

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