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LadyLyrical .vs. Will A Peer
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Unlimited Barz(No Stories) 3-0 Ko First 5 votes Wins No crew/clit ridin/Hate votes no FEEDING((can not stress this enough)) No Biting/Recycling Linit The Freeposting ppl Deadline 1 day after you Check In((Not Drwin this out to 3 days acceptions if you just couldnt get on)) Votes Must Be Explained such as Multies- Metas- Punches- Consistancy- Flow- Wordplay- Feel- Complexity- Quote Will a Peer- Quote LadyLyrical No BullShyt Votes Will Be Excepted!! |
AiIgHt Im BoReD MiGhT As WeLl DrOp....
Text Engraving Will aint Fazing my unorthadox spits...im~quick~to deliver death threats like terrorists// She Like Niggaz The way she scared to Cum before this female ....contemplating~my~invasion thats why she took two weeks and answered my bitch~slapped through email//((Pm)) but my words reversing her scripts~twisting her lips....to have her kissing her own Lisp// This Chick like a Living~*Will* the way she let me plan her death.... Like niccaz on the Special~Victims Unit im tearing through her chest to proclaim her death// Will~a~peers reputation is non~existing likedis~A~PEERing text...to hand me an L she'd prolly recycle verses from the battles she won but even thats not her best// disLOCATING her brain so she could think in my STATE.... detaching ya fait~and Gripping ya face so you frown cuz im not tryna make you smile like Lloyd Banks// Will~A~peer get be~headed and De~crowned cuz she wack claiming the Queen... sink~ya body in agony to see if you could sail throw the pain i bring// this Female like bodyguards the way she only follow behind...Will must spit in the dark cuz this bitch concepts aint as bright as mine// im Lyrically Rape~in this chick so Consentual sex is what u lack... stripping~this Chicks words and beating her like the Color Purple or she was black// cuz she actin sweet wit posts of bullsht and verses of Fillers wit line she mezmorizing....getin my unches twisted easily so let me clear it up i aint no lesbian// Aiight Waiting for her to spit |
yo checkin in sorry i just saw this................
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u can't deter gettin slurred with these innovative words
absurd leavin ur mind stirred only bein interred will occur shes just another herb that dont get heard cause shes 2 basic face it my complexity's just being wasted on this fuckin aphasic my words leave u in a pit confused with no c/r by ur side shell try & b denied when her wacknes and my skill collide major obsession bleached her skin 2 match my complection hope u like rejection after this there wont be a resurrection teachin u a lesson next time make sure ur circumspectant thought u were a female till ur ridin sb gave u an erection im here 2 show lady lyrical's rhymin skills are just satirical better b fearful cause im god an i aint gonna give u a mirical |
Good Battle Shawties, we gotta stop the female on female violence its getting out of control nowadays
LadyLyrical.....that was a decent drop ma', you had some decent punchlines an alot of metas, personals were weak an inconsistent tho', your flow was a little off due to the fact you strectched your lines, wasn't very complex at all, wordplay was decent, a few multies some were forced. Flow: 5/10 Metas: 6/10 Multies: 6/10 Punches: 5/10 Consistancy: 5/10 Wordplay: 7/10 Feel: 4/10 Complexity: 4/10 Overall: 42/80 Will a peer....good verse ma', your had great vocab use throughout, I see you read a lot, you had good punchlines, you didn't really have any personals, an you had a few solid multies, flow was tight throughout, an you were pretty consistent wit your punches, wordplay was good, very complex verse, good drop Flow: 7/10 Metas: 6/10 Multies: 5/10 Punches: 7/10 Consistency: 6/10 Wordplay: 6/10 Feel: 5/10 Complexity: 8/10 Overall: 50/80 Vote: Willappear |
allrite thanx lmao how did she have more multis lol
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good verse gurl um no c/r votes that means sb and whats her face
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Bullshit good battle. You know what a battle should have? A punch. Punches are good.
"Text Engraving Will aint Fazing my unorthadox spits...im~quick~to deliver death threats like terrorists// first off, this structure is annoying, it makes it look like you only have half the lines you do have. also, no punch here. who cares how fast you deliver death threats? She Like Niggaz The way she scared to Cum before this female ....contemplating~my~invasion thats why she took two weeks and answered my bitch~slapped through email//((Pm)) ok, a personal. boring though, because you didn't make it into a hard hitting punch. but my words reversing her scripts~twisting her lips....to have her kissing her own Lisp// eh... kind of a cool concept, but again i haven't heard her lisp, and the punch isn't really much This Chick like a Living~*Will* the way she let me plan her death.... Like niccaz on the Special~Victims Unit im tearing through her chest to proclaim her death// death should not be rhymed with death. the first line is decent, the second line fucked the whole thing up and brok the flow. Will~a~peers reputation is non~existing likedis~A~PEERing text...to hand me an L she'd prolly recycle verses from the battles she won but even thats not her best// how does she not have a reputation? this would work better if it were true... but a lot of people think she is a top femcee on this site. the second line here makes no damn sense.... how are the battles she won not her best? not a punch disLOCATING her brain so she could think in my STATE.... detaching ya fait~and Gripping ya face so you frown cuz im not tryna make you smile like Lloyd Banks// ok... decent concept, but again make a harder punch out of it... right now it just doesn't deliver very well, and you just string it in there with no set up or anything. and the second line is ass. Will~A~peer get be~headed and De~crowned cuz she wack claiming the Queen... sink~ya body in agony to see if you could sail throw the pain i bring// blah... and please lose the damn "~" ... they're annoying. could have made a good punch out of the queen thing, but totally blew it. this Female like bodyguards the way she only follow behind...Will must spit in the dark cuz this bitch concepts aint as bright as mine// again.. makes little sense. bodygaurds sometimes lead, they generally surround actually. not a great meta. and the bright thing is a totally played concept and the punch is boring. make it original somehow, or at least harder hitting. im Lyrically Rape~in this chick so Consentual sex is what u lack... stripping~this Chicks words and beating her like the Color Purple or she was black// wow she lacks consentual sex so its rape? how... boring. see it's way too simple, you need to make the metas way nicer than that to have a nice punch. the second line is just blah. cuz she actin sweet wit posts of bullsht and verses of Fillers wit line she mezmorizing....getin my unches twisted easily so let me clear it up i aint no lesbian//" this is a verse of filler. and lesbian and mezmorizing dont rhyme too well. u can't deter gettin slurred with these innovative words absurd leavin ur mind stirred only bein interred will occur multies galore. punches not galore. too many multies, really, dont sacrafice a good punch for multies. shes just another herb that dont get heard cause shes 2 basic face it my complexity's just being wasted on this fuckin aphasic eh... ok i guess. true that she is basic, but this isn't much of a punch, like calling someone ugly who is ugly... is true but not really a great punch. make something of it. my words leave u in a pit confused with no c/r by ur side shell try & b denied when her wacknes and my skill collide blah major obsession bleached her skin 2 match my complection hope u like rejection after this there wont be a resurrection blah teachin u a lesson next time make sure ur circumspectant thought u were a female till ur ridin sb gave u an erection ok... not really too well worded... not really funny. you can do the transexual thing so much better... check me or native's battle against lk. im here 2 show lady lyrical's rhymin skills are just satirical better b fearful cause im god an i aint gonna give u a mirical no real punch here again. so overall, this was just really disapointing. will a peer... it's like you took R's style, and then took the few punches out. seriously, your verse had like one bar with a punch it, and that won't win shit. on the other hand, the first verse was extremely annoying, and didn't have any great punches, although there were somethings resembling a punch occasionaly. i suggest you both check out the league and elevated... work on metaphors, wordplay, punches, setups and so forth. v/ first person for at least coming with some punches. hit up my battle against lil-flip with an honest vote (link in my sig) |
nice job ladies. well done.
willa, im posting here to up this and show my support ma. good verse sweetheart. c.s. is proud. handle your business sweets. one. s.v..........big bad c.s. |
ok than 4 the vote and i had mad punches dontt vote if u cant understand the vocab i used
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LadyLyrical better verse oviously. mad long but o.k. both need to elavate.LadyLyrical i like you pucches and flow better that will a peer's. will a peer step up your lyrics and wordplay alot. try not to stretch out your lines for punches(both of you). keep it simple but hit hard. LadyLyrical your verse was long as hell, but better punches and flow. will a peer keep writtin. don't leave the site o.k. all love keep it movin, return the fava.
vote=LadyLyrical |
iight appreciate your votes....ideas will be taken into consideration uppin for more votes people
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I understand perfectly well. Your punches suck. |
Ok let me break this down
Multies-tie Punches-Will WordPlay-Lyr Structure-Will Flow-Will Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Overall vote goes ot Will i just think she took this battle it was a very good battle 2 Female go at it(Can;t be better then that :) ) Nice Battles Ladies
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