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ShAdoW vrs flow intelligent *topical*
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no crew no hate no d/r topic...... life after death spit due 30 after checkin good luck flow intelligent! |
checkity check check
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dis lookz like a good battle fellaz na mean...good luck to both of ya 1
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riding down the street i cant think straight im pretty high........
as i cross the street i hear a loud horn,as the bus flies by.......... i feel sick and like i fainted and im dizzy with blurry sight......... all of a sudden, it goes white..then i see a heavenly light........ I am.... dead! i wish that i never went to that seven eleven....... becuase now i have to go through tha tunnel-to-heaven...... i think about how i tradically died- it gets me very pissed.... kodac moments with my girl, and all the things i missed....... as i enter the tunnel.. i walk thirty feet and hear voices...... the tunnel forks off in to many paths, too many choices.... for being dead im functioning and thinking very well...... i just cant go down da wrong path it could lead to hell..... i choose the left path, and the cave starts to get tighter... but then u hear singing and the light gets brighter...... i notice that with evryfoot that tunnel is getting bigga..... then i think to my self" mark ur one lucky-ass nigga...... yes! im overjoyed and start to breath deeply and laugh... then i wonder did tupac and big have2 cross this path...... i reached the end! and it feels like im on some crazy pills.... becuz theres green grass all over the gently rollin hills....... i think once again to my self " mark u kno how 3 choose it..... then i hear harps violens.. and extremely roud rep-music.... thats it i reached those beutiful golden-pearly gates..... now nobody exept for god can detirmen my fate......... its a party! i saw tupac and said what up..he didnt reply.... try to enter the gates oh no all of a sudden acces denied!... |
C'Mon' .... !!! & Spit Catts'
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i think once again to my self " mark u kno how 2 choose it..... then i hear harps violens.. and extremely roud rap-music.... it should be that sorry |
ya...i'll vote in this once FLOW drops...then Imma drop a link so yallniggas can RTF
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wtf flow when you gonna post up ya verse dmn u alrady got ur people here to vote but no verse lol hurry it up
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meanwhile...this shit huuuuuuuuur needs votes
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=127547 |
checkin in my bad i been doin shyt offline ill get mine up in 30
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my lifes a blunder feelin time slip away downward i plunder
death feels like 20 tons bricks stacked on top of each-other i try to speak but when i move my lips nothing comes out im wondering if this is what life after death is about i have the choice to look back on my life and see all should i look or not...it could make my heart free fall all the mistakes i made and the days i never lived to the fullest i have to look back on all this bullshit... but i feel its foolish i have to...i must...i gotta see my daughter growing up or i could turn away and decide if im goin down or goin up i decide to walk away and let the pain melt from my skin once again...this isnt life after death cuz i got another life to begin no more feelings no more heartache pain hate or rage i guess living after death is just like turning the page my heart is telling me heaven but my actions are showing me hell i try to ask myself which direction but my brain isnt willing to tell all the sins i have commited are forcing me to go down but all the love in my heart makes a beat with no sound i choose to go to heaven with my mother even tho i hurt her i started walking closer and closer but the distance got further im stuck in the same place all alone and i have no way up all of a sudden i hear my daughters voice and i start to wake up ~!1!~ |
riding down the street i cant think straight im pretty high........
as i cross the street i hear a loud horn,as the bus flies by.......... i feel sick and like i fainted and im dizzy with blurry sight......... all of a sudden, it goes white..then i see a heavenly light........ I am.... dead! i wish that i never went to that seven eleven....... becuase now i have to go through tha tunnel-to-heaven...... i think about how i tradically died- it gets me very pissed.... kodac moments with my girl, and all the things i missed....... as i enter the tunnel.. i walk thirty feet and hear voices...... the tunnel forks off in to many paths, too many choices.... for being dead im functioning and thinking very well...... i just cant go down da wrong path it could lead to hell..... i choose the left path, and the cave starts to get tighter... but then u hear singing and the light gets brighter...... i notice that with evryfoot that tunnel is getting bigga..... then i think to my self" mark ur one lucky-ass nigga...... yes! im overjoyed and start to breath deeply and laugh... then i wonder did tupac and big have2 cross this path...... i reached the end! and it feels like im on some crazy pills.... becuz theres green grass all over the gently rollin hills....... i think once again to my self " mark u kno how 3 choose it..... then i hear harps violens.. and extremely roud rep-music.... thats it i reached those beutiful golden-pearly gates..... now nobody exept for god can detirmen my fate......... its a party! i saw tupac and said what up..he didnt reply.... try to enter the gates oh no all of a sudden acces denied!... good imagery...first time voting on a topical...so dont kno how it works. but good imagery...good flow...some had weak flow, but overall good....down to the point, and the story is in good chronological order. my lifes a blunder feelin time slip away downward i plunder death feels like 20 tons bricks stacked on top of each-other i try to speak but when i move my lips nothing comes out im wondering if this is what life after death is about i have the choice to look back on my life and see all should i look or not...it could make my heart free fall all the mistakes i made and the days i never lived to the fullest i have to look back on all this bullshit... but i feel its foolish i have to...i must...i gotta see my daughter growing up or i could turn away and decide if im goin down or goin up i decide to walk away and let the pain melt from my skin once again...this isnt life after death cuz i got another life to begin no more feelings no more heartache pain hate or rage i guess living after death is just like turning the page my heart is telling me heaven but my actions are showing me hell i try to ask myself which direction but my brain isnt willing to tell all the sins i have commited are forcing me to go down but all the love in my heart makes a beat with no sound i choose to go to heaven with my mother even tho i hurt her i started walking closer and closer but the distance got further im stuck in the same place all alone and i have no way up all of a sudden i hear my daughters voice and i start to wake up flow did a good job of putting emotions into words, and that fear of heaven of hell, but i think i gotta go wit shadow because he told a better story if thats gotta do wit anythign...but cut me sum slack this is my first topical vote....peace..... |
lol was that even a vote he just copied and pasted and then said 50 words after it... ill let it stay tho no hate UPPIN FOR VOTES ~!1!~
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Shawdow U Showed Emotions And Feelings I Like Dat Man U Good Flow Nice Man U Went Str8 Hardcore To Da Topic Life U Talked About Yo Life In Da Past U Thought Flow Was Going Da One I Voted Shawdow Man U Are Deep Da Big And 2-pac Shit Dats Deep Shit// Emotions And Feelings Damn Dawg U Went Hardcore To Da Topic Den Death U Talked About If U Was Down Or Up Dat Was Hot Shit U Talked About Yo Life Den U Talked About Yo Path (heaven Or Hell) U Painted Yo Descriptions Dat What Will Heaven Be Like And What Wil U See Man Dats Deep Vote=shawdow Flow Man U Good Keep Elevating On Dem Topicals Den U Off Da Chain But Show More Emotions And Feelings And Pain An Picture Step By Step Vote=shawdow |
man I have to go with shadow becuase he flowed better and I think he flowed better in the topic sso my vote goes to shadow.
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