::.Red Dot vs. Limited Edition.::
 

alright you know the rules we already decided... house rules.. 10-15 lines due in an hour of checkin

ok this is my check in

A'ight...checkity check in-check mo fucka...haha jp...

alright L.E your the leader of a wack crew ill intentionz
while im dropping hot shit getting honorable mentionz
you think you hot while your just candian bacon
you call yourself a topical head but you just fakin
keying up typing your verse but your hands is shakin
you so nervous u know red dot is droppin a hot freestyle
while you molestin ten year old boys you pedophile
little bitch your touching boys in their private parts
saying "i will give you candy" like sweet tarts.... (molesters offer candy to kids)
alright you didnt know reddot would rip ya.. right?
fuck yourself you got a dick and a pussy... *hermaphrodite (have two sex organs)
alright so im gonna end this battle saying you a sick fuck
soo next time you wanna battle let me wish you good luck

man my verse was wack.. but hopefully it will get the job done... g'luck limited

A'yo...check it...

All's you can see...is tha 'red dot' aimed at ya heart
Murder 1st degree...a breath of ma skill blows yours apart
Steppin' up to tha best...You gon' be 9-3...haven' u heard?
You can't beat 'better'...and the better wasonly an herb
Why did I decide before...to let you back in tha dopest crew?
Why do you try? Against tha 'Master'...wat can 'Hopeless' do?
You claim that your a 'newbie rapper'...isn't that amusin'...
You so wack...I'd rather battle a cockroach that's producin'
Learn to take shit seriously...your destined to be in a circus...
Take tips from these battles...

...but then you still could not be able to merk shit...

good verse limited... hahah my battle versus blimp thats funny.. i didnt even try hahahaha but its cool... this should be a good battle.

Yeah, good luck...I was spittin half assed this battle too...

ok red dot won this but here the breakdown:
Opener: i guess reddot06's was better but it was bad for both. um both just jumped in.
flow: not gonna say who was better cause it was equal big up to both on this
Style: same as the flow very nice to both
Complexity: red you had bigger words and longer sentences
punches:red i didn't get some of um but they were better than Limited's
personnal: red that double sex line very nice limited had um oh yeah nothing really
closer:red you wished him good luck so i guess that counts.

Best line: basically everything red said

tips for both:
red nothing much just do what you do
Limited quit the hype link shit and .... in the middle of the ryhme. update your words

Checckity Checck Checck

Reddot:
alright L.E your the leader of a wack crew ill intentionz
while im dropping hot shit getting honorable mentionz
^Nice Diss On His Crew & An Alright Opener... 9/10

you think you hot while your just candian bacon
you call yourself a topical head but you just fakin
keying up typing your verse but your hands is shakin
^Aight Personal.... Lackin On The Punch Though!!!.. Kiid 5/10 !!

you so nervous u know red dot is droppin a hot freestyle
while you molestin ten year old boys you pedophile
^Played Out Lines' ... Kiidd... 2/10 Aint Feelin It!!!

little bitch your touching boys in their private parts
saying "i will give you candy" like sweet tarts.... (molesters offer candy to kids)
^O...k... That Was Weakkkk...!! Most Deff.. 0/10

alright you didnt know reddot would rip ya.. right?
fuck yourself you got a dick and a pussy... *hermaphrodite (have two sex organs)
^Nice Punch' .. Playa...!! 6/10

alright so im gonna end this battle saying you a sick fuck
soo next time you wanna battle let me wish you good luck
^Weak Closer' ..!! Tragic..!!! 3/10

Reddot!!! 25/60

Checckity Checck Checck

Limited Edition:

All's you can see...is tha 'red dot' aimed at ya heart
Murder 1st degree...a breath of ma skill blows yours apart
^Alright Opener..!! Boi I Know You Can Do Betta' .. Why Did You Go So E'z!! 7/10

Steppin' up to tha best...You gon' be 9-3...haven' u heard?
You can't beat 'better'...and the better wasonly an herb
^Weak Punch....!! Baby' lol Sorry To Tell It To Ya... 4/10

Why did I decide before...to let you back in tha dopest crew?
Why do you try? Against tha 'Master'...wat can 'Hopeless' do?
^Aight Punch..... 7/10..!!!

You claim that your a 'newbie rapper'...isn't that amusin'...
You so wack...I'd rather battle a cockroach that's producin'
^Heated !! I Like That Bar' Probably Your Best Line In Your Verse' ... 9/10

Learn to take shit seriously...your destined to be in a circus...
Take tips from these battles...

...but then you still could not be able to merk shit...
^Nice Closer' ..!!!!! I Was Feelin It..!!!!! 9/10

Limited Edition 36/50

Vote: Limited Edition!! ...!! For The Fact That Reddot Fell Off In His Verse At The End... Or Else He Would Have Got Thiz' ..!!!!

Red that was sad Fake Personals 1 line missen full bars...Up ur vocab and stay on flow,,,no self Glorification..5/10
LE...Wasnt really fellin that but u had some punch trys and personals were ok..Vocab could be better.Ur flow seemed to stay on besides that..6.23/10

Vote-LE

how do i need to up my vocab using words like pedophile and hermaphrodite i think those are pretty big words....

A'ight uppin this shit.........3 slept on battles fuckin sucks......

red dot:

comment- overall GARBAGE...
punches:5/10
personals:3/10
creativity:4/10
vocab:5/10

score:17/40

suggestions:2moro's gaol, "must rhyme"....
next- flow is key, use it next time
structure- didnt even score that, cause there was none...
personals- give us some dirt on your opponent, you expect to beat him with a freestyle?

Limited Edition:

comment- not bad, semi weak for being in elevated front lines...
punches:7/10
personals:6/10
creativity:4/10
vocab:5/10

score:22/40

suggestions: kinda weak, but it damn sure stepped on "8th Disciple representitive"...

you could work more on punches, if they would have hit harder, you would have KO'ed somebody,

my vote: Limited Edition

return the favor... http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=130233 ...

~Fem~ From BP, holla at em

Red- not a good drop...self glory....ahhh NO! next time throw punches and
use some good personals..overall aight flow...

6.0/10

LE- not the best...but you took this...threw some nice punches and some personals
overall it flowed good...just come harder

vote-LE