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It's Real
Hook where u going, don't leave girl step back through the door chill for a minute, fold ya clothes up and put em back in the droor we ain't done yet, how u gonna leave me we been at it like that before i'm sorry i was a fool, i won't be playing like that no more now why u wanna leave girl we been over this and back i ran around, while praying the relationship won't crack first time for everything but didn't mean to hurt u but i hardly ever see u, ya with ya friends plus i work to 4 to 5 months now that's to much to throw away at this time once i saw u i was hooked like a bass on the end of a fish line yeah, it was perfect at first but then it got rough hit some problems and thought damn maybe love is not enough admit, u know i put up with alot of ya shit got a kid on the way now cause i couldn't find a condom that fits u always comment on my lips, gloss from ya lips all over my dick i paid my dues girl, knowing that u still subjected me to pain i'm stupid i stick around, cause without u my life wouldn't be the same but now the tables have turned and your the one that's hurt look at everything in my perspective and it would look backwards now baby take a seat and let me explain alot of my reasons i gotta list of em, that's not my m.o. so i hate decieving Hook where u going, don't leave girl step back through the door chill for a minute, fold ya clothes up and put em back in the droor we ain't done yet, how u gonna leave me we been at it like that before i'm sorry i was a fool, i won't be playing like that no more endless weeks together that we spent in the summer planning to make a good living and put our fam in a hummer we always chill at home or we can hit the movies if u wanna i got checks that come in near figures of phone digit numbers is that why u with me cause i'm recieving dough, are u after my money cause just the other day when we was leaving victoria secret u was acting funny u gonna blow ya top when u hear i got another girl and i'm clapping honey i still love u so if a nigga disrespect u then i'm slapping dumby i regret ever running around, my worst mistake has been written it's rare that i apologize, there's a better chance of seeing bin laden in prison i want u to forgive me for everything i have ever done that was wrong see i ain't the mushy type, but i guess this could be a love song |
nice man i thought it needs work but its good flowed well... :p :D |
yo return da favor wit my open mic dihonesty... :p :D |
thanks, i wanna collab with ya from underground union, holla back, uppin for more feedback
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quick witted why you quit our crw man we real dope... :p :D |
looking for feedback on this, this is my first open mic, r duble tt i left because i was offered a spot in mindz kollide and i took it, still got love for the old crew though
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It was aight...
pretty decent wordplay, the hook couldda been better, but its by far not the worst peice i ever seen keep elevatin an keep em comin |
thanks for the honest feedback, shottaboy u wanna do a collabo
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That was really good bro. Had some dope meta's in it too. Flow kept up well and you stayed on topic through the whole thing..
Id give this a 8.8/10.. Ive said it before man, you got some real potential, keep up with ya rhymin. :thumbup: |
thanks poet that means alot coming from u cause ya a respected vet, drop honest feedback peep
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hey man i liked that drop...had a good sense of feeling to it...and stayed on course the whole time...and i think that topic is a good choice...you know not so negative...good shit.....1
oh yeah...we should do a collabo...its just hard for me to commit time so hit me up and we'll discuss it....1 |
wow, this was a dope drop, nice vocab and setup, you told the story well and it flowed great,,good job on this one...pc
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looking for honest feedback, holla at ya boy
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this shit was really good...deeply feelin this because I've been in plenty, matter fact too many situations like this...damn them hoes be trippin...lol...but for reel...shit was real, stayed on topic, flow was there 95% of the time, and I'm feelin the hook too...overall, i give this shit an 8/10...stay up homie and keep doin ya thang dawg...holla at me if u wanna collab or sumthin...
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krazii as hell i wuz feelin it soon as i started readin it keep tha shit like that comin :thumbup:
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