.simple wordplay.
 

i'm spittin' the word play, make your good day your worst day when these verbs spray//
on the curb you'll lay seperated, your lungs from your chest cavitay//
this is a tragic day, i'll never play spittin' 'til i leave your mind stray//
dispersing these verses leaving magical curses, the one and only murderous rap king//
kill without alerting, infect every single person, leaving families' hearts hurtin'//
when spitting the best i'm certain your brain will be rehearsing to say a diversion, to release you from getting your beating worsened//
i hope you're learning not to face this person, or your brain will go through a conversion//
you're completely illiterate spitting like a little kid, your style get rid of it and i'm comin' like the bigga kid//
go thru a flow erosion spitting till my brains explodin'// overloading, hold your composure before your body starts corrodin'//
these gats i'm holding and blunts i'm tokin' will ignite an explosion to kill everyone that's not chosen//

don't sleep...
 

up this shit...

yo dawg, i ain't mean to sleep
 

i was gonna reply earlier... but i didn't see this, sorry dawg

simple wordplay? if you say so, this was tight, liked the rhymes, they was tight, even though i've thought of the same exact shit but just never wrote 'em down, madd respect for the flow of this, and mos def madd respect for you, peace 'n' keep spitting


signed,
~madd

Hott shit dawg!! still keepin it real... PVC..

yo i haven't got on this shit in a minute.. but I'm back in action PVC style!!

one

keep uppin'...
 

keep uppin' this shit...

Yo Armageddon, i aint meaning to hate, but this is one of your worst pieces ive seen, you can come a lot iller than this dogg. This wasnt simple wordplay in the least and it was flowing aight but when i first came to this site...i peeped some of your shit and it was madd crazy, a hell of a lot better than this... I remember this first line from that shit i read of yours going "Another day on earth the lord failed to putr me in a hearse" That was some tight shit, this isnt the stuff im used to seeing you spit.
Like i said though, this piece wasnt wack, it prolly beats of 1/3rd of the talent on Open Mic, there's no hate on you from my part, i just know this aint your best shit, you can do better.
Nice overall though, keep at it son...

coo shit
 

nice spit i enjoyed readin, but i kno u had mo juice keep spittin heat, and droppin "simple wordplay"

thanx for feedback...
 

keep uppin' this shit...

ill shit dawg
 

yo dawg i read your flow..shit wuz ill son..keep ya style up..fo'sho

~1

good shit everythin was nice jus fitted right do me a favor & holla bac @ me on this plz
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=16026

Not Bad man, but kinda basic...some of tha multi's were good, but some just didnt cut tha cream...

Keep postin man..

Peace n god bless

thanks for the feedback...
 

keep uppin'...

Not a bad piece, had some lines which were powerful, jus didnt think the rest of the piece showed its style... The concept was simple, werent really no substance to it, had no depth it was jus there... The wordplay was nicely used, more punches thrown woulda showed your ability... The rhyme scheme was the element that caught my eye the most, it was working throughout, internal rhymes and multies were nicely used... Liked some of this, thought you coulda thought of something a bit more original, keep spitting and elevating...

Peez...

nah kidd...
 

of course it didn't really have a meanin' kid, i was fuckin' around... simple word play, nah mean? it's all good, thanks for the comments, keep uppin'...