Switching Styles, Crit Plz!
 

- Realness In Me -

Obsessive, Compulsive, hell nah just the strive to,
succeed -
Aiming high not finshing till the end dont care if it,
takes me a lil longer or if i bleed -
Pumping the fusions through my system sweating it,
all out getting my high a natural hit -
Maken sure i give it my best so no critics fuck about,
so no lies are created no unjustifiable doubt -
It gives me power puts me on my pedastol,
i can do wat eva the powers in me loosen my kool,
taken it all out on you -
One bad look provokes me give me two evil eyes,
a punch of death i get in a zone the plesent dies,
and the hates takes a rise -
Theres no time to figure a pattern or have a plan,
before you know it your out and im waving ma hands -
Murderous by nature Masked in my fame ,
represting this crew but dont forget the name -
DiMeOnd
Tripple the mystery with a hint of bitch,
mix it - spike it wid Xtasy you got the gist -
I dont believe in broken hearts a true player ,
wid no manner and bad ghetto grammer -
Im a fighter a lover the perfect equation to the,
realness in me -

tis shows exactly wat u hold tha realness in ur rhymes to bring out even tha full potential of a tru rappist keep it up one

Thanx, Up

your style is real , and your wordplay was hot
keep it up

hmm girl this poem tripped me out..and the thing is...thats why..i can't place a finger on it..much luv..God bless..1..

haha, what?

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respect for the rhyming ability, like i said before, i'ma try to check out all your pieces, style switch? damn then, i wanna keep up on your style(s) then... peace


signed,
~madd

Like i told the other female in here tryin to write lyrics........YOU'RE JUST NOT FIT FOR IT!...

anyways just work on it
this shit was trash to me but just my thoughts....




Peace.....
1...........

Much appreciated, truth always taken in!

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SHYT WAS HOTT. AND U NO I ALWAYS GOT U HOLD U DOWN U ALWAYS GIVIN ME LUV. HIT ME BACC UP ON MY NEW POST IN POETIC.

Damn Mah...That was Ill .....Nice Style Switch.....Holla At My Scriptures....WuN

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Somebody please point out to me wordplay in this piece..

LMAO..

glad to see u laugh at ma ish ,
glad to see the respect i get on dis board . haha

~1~