Our Piggy Bank (rapverse remix) Feat. Buck.Shot
 

HOOK:
clickety...clank...clickety...clank
the money goes into my piggy...bank
clickety...clank...clickety...clank
the money goes into my piggy...bank

Buck.Shot:
Clickety Click, Clickety Clank, Welcome ta Buck's Piggy Bank
Tony, ya like a Ship that Sank
you aint never gonna Float with my Rhymes
Bitch you SHINE? wont 'see me' like i closed the Blinds!
Hip hop state of Mind, just got a MakeOver
cause not even roc-a-fella can fuck with this TakeOver
The brakes Over, Stand on attention for the Soldier
In all reality, your just me, all i did was Mold-Ya
besides the fact you speak in 3rd Person
an ya hooks are just another song...Like you Rehearsin
little kid stop Cursin, stop playin, I'm sprayin your NOT
Buck's Hot, Buck.shot, a little nigga named Green
Cause i get @ you, an this just on Screen
I could be like a knife an slice an stabb
go American history X on ya ass n lay ya teeth into a pavin Slabb
You dont want no Problems, i find herbs an Lyrically Robb-them
I got the fire in my Piggy bank ta turn you ta BACON
Ya bakin n shakin, i'm spittin n shittin ta make sure your left forsaken

HOOK:
clickety...clank...clickety...clank
the money goes into my piggy...bank
clickety...clank...clickety...clank
the money goes into my piggy...bank

BRIDGE:
YEAH, YEAH, GET MORE MONEY, MORE MONEY (4x)

Hood_Dawg:
Black says he likes vagina but he hates pussy
you probably have one of them that's thick n' bushy
don't you know anything kid they the same thang
apperently you ain't got nuthin ta bang
your raps are boring there's no rhymes and not one slang
you claim you hang with your crew but there's no gang
i make you scared of me like your ass was going to the dentist
i play with you till your mad, angry, and then pissed
you tried ta get at me with your best shot and missed
that's what you get for tryin' ta fuck with this
u just the patient and i'm the fuckin' orthadontist
and i swear ta god i'm bein' honest
you thought you had me you coulda sworn it
but i sting back harder like a fuckin hornet
and i don't fuck with a homo inta gay porn shit
homie you're this thick
see this is our fuckin' piggy bank
and i don't bother with a fuckin' lil skank


HOOK:
clickety...clank...clickety...clank
the money goes into my piggy...bank
clickety...clank...clickety...clank
the money goes into my piggy...bank
(Coin Drops)

Shit is nice Hood, good lookin out my nigga!

its str8 bucks verse was much better...
i give it a 6/10

hood, u suck cuz i neva stated ya name in a OM. i was beefin wit dolla-bill and he u come as his cock holder. now im real pissed off. u dun fuckked up now. and buck shit was fiya, 10/10. hood? yo shit was sorry. fuck u, 1/10

overall: 2/10, cuz hood fuckked it all up

u dissed NOK dumbass

overall pretty good... brought everything to the table... was feelin both verses from different aspects, like i like hood's style better but i like the punches buck did better... decent though... overall 7/10

more feed ya'll....

Buck decent verse.. a couple good multies, wordplay was alright, good flow and consistency you get a 8/10

Hood dawg your verse was wack.. first off try countin ya syllables

You make one line long with a ton of syllabels and the next one short with half as many syllables.. if you just even that up you would be decent..

Example:

u just the patient and i'm the fuckin' orthadontist << 14 syllables
and i swear ta god i'm bein' honest << 10 Syllables


^^ 4 syllables might not seem like a big thing, but if you try reading that bar it sounds so wack, even the lines up, there is no flow in that bar either..youll get way more props from respected Open Mic heads if you keep ya lines close to even


you thought you had me you coulda sworn it << 10 syllables
but i sting back harder like a fuckin hornet << 12 syllables

^^ that bar is better, closer syllable count and the flow is good, u go right from the first line to the second line with dope flow

Just constructive criticsm.. take what i said into account.. that will help you out in open mics and battles

overall you got a 4/10

work on ya shit and youll be dope

pc

whateva stop fuckin hatin on my shit you aint that fuckin good

ehhh not the best open mic i heard recently but it was ok. its was easily better than the original version tho lol. buckshots verse was good it fell off a lil bit in some parts butoveralli give it a 7. hooddawgsverse i give an 8 it was decent flow seemed a lil off but had some nice bars in there. ===========1=========

hood dawg i was being nice aiight, tryin to help your ass out.. and im not that good ??.. im a 2 time topical champion 3-1 in poetry league before i left the site, tag team champion, semi-finalist in the text tourney, 3 time punchline champion, 2 time heavyweight champion in KLL,

dude what the fuck do you have on me you fucking noob, i would own your ass

if u be nice bout it u wouldnt come straight out and fuckin call me wack, i dont appreciate bein fuckin dissed if u didnt want me ta beef u shoulda never said that shit help me out but dont fuckin call me shit

dude it was wack, thats the only way people gonna get better, if i said that shit was nice i would be lying, everyone's been wack before, its nothing, you learn and elevate, i wasnt beefin with you i was making a true statement, i aint gonna sit here and gas u up, im gonna tell you how it is and i gave u some shit to get better, you should be glad for that shit, no one on this site helps anyone, i coulda said yo it was wack and thats it but i didnt

yeah will u coulda atleast say u didnt feel my shit or u didnt care too much bout me and i need ta elevate dont ever fuckin call me wack i never had a fuckin problem or beef with u til u opened ur mouth and call me wack and it still is good if i fuckin read it over

ok then just make sure u come dope in our battle lol i feel a K.O comin