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::..:$lobK::..: vs kyleon
Battle Rules:
10 lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Lyrikal sagionz vs Military Mindz Minimum posts to vote: 400 Check in by: 03-24-05 at 10:17 PM Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in. |
Kyleon has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-23-05 10:39 PM.
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On da real hommie,ya raps bunch of jokes like warner brother
On stage and pulled off a 'B-Rad',I tryed to warn-the-brother Part of the lyrical saigonz?,no wonder that crew is so wack Break it down stat by stat,plain N simple 'the verse' is what ya lack And when it comes to punches,ya always have 'etchnical' problems Like mike jones he gives away his # to labels but they never call him Ya battle stats has a 'virus',since its 'invested' with newbies So really he aint hard he's more like 'soft meat',he's all 'chewy' The lastbar isnt a thing for skilled rappers,so go get a ghost writer Cuz slobk verse couldnt 'hangover' mine if he pulled a 'all nighter'....werd g'luck |
::..:$lobK::..: has ACCEPTED this battle on 03-23-05 11:49 PM.
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Build A Rhyme..Cuz I Could Tell U Aint A Lyric Child.. And Ill "Salute" U Da Loss..And I Don Think Da "Military" "Mindz".. Treat Him Like A "Fetus"..U Need Anotha "Hole" To Rest In?.. Had His Shit Pre-Written..Dats Y He Was So Swift To Check In.. Him Winnin Is Rare..Like Loyal Preist Thats Strapped.. And B..Im The "Military" "Minded" One..U Should See The Wins "I Rack"(Iraq).. U Da Best?..I Highly Dispense From That.. Flowz Said Only "Ill" Heads In His Crew..I Guess He Meant "Mental" Cats.. We Cant "Hang"..With Newbies..Like "Killin" Children On A "Vine.. I Role With The Full "Click"..But He Just Role With "Mili" On His "Mind".. |
Voted For: ::..:$lobK::..:
Wow Both Verse Wass Wacc Seriously................... ::..:$lobK::..: Build A Rhyme..Cuz I Could Tell U Aint A Lyric Child.. And Ill "Salute" U Da Loss..And I Don Think Da "Military" "Mindz".. ^^ Didn't Rhyme And Punch Wass Played 1/10 Treat Him Like A "Fetus"..U Need Anotha "Hole" To Rest In?.. Had His Shit Pre-Written..Dats Y He Was So Swift To Check In.. ^^^ Best Bar Between Each Competitors Punch Wass Ok 6/10 Him Winnin Is Rare..Like Loyal Preist Thats Strapped.. And B..Im The "Military" "Minded" One..U Should See The Wins "I Rack"(Iraq).. ^^^ Wack 2 Bars Above You Just Used The Same Personal Punch Wass Ok And It Wass Streched 5/10 U Da Best?..I Highly Dispense From That.. Flowz Said Only "Ill" Heads In His Crew..I Guess He Meant "Mental" Cats.. ^^Ok Punch Not That Good And It Wass Stretched 4/10 We Cant "Hang"..With Newbies..Like "Killin" Children On A "Vine.. I Role With The Full "Click"..But He Just Role With "Mili" On His "Mind".. ^^^ Wack You Juss Used The Same Personal 3 Times 2/10 Kyleon Ya Verse Wass Wack 4rm Beginning Till End You Started Off With A Punch That Doesn't Make Sence And It Wass Played..You Didn't Have Any Special Personals,No Vocab Wordplay No,Nor Did You Have Creativity Elivate Your Verse A Whole Lot /v ::..:$lobK::..: Return The Favor............... |
This was feedback posted for ::..:$lobK::..:
OMG dayum fuckin SLOBK...lol each time i read your shit..it gets better and better
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This was feedback posted for Kyleon
Checking Polls good shit fam...................~1~
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Voted For: ::..:$lobK::..:
aight, this shit wasn't bad, heres what i see >On da real hommie,ya raps bunch of jokes like warner brother On stage and pulled off a 'B-Rad',I tryed to warn-the-brother -nah, 2nd line was bunk....cause its a t-shirt 4/10 >Part of the lyrical saigonz?,no wonder that crew is so wack Break it down stat by stat,plain N simple 'the verse' is what ya lack -not bad...decent 6/10 >And when it comes to punches,ya always have 'etchnical' problems Like mike jones he gives away his # to labels but they never call him -nah, wasn't feelin it...worded poorly 5/10 >Ya battle stats has a 'virus',since its 'invested' with newbies So really he aint hard he's more like 'soft meat',he's all 'chewy' good personal...hit decent 7/10 >The lastbar isnt a thing for skilled rappers,so go get a ghost writer Cuz slobk verse couldnt 'hangover' mine if he pulled a 'all nighter'....werd haha...best line here....8/10 -overall: 30/50....not a bad verse man....good flow and structure, decent consistency, thought your last two bars were the best, they hit the hardest, and good personal and good punch....but your opener bars i felt is what killed ya...nothin really too special/stood out....and therefore, i think you just couldn't pull this win out, no hate or anything, decent verse, but slobk's was better slobk >Build A Rhyme..Cuz I Could Tell U Aint A Lyric Child.. And Ill "Salute" U Da Loss..And I Don Think Da "Military" "Mindz".. -not a bad meta/concept here....kinda sucked cause it didnt rhyme 6/10 >Treat Him Like A "Fetus"..U Need Anotha "Hole" To Rest In?.. Had His Shit Pre-Written..Dats Y He Was So Swift To Check In.. -decent, nothing special 6/10 >Him Winnin Is Rare..Like Loyal Preist Thats Strapped.. And B..Im The "Military" "Minded" One..U Should See The Wins "I Rack"(Iraq).. -best bar here, it was fire, first line coulda been better though 8/10 >U Da Best?..I Highly Dispense From That.. Flowz Said Only "Ill" Heads In His Crew..I Guess He Meant "Mental" Cats.. -another decent bar, good personal 7/10 >We Cant "Hang"..With Newbies..Like "Killin" Children On A "Vine.. I Role With The Full "Click"..But He Just Role With "Mili" On His "Mind".. haha, good closer 7/10 overall: 34/50.....same thing with you man, great last 3 bars, really picked up....althought you had the worst structure outta the two of you, you made up for it in punches/personals...thought your shit hit harder, specially at the end there.....decent wordplay, creative stuff in there, thats good to see, kept consistent disses, which is good, this was somewhat close, but i think you took this one......better wordplay, harder punches/personals......although, i hate how you use the " " all the time, its really distracting reading your verse....wordizzle.....good battle....no hate v/slobk |
Uppin On This Battle..Vote Up Yall..Crew Battle..Military Bums Vs LS
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Voted For: Kyleon
ight this was ezy to vote on, ky had much betta structure and vocab/word ussage. $ was ight, but nothing special u need to elevate more fam, no offense but KY took this because of his wordplay mostly. 1 Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Kyleon
damn this shit was easy....you obviously had the better verse this was a weak battle but i think you took this you threw better punches, and had an overall better verse Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. |
Voted For: Kyleon
umm both of yall were ok... seen better but ya ok.... Kyleon used some played consepts like the ghost writer line but had some ok punches other than that... some ok personals and good vocab... flowd well and structure was good.. overall 6/10 Slobk- wasnt feelin it as much... shit was ok at best... liked some of the punches but wasnt feelin the personals as much... he had an overall better verse than u did so... flow was ok .... so imma give this a 4/10 no hate to either but Kyleon took this hands down.... good luck VOTE- Kyleon |
Voted For: Kyleon
vote-Kyleon Kyleon-good opener fa real fam...hot ish...punches hit hard here....flow was dope also...structure was tite as usual...persnoals were good....closer was aight coulda done better.... On da real hommie,ya raps bunch of jokes like warner brother On stage and pulled off a 'B-Rad',I tryed to warn-the-brother ok punch..nothin shocking... Part of the lyrical saigonz?,no wonder that crew is so wack Break it down stat by stat,plain N simple 'the verse' is what ya lack not bad.... And when it comes to punches,ya always have 'etchnical' problems Like mike jones he gives away his # to labels but they never call him alright...not really feelin it Ya battle stats has a 'virus',since its 'invested' with newbies So really he aint hard he's more like 'soft meat',he's all 'chewy' nope... The lastbar isnt a thing for skilled rappers,so go get a ghost writer Cuz slobk verse couldnt 'hangover' mine if he pulled a 'all nighter' good closer..it was dope $lobk- opener was ok...punches hit pretty good..and flow was on point..personals was aight...structure was aight not feelin that...multies was ok...closer was not that good Build A Rhyme..Cuz I Could Tell U Aint A Lyric Child.. And Ill "Salute" U Da Loss..And I Don Think Da "Military" "Mindz".. didnt really ryhmes that well Treat Him Like A "Fetus"..U Need Anotha "Hole" To Rest In?.. Had His Shit Pre-Written..Dats Y He Was So Swift To Check In.. ok...not bad at all Him Winnin Is Rare..Like Loyal Preist Thats Strapped.. And B..Im The "Military" "Minded" One..U Should See The Wins "I Rack"(Iraq).. decent.... U Da Best?..I Highly Dispense From That.. Flowz Said Only "Ill" Heads In His Crew..I Guess He Meant "Mental" Cats.. nope.... We Cant "Hang"..With Newbies..Like "Killin" Children On A "Vine.. I Role With The Full "Click"..But He Just Role With "Mili" On His "Mind".. ok..coulda re phrased it better overall this was a pretty good battle...but i felt kyleon came stronger at the end of this match....good battle ya both... v/Kyleon... |
uppin for votes.....bitch got 2 of mine dq.... sometimes its ok to lose hommie...werd
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