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mizz fyre 04-16-05 02:14 PM

mizz fyre vs drama queen
 
Battle Rules:

Topical Battle- Living My Dream
16 - 30 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 04-19-05 at 02:14 PM

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System 04-16-05 02:23 PM

mizz fyre has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-16-05 02:23 PM.

mizz fyre 04-19-05 06:19 AM

Sat in the chair, despair, mom combing her afro hair
Little girl, seven, wondering why life can be so unfair
Mom talking bout a world of opportunities, dreams
But incidents crushed a personality that once beamed

Growing up, times rough, parents no longer, husband and wife
In winter, no sun, she provided the light in her mother’s life
Head on her shoulders, always been so full of knowledge
At sixteen, education her main goal, she attended college

Went through years when the world became a place of anxiety
No variety, acceptance was hard for a black girl in our society
Every rejection steered her away from her dreams direction
On reflection, disappointing, she strived for so much perfection

Now a mother, with her own baby, tryna give her the chance
To enhance her education, realise everything in advance
Never making the same mistakes as she had, having an aim
Making her claim, having control of exactly what she became……

System 04-19-05 12:59 PM

Drama Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-19-05 12:59 PM.

DQ 04-20-05 03:02 PM

Tossing...turning...incapable of getting lost in slumber
Worries filling my mind, counted sheep, forgot the number
Desperately seeking for harmony and internal peace
But the more I try, the more the misery seems to increase
No poverty or domestic rage, locked up in a golden cage
Freedom restricted, progress blocked, prevented a come of age
Silent when I need to scream, living under fascist regime
Controlled by heartless fiend, haunting me in my dream
...My dream...
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Fluorescent lights glaring down, no more reality around
Cruel commands, humiliation, laying naked on the ground
On view like monkeys at the zoo 24 hours a day
Lost in decay due to those orders I'm forced to obey
No daylight! None! No air! None! No darkness! Never quiet!
Violence lurking below the surface causing a riot
No one has ever escaped through those bullet-proof gates
Such frigid sterile environment, caught up in dire straits
A gnawing sense of hunger, treated like a thing, not a person
Oppressive, terrified to speak for the situation might worsen
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Sweaty forehead pounding and ears ringing as I awaken
Atmosphere of unparalleled fright I wish I had mistaken
But I am indeed imprisoned in this bare society
So numb and tortured, slowly destroyed by anxiety
Doesn't anyone hear the soft shrieks I'm giving?
Anguished for my dream is what I am living

mizz fyre 04-20-05 03:43 PM

aight vote it ya'll.......................................

mizz fyre 04-21-05 08:55 AM

vote it up...............................................

DQ 04-21-05 01:54 PM

Listen to the lady and drop some votes on this!

DQ

DQ 04-22-05 12:56 PM

Come on! Vote!!! Lolz...its nice read, good topic as well so read!

DQ

Marvelis 04-22-05 02:14 PM

Voted For: Drama Queen

oh shit it hot man u killed that man it was all good

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Chris Stylez 04-23-05 03:28 AM

Voted For: Drama Queen

Like Drama Queens really nice was feeling it and kinda put me into story mode

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DQ 04-23-05 06:57 AM

Can someone please give fully explained votes? Thank you.

DQ

mizz fyre 04-23-05 12:04 PM

yeah lol.......like structure, staying on topic............

BkBrawla 04-23-05 01:25 PM

This was feedback posted for Drama Queen
 
Checking the polls yo...............................


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